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From Star55 on March 27, 2007
YAY for the Kiss!!! Woot. ;-)

Whoa, what a cliffe!! Poor poor Parker, I feel soo terrible for him, poor baby. Cannot wait to find out that happens next!!

I was almost crying when Parker was hit and it was so sad for Draco as well.

Please update soon!!

~*Star*~
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From EmeraldGrey on March 27, 2007
HOLLLLLLLLLLLY FUCK!
I STILL HAVE CHILLS!
EEEEEEEK!
Tears and fuckin' chills, poor little Parker!
OMG!
I was happy to see Draco punch that bitch of a mother! Yea!
But, dammit!
That sick fuck Spaulding got away!! AGAIN!!!
OMG, poor Parker!POOR Draco! knowing he fucked up and royaly, but I have to ask?
IF Harry can do wandless magic, why in the FUCK didn't he just do
an Imperio or a stuptify or SOMETHING on that Fucking Spaulding!!!????
Why mess with a gun, when you have magic??!!
Little Parker sucking on his thumb...*WAHHHHHH* more sniffles...
Eww, gods! WHAT did that creep DO to that baby?!
PLEASE PLEASE tell me Draco get's the privilidge of cutting off the mans fingers one by one,
and then force feeding them to him, as he slices off his bollocks and stews them in a hot tea,
and makes him drink it, and finally, he cuts off his evil and damaging cock and shoves it so far up that monsters arse,
that he's crapping pieces of it in the afterlife, in hell!
Blaize,Narcissa and Snape hell even Pansy because she's an arse, should all die painful deaths!
Kill of that useless cunt Ginny too why you're at it,
and let Draco or Harry cleanse Parkers little body and mind with magic, like with a time turner?
Oh and let Harry and Draco get together and raise their kids!

AAAGHHHH I am in agony here!
You are evil Luv, positively eAHhg! E.V. I. L.
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
How many more hours until tomorrow??!!!
*sniffles*
eg
ps, how's THAT for an orage peel? ;)
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From EmeraldGrey on March 27, 2007
;)
I feel like I'm *tick tick* ticking up the side of a very large roller-coaster ride.
I am holding my breath, as I am about to hit send on this and
then go and read the next chapter to keep *tick ticking* lol
and after that? I am SO ready for the plunge!
You are welcome, welcome welcome WELCOME!
lol
I am glad that you liked my *apple* *winks* Yeah, too kewl about your
*orange* Well, they say great minds think alike eh? lol
I am very excited to see where this is gonna go!
Congrats on all of the kick arsed reviews too!
Ya got a winner here yeah... ;)
EG

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From CrookShanks on March 27, 2007
Go! Draco for punching out Narcissa...but Draco is in sooo much trouble with Harry right now for letting that bastard get away. how far could Spaulding get though???? The boat is in the middle of NY harbor, he's a muggle so he can't apparate or use a portkey and the Coast guard is right outside...so where would Spaulding go??? How would he make a getaway, maybe a skiff with an outboard motor?

With this chapter...I award you as the "Queen of the Cliffies", god I wish it was tomorrow already...I Want Resolution! I Want Justice! I Want hot man-sex! (oops, did I just say that?)
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From NightLo on March 27, 2007
Hum...let me have a short gasp...Graham is moving towards the stern of the boat with Parker in his arm...pants still undone...well, agents are on the boat, if Cissa is caught and guards are on the boat, then the norm will be...in order to escape, Parker must be thrown away, either on the boat or in the water, then Graham will jump...however, his pants are loosen, that will catch his legs and he will fall...either on board or into the water...

Or...when Graham reaches the board, as they are guards on his boat, he tries to take Parker with him into the water, either swimming away or drowning him...but as soon as Graham reaches the rail...his pants catch him and Parker falls...

Or...since nothing is known in the enclosed area of the stern and it is dark, there maybe some firecrackers, and Graham will try to burn Parker with it...as Parker may like firework...as Graham tries to back up with Parker and firecrackers in his hands...again his pants catch him, something happen and he is caught...

So the above guessing tell us - we must be tidy and neat in all dangerous moments, and remember - don't wear any cloak, just in case it catches with the spines/turbo...
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From NightLo on March 27, 2007
...since magic is used in this chapter...but maybe Harry has not used magic for so long and being trained as an agent, so I just wonder...why does Draco not use the accio to get back Parker? As you said, Draco is used to magic, so even without a wand, a simple spell like this can be done wandlessly...yeahyeah...too hothead with anger and worry for Parker...When does he change into Ron? Does Pansy have so much impact?

Since they are on the boat, and Draco has already beated Cissa to unconsciousnes with guard around, so that means only one way to escape...then my question is somewhat answered...still when I have more time, I will re-read for clarification. But I will assume...the climax will not include too many special agents as they are still on their way...

Another thought for Ginny - will she accidentally watch the record of Harry kissing Draco? That will explain everything!
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From misslala on March 26, 2007
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Hrm...that is where I am...hrm...because I think I must kill you now. COME ON!!!!!! I FINISHED FOR YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SInce you kept reviewing and feeding my poor writers ego, LOL Hell I would even take the bad reviews but damn people are skittish about reviews on here. Bleh.

