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From EmeraldGrey on March 29, 2007
MERDE!
My friggin' internet went out last night and I was gggrrin'
wanting to read this SO damn bad but,
it's working now and so I FINALLY could. ;)
Wow, now that was an impressive chapter considering that you were
pissed' when ya wrote it? For real? wow.
I am impressed!
Even sober i cannot write that well! lol
I am mad at you for yet another
cliffy *biotch lol*
may you swim in orange peels! grrr.
But?
I am happy HAPPY with you thus far for A.) killing off spaulding,
B.) having Draco rescue Parker, and Harry rescue them both.
and C.) wow, I had NO idea about the hpypthermia thingy, the information you
shared might even save a life one day, so good on you!
All in all?
I want MORE! hee*
Cannot wait for the next eppie!
Ya done good kid! Major 4-D AGAIN! I feel COLD!
I
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From Star55 on March 29, 2007
*hands out more cookies to share* Glad you liked them!!

Another brilliant chapter. I thought something bad was going to happen to my 2 favourite blondes. *Sniff* so so glad it never!!

You certainly live up to the title!! as if you could ever fail from that title!!

Brilliant work as always =)

Love Star!!
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From NightLo on March 29, 2007
Sorry, after re-reading again my curiousness kicks in - but I must ask first - is there anything like warming and drying charms? Since fanfics are too common to have those, I just kind of again wonder Harry's forgetfulness of being a wizard and using magic. Though without any wand in hands, and under state of shock, that would be difficult
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From NightLo on March 29, 2007
Oh~~~ thanks for information on the twins, actually I would love to see their interaction with Parker & Draco more...I believe Lily is just like Gryffindor side of Harry, while Molly is just like the little Slytherin side of Harry (where is Ginny? Sorry...I don't know her much)...but...are they really a princess and angel (sure in the eyes of parents, they are)? But we know...little beautiful girls, with cute characters and lovely acts, they actually can be little cute devils, especially after interacting with Draco.

I must ask - what is the New Year Eve 'disaster'? Please be honest, and tell the truth as soon as Draco and Parker are safe! (I am thinking would that night be the day of Draco's wedding announcement, or either something personal between Draco and Harry..., which one would be?)

It is really lucky that Draco remembered to teach little Parker for swimming, and in the incident, Parker is clever, cool and calm enough to stay safe with boats around (maybe he heard Draco's yell and knew that his daddy was coming - but I cannot tell). He will do great! Maybe he can use his charm, cute puggy eyes and little cunning to win Harry's and the twins' hearts!

For Draco, it is really nice that he wanted Harry to be around, and remembered Harry was cold also - and sure he always took advantage, as soon as they were safe, he remembered the unfinished chat with him. With precious Parker on one hand, immediately he remembered to grab Harry with another - surely he is Lord Malfoy. And I strongly suggested to include a short episode in the bouns/later chapter to describe his near death experience - you know, floating/hovering ghost above his own body and 'seeing' how hard Harry was trying to save him...with confession of love - this clearly could be a moment to 'torment' Harry...

I am sure Harry will stay with them until their wake up...just waiting to see what would follow...between Harry, Draco, Parker, the twins and FBI agents/work...but I have a doubt that Harry is really dedicated to his work, though now he has no past to taunt him, would he give up that easily?
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From Danine on March 29, 2007
Aww, such a touching chapter! I'm so glad everyone was saved. Poor little Parker, that kid has been through hell. I love the added touch of Harry trying not to look at Draco sexually while he undressed him, too! I'm eagerly awaiting the next!
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From misslala on March 29, 2007
Oh and I just read the person who reviewed beofre me, Wiki is right, they did change it to 30/2 compressions. Trust me, we keep up to date at my job since we work with children. Even if I haven't been certified in the new method I am knowledable of it. In fact the reason they did that was because they found that victims were getting enough oxygen but not enough blow was being artificially pumped to orgrans and the like so they upped the compressions to 30 :P Well, I was told that by a nurse anyway not too long ago anyway. KUDOS!
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From misslala on March 29, 2007
You are so cheeky but I love it! hahaha Your responses to reviews are hilarious and so freindly. As usual, I can't wait for the next chapter...it defintly keeps me coming back for more. :) From what I read about the hypothermia and CPR most of it seems correct although I have forgotten much of the First Aid/CPR class I took, LOL It's time to get re-0certified anyway, so we shall see. LOL

