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From xXBrokenDreamsXx on March 25, 2007
AHH! Curses! You always leave me on the edge of my seat! Loved the chapter!
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From Danine on March 25, 2007
Eek! Another gut-wrenching chapter! I'm so nervous for that poor little boy. Draco and Harry sound like they are in disasterous marriages... they should like... make out or something. (hehe I'm bad)

I can't wait for the next chapter, and soon! I'm dying here!

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From NightLo on March 25, 2007
Since I haven't seen any episode of without a trace...does 'zero time' mean the time that everything kicks in and chasing/capturing starts? That means...after one more chapter, perhaps 1 hour or more, there will be the ending...so...the firework starts around at 9pm or later (as the hotel room logged is 12:43pm, now with 8 hours missing)...hoping this time we can get back Parker with punishment on Cissa and Graham.

For Pansy, Blaise and Snape, using state-of-the-art technology is a great idea, you know, pureblood wizard and witch like Blaise and Pansy hold no appreciation on muggle device, they sure don't know anything about tracing call, actaully it astonished me that Blaise has a phone in his home, as well as Snape (why does Blaise not firecall Snape instead of using phone? Maybe it would be difficult to get out of bed and get dirty...)...so now we have Snape on our hands, and I am really looking forward to that bonus track on Snape...just wonder, would that be planning part or punishment scene?

I do agree that it is better for Draco now to know nothing happening with regard to Parker, though he still will be shocked, but it is better to have Parker in his arm until revealing...or else he will be closed to break down again, though that gives more chance of having him with the twins/Harry...hum...this is a dilemma...

After your explanation, Ginny does make more sense, still her idea of leaving is not pleasing...coz, in my opinion, mother should be loving, caring yet with standards and rules, so Ginny should be leave though it is really safe in the headquarter. Maybe I have prejudice on Ginny's role as a mother, however, she may get others in more trouble...wishing that she will discover something and help! For Harry...um...let just say I am really looking forward to the second confrontation between Draco and him, and it is good to hear that he is back to agent mode.
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From Samaelthekind on March 25, 2007
Arrrrgh! Tension! Yer killin us here...but at least we're loving the journey! Peaces, Sam
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From EmeraldGrey on March 25, 2007
Ballz,
Holy shit!
That Chapter was AWESOME!
Ty for explaining so much in your Chapter answer/tangent thingy lol. ;)
You have answered most of my questions, and wow, that's a first for
me to have THAT done in SUCH detail by an author.
Usually it's NOT that much explained, so, I think that's really kewl of you to do so.
Also, the tiny clues you've sprinkled all through this Chapter has me STILL on the edge of
my seat. *what if any is the signafiance of the music box? Is something in that room
a portkey just waiting to be activated? Som any questions!

I also like how you've given your story a 'split apple' view too.

If you cut an apple in half from the stem down, it splits, but it's not perfectly.
One side is always gonna be a bit more than the other.
We are seeing the view from so many perspectives, and while
on the other side, we've had a glimpse, there is STILL more to show and share.
I really like how you have even *extras* of this story waiting for us in the wings too.
I loved the fast pace, and I cannot wait for the next *episode!*
Brilliant writing!
EG

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From misslala on March 25, 2007
Doh, another cliffie, LOL Thanks for the email, its cool...Ok I see what you mean about it being a continuation. LAbels are usually lost to me in regards to the stories most of the time. I usually don't step outside what I know - I mean I take personal liberties with my tales, but I can't help it, LOL. I LOVE this story! ARGH! Damn those commercial breaks. :P

So...lets see, Harry leaves Draco on the edge of his seat as he tries to find out why he left England...hrm...damn Harry. BUT I suppose in this case it was warranted. LOL I will let you by this time. *I'm almost 24 by the way, so no, I would hate for you to die of a heart attack of shock. I will try my best to have the story completed this weekend. I have a job interview Monday morning and if I get it, I will not have nearly as much time to write. BUt I almost don't want the story to end. It's like a lifeline for me in a way. Especially since it's 50 pages + of something I created in my mind...LOL Well, outside of the juicy characters JK has so lovingly placed in a menagerie for us to toy around with.* hehehe

So I can't wait for more, I almost want to say email me when you update, LOL I hate missing chapters.
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From Jan on March 24, 2007
OMG! I really want them to find the boy soon. I don't even want to think what the blood on the undergarment means. Please update soon. ^_^
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From CinCity69 on March 24, 2007
Gracias por la bien venida!!

Heck yes I know WOaT!! I used to watch that show EVERY Thursday!! But life stuck it's nose in and I stopped watching it! I should though... that and some CSI! Just TV period!! Grr! Damn life!!

Spaulding kills himself?!?!?!? Damnit! I didn't get that far!! That's how long I haven't seen it!! >_< *sigh* I think if he killed himself then that wasn't ver justic-y! He should have suffered a bit before he died >)

OMG! ME TOO!! It made me sooo mad when it was right in their face sometimes about where the person was!! URG!! But then sometimes I was just plain wrooooooooooooong!! Hmm... are you going to pull some twist like that too?! I can see that happening! They're where the fire works are... no wait! They're at the drive-thru that's showing film with fire works in it!! Or something...

Yes, I most deff. like how you write the WOaT characters!! This is the first time I've read a fic with them in it too! Pretty darn good so far!!

Keep it up, and update soon!!