OK - I want LOTS OF HP?DM SMUT!!!!!! Well I think it's more an expectation after all this build up, hahaha. Yes, I too hate reading stories that aren't complete. BUT DAMMIT...FUCK MAN! Here I get into a story and I have to wait everyday for it like water. Bleh. It's payback...and its a bitch. Poor Parker...Spaulding = VERY BAD AND EVIL MAN AND I WANT HIM DEAD! Narcissa, that bitch can take up the ass from Spaulding...hahaha I don't care about her, she pisses me off in this tale. Snape, him and Blaise better get their due. Please tell me you are going to tell us what happened with them...

HArry and Draco were just too damn cute considering the circumstances...hrm...do they question HJ about his rapid disappearance? I mean you set up the whole camera thing, now you have to follow through. it's not right any other way. HAHAHA Someone has to ask him...I mean so what happens at the end, does Harry go back to London with Draco and they live - squee - Happily Ever After? What happens to Ginny, I mean, yeah lets kill her, kill her til she's dead! HAHAHA The nerve...no understanding in the woman. Pretty Lily and Molly...how adorbale. So you have seriously never read the HP books or seen the movies? (Or did I just read that wrong or what?)
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From xXBrokenDreamsXx on March 26, 2007
Haha! Harry's going to kick his ass now! WHOO! :bounces up in down in computer chair::

Oh and yes, the emails did make me laugh. Alot. lol
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From DracaMalfoy on March 26, 2007
YAYAYAY! I wanted to review this last night, but my interweb died! BLARG! But anyhow, loved it! But still no Draco *pouts*. Tis okay, email me again if you need more help. I did send back a respnse if you didn't get it I'll resend it. Okay, so alleles are DNA markers. Identical teins have identical DNA, but different finger prints....odd. But anyhow, if you have 11 in common, you're a mother/father and 7 is brother/sister me thinks....but yes, that's all for now! *sends cookies*

-Draca

PS I'm glad you enjoyed I Promise You! Your review made me laugh hysterically.
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From Danine on March 26, 2007
He knows where they are!!!!!!!!! Woooo! I'm so tense reading this, I'm going to snap!
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From Star55 on March 26, 2007
Gah, kill the bitch. LOL. sorry, I'm not much of a Ginny fan and I never have been. But, don't make it too horrible (softie at heart *g*)

Thanks for the emails and for updating!! Yay to updates!!!!! (I should follow suite and update my fic, but I've just finished chapter 10 and am waiting to get it back from my beta)

Can't wait to see what happens next *sits on edge of seat in anticipation* I think I will die if I have to wait much longer lol.

Thanks again for the update!! You rock!!! =)

~*Star*~
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From CrookShanks on March 25, 2007
Ginny..pfft...throw her in front of a bus for all I care. Harsh, I know...she is just one character I love to hate...as far as I can tell, she has no redeeming qualities other than being related to a family that Harry once cared for. For the sake of your story, have her get caught in the crossfire somewhere and have Narcissa kill her. wrong place, wrong time...

it seems as though alot of your characters have forgotten their magic...no glamours have been used to disguise, no potions so far (polyjuice, for instance), side-along apparition...

Still it's a very well done story, and I have enjoyed reading. I am really looking forward to future chapters.
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From NightLo on March 25, 2007
So finally thoughts kick in and everything sets in line...really looking forward to the climax...BTW, has Draco trained Parker to swim? Just in case?

It is really reasonable for Snape and Blaise to have phones and internet as they really needed to contact with Squalding, as they have planned for half year, that time would train them to be an expert already...but still they knew too little with muggle's technology, though Squalding may know, and is clever enough to get a prepaid untraceable phone...this still expose their weakness...ah...I would hightly recommend worldwide Ministries of Magic to learn about newsest technology!

For reason of Harry leaving England, actually you have given enough hints, but I wonder which event happened first? The announcement of Draco's wedding/engagement with Pansy? Or Harry getting Ginny pregnant and married? As Harry has left for 6 years, and the twins are 5 years old, that only meant...when Ginny was pregnant and known, Harry has already decided to marry her...but did this decision made after the announcement, so Harry added another one of leaving? Now we wait for you to give more hints on the sequence of event...

BTW, I hope when the forensics trying to get Draco's blood, they would have a good excuse and say Draco from another break down...please let my wish come true...

For bouns track, Snape, it is good to have both - you know, portraying him with brilliant plan and evil grin at first (imagining himself of getting revenge), then when Blaise called and every plan went astray...wow...the expression of Snape will be priceless...For Harry/Darco...if the confrontation cannot be made in the climax, it would be great to set in the bonus, and an understanding of the 2...and some after events like Ginny's departure, argument between Blaise and Pansy, meeting between the twins and Parker...and dilemma of whether Harry leaving America and back to England (if the two can make it and would Ron and Hermione appear in it?)...actually I would doubt, when the twins get their letters from Hogwarts, Harry would have no choice but only choose to leave...

For Ginny, I too haven't got any good idea of how she should act...but getting know of her position in Harry's life would definitely be needed. Ginny, like Ron, can do great when necessary, it is only now she feels uncertain, not needed, lonely and helpless that she turns to alchoho...so during the climax, if she happens to be self-loathing, then able to help the team/chase with realization of Harry's love with Draco - she can make it on her own again somehow, maybe with the help from Ashleigh/Elena (?), she would be a Weasley again...
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From Jan on March 25, 2007
You have a nasty way of ending the chapter when it's getting good. Oh but the suspense is half the fun of it all. I love this fiction. Please update soon to see where they are at, and how Harry knows where they are. ^_^
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From misslala on March 25, 2007
Evvvvvvvvil! hahaha I WANT MORE!
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