yes, if Haryr had rubbed Draco too much the ice underneath the skin could couse nerve/tissue damage, at least that is what my American Red Cross text book says, LOL SO anyway...Let's keep it up alright? I can't wait for more and man oh man, Harry and Draco better ahve some damn wonderful make up sex. That's too cute that parker was able to connect Harry and Draco together...the photo in his desk eh? Hrm...how often did he sit there pining over Harry? New Year's eve??? COMEON!! I want the juice...and I hope it means more sex from those two! LOL Man...RAWR!
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From lissagal99 on March 28, 2007
I don't consider that a cliffie. I can live with it. And I know that you said you've been certified for CPR and looked it up on Wikipedia. But I've been certified twice in the last 2 yrs due to my job, and I'm pretty sure it's 15 chest compressions for every 2 rescue breaths... I read 30. I'm just saying...
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From thrnbrooke on March 28, 2007
I sooo need chapter 12! When Draco quit breathing I was sooo scared. I know you said that neither Harry or Draco would die but it still worried me. And then Parker. Oh I hope he's okay! Must have more!
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From DracaMalfoy on March 28, 2007
*yelps* NO! DRACO CAN'T BE HURT/DEAD! *weeps* *Jumps up* HOLYHELL! YAYAYAYAYAY! You killed the bastard! YAY! Spattered brains! w00t! I'm feeling rather ADDish myself. But yes, I hate you and your cliffies. You're a terrible terrible person, but that's why I love you and your writing! Anyhow, update soon!!! *sends brownies along with lots of cookies*

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From CinCity69 on March 28, 2007
You update pretty quick!! Last time I checked it was at chapter 7!!! Uh... actually what I had said in Spanish was "Thanks for the welcome." But thanks for the show too!! It's been great so far, and you do great cliff hangers by the way!

I don't know if anyone has had a go as to WHY Harry left England... but didn't you say that after he found out that Draco and Pansy were getting married that he had to leave?? I figured he left because of that...

Awe! Finally some Harry/Draco action! Even if it was quick... it was still good!

::does a dance:: Yay! Spauldings dead!! Woot woot!! Although, you just had to go and give him one more perverted rub against Harry didn't you =P But that makes it even better I suppose, that you stick to the characters, and make me cringe just thinking about stuff like that >.
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From chantalmalfoy on March 28, 2007
WOW!!!! I LOVE this fic! I don't usually read crossovers, but I've been lacking good fics lately and I saw that you were updating very quickly so I gave it a shot. And I am SO glad that I did! This fic is amazing!!! I've seen WOaT, but I do not watch it regularly... I might start now, though. lol. Parker is adorable. I am so glad that Spaulding is dead. And I an not wait for the next part to see if Harry gets Draco and Parker back safe and sound.
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From NightLo on March 28, 2007
Finally have some time for more detail review...

I am just wondering what would happen when Draco emerged with Parker...surely there will be a warm moment of hugging and crying and comforting between father and son...perhaps if you are 'considerate', we can also experience a nice moment between Draco and Harry...then after...sure would be FBI stuff, e.g. checking damage on Parker (hopefully if possible, please have Harry cured Parker before announcing to Draco, but I knew this is impossible, as long as Draco read the news or Parker told his nightmares to Draco)....so romance stuff has to be waited for long long time, as Harry needs to report and write a report and explain disapperance in a lift etc...so you see, this is what movies, shows and books told, and your hints are clear enough, so we can get a good guess. Let you know...I actually cannot predict what will happen with 'blind beauty' also, up until now do I understand why the title is blind beauty - and the beast.

Well...it is really hard to 'see' why Harry would leave with Draco, sure Ginny and Harry will get an understanding or a divorce or something, as Harry so is used to live as a muggle and as an agent, there is really little for romance development now! As Draco will leave USA as soon as everything settles, most probably Harry will pay one or two visit (with the twins??), then as in WOaT, Harry will be beep away...after a long time, e.g. 6 months / 12, when Parker gets over his fright or Draco feels safe enough to visit again, would there be formal development...I seriously doubt there will be so soon at all.

I would love to read more about Harry and the twins, we need to learn about the girls more!
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From Star55 on March 28, 2007
You know, this is the ONLY fic that I have left so many reviews for. You know why? BECAUSE ITS SOOO BLOODY DAMN GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ahem, now. WHAT A CHAPTER!!! wow. *cries* poor poor parker. I am sooooo glad that that "motherfucker" is dead. He was too horrible for words!!

I hope that both Draco and Parker come out of the water okay (well, I am guessing that they do, as you say what happens to Parker is nothing that they can't handle, and I am PRETTY sure that they couldn't handle is death - plus, you promised hot man/man sex and if one or both is dead, then that CERTAINLY can't happen)

Wow, that was an awesome chapter!! I can't wait for the next installment!!

Please oh please update soon!!

*gives 100 boxes of cookies to keep you going for the hottness you promised and a Harry/Draco plushie for inspiration* (although I am sure you won't need it, but we all need a Harry/Draco plushie to love lol)

You are a literary goddess *bows*

~*Star*~
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From Danine on March 28, 2007
Oh god! That was a very nasty thing. That poor child. I really hope they wipe his memory of this nightmare and no one speaks of it again. And that sick fuck rubbed on my Harry... I suppose if you're going to die though... that would be something to die for. And what of Draco and Parker?? I hope they're okay. They need to catch a damn break here!

Awaiting the last chapter please!!! I hate knowing this is ending must I must have it!
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