♥Cyn
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From Star55 on March 24, 2007
Whey!! You updated!! Yes!! =) very happy about that. Thanks for your long comment to my review, it was awesome!!

Brilliant chapter, and I have to say is: Bloody adverts!! On tv here in Australia, they come thick and fast, and it ticks me off when I get to a good part lol. But, I cannot wait until the next part.

I was all teary-eyed when I "saw" Harry watching the news broadcast about Parker's underwear, I felt so bad for him.

I have a teeny suggestion *grins* I know that we're not going to get any Harry/Draco loving, but can we get a little and oh so natural kiss between them?? I have a little scenario in mind that came to me from a picture I found on a fan-site. I shall email it to you in just a second, and you might be able to see what I mean (the pic has Draco distraught and Harry holding him and kissing him to make it better) it's gorgeous and you might like it.

Ashleigh's pretty groovy. (I like writing me into my fics as well, I think we all like that at some point *grin* especially as a character that sticks in people's minds - I have the tendency to write myself as a male though, which is odd, as I am female *shrugs* oh well)

Anyhow... please please please update soon!! I look forward to receiving that email that tells me that you have updated!!! It makes my day =)

Thanks again for everything!!! ~*Star*~
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From DracaMalfoy on March 24, 2007
*SQWWEEEEE* Amazing! Although I'm kinda mad at you for avoiding the question!!! MAKE HIM ANSWER!!!! oh my, yes I have a fondness for CSI: Vegas, but the last season or two has been really weird, so I don't watch it as much as I used to. But yes, feel free to email me phrases and what not. It would be my pleasure to help a fellow author! *bows house elf style* And ranting is good! There wasn't any Draco in this chapter...more??? Elena and Danny sound like me and my best friend Matt, I call him Matty or Mattypoo just to annoy him...but yes...that's all for now... ;)

-Draca
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From CinCity69 on March 24, 2007
Agh!! Cliffhanger noooooooo!! >_< !! Keep it up! I love your writing and you're doing a great job! You're doing a very good job with both sets of characters.

I can't believe that you're using Graham Spaulding though!! I still cringe when I see the rerun of those episodes!! >< But it's a good way to use him! Hopefully they actually catch him this time, or kill him, either or.

Oh, and why have they not figured out the whole "fireworks" thing??? It's been repeated again and again!

BTW, how many chapters do you think you'll have?? I know you said you're done with the last chapeter...

Okay now I'm just blabbing!! =P Sorry about that, it's just it really has my attention, and I want to read more of it!!

Update soon!!!

♥Cyn
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From Jan on March 23, 2007
I demand an update...umm, Please!
Love this fiction. ^_^
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From NightLo on March 23, 2007
Again, thanks for your detailed answers, why I am so insistent with magic...coz if magic is allowed, all would be solved in a matter of minutes! However, if no magic is assumed, this would be a fiction of brain and chase, which is more thrilling! Without magic, Cissa, Pansy and Draco can do nothing (sure, not counting wandless magic)...that only leaves Harry and Ginny, but I would really doubt would Ginny use it, as this Ginny is really un-Gryffindorish...

If I remembered correctly, Snape is the bastard that introduced Graham to Cissa - so really Snape can be a great evil, so...use him well...I would be looking forward to it...for Parker, I know, but this is predictable (as there are really bastards like Graham walking among us). With your oath of nothing that Draco and Harry can't handle in my mind, I have set a deadline...just hoping that deadline would never be crossed.

So back to guessing...now Draco confronted Harry with sudden leaving, this maybe another starting pointing for them - actually being Draco and a Malfoy, with Harry along, he can find strength again (as I do agree with fanfiction setting of getting someone back with ten thousands repayment, as no one takes anything away from a Malfoy). I hope his brain would start working again, you know, Slytherin is cunning and manipulative with huge mischevious ideas...his skills can put to good use, and he has little morals to act and punish...

Now...why still Danny and Elanor (?) have not figured out where would they be next? It is so obvious - the Central Park? Or somewhere they can watch the firework easily? Would the twins help the team to figure out, like, asking favour for firework display / drawing pictures with firework display? Would there be more scenes between Draco and the twins, as that is really lovely...how does Pansy doing? And...would Harry be kicked out the hunt? As the threat is still there....there are still many unanswered questions, hope you can update soon!
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From xXBrokenDreamsXx on March 23, 2007
What the heck is Ginny's problem? Mean little bitch. I
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From Star55 on March 23, 2007
Wow. Damn, I want the next chapter!! Thanks for the email =)

I am very interested to see how the conversation pans out between Harry and Draco =) I liked Ashleigh as well. She seems to slip into the story nicely, and not just there like some original characters that authors write into their stories. She has a purpose, other than being Danny's girlfriend, and the other characters interact with her like she's been there all along (which, technically, she has, I suppose)

Great work yet again!! I was a bit "Eep" at the Parker piece, but, you've said plenty of times, it's nothing that they can't handle, but I would like to see Harry and Draco's reactions to it. I can certainly picture Draco killing the bastard if he had his wand, and I don't think that he would hesitate to kill his mother either. (If I were him, I wouldn't either, as harsh as that may seem, because I love my mum in real life)

Loving the development, and I am on the edge of my seat each chapter, wanting to know what's going to happen next, and hoping that it's not too bad (and also for a little Harry/Draco loving, which I think A LOT of people are hoping for lol).

Keep posting!!

Love ~*Star*~
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