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By : graballz

From Danine on March 23, 2007
Oh my goodness... That poor little baby. I hope they catch that guy and cut his prick off! Grrrr I hate him so much!

The rest was great! I loved Ashleigh (did I spell that right?) !! and lovely ending, I can't wait to see what Harry says, ooh!!!
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From EmeraldGrey on March 23, 2007
Ballz,
I am, truly, wow* speechless...*
*gulps* dries eyes...
That, was, the most moving,
tear-jerking, amazing...
I can't even think straight,
let alone um, review in complete
sentences, and once again, you've
left me speechless, and shocked, and
SO on the edge of my disbelief.
The way you opened the *scene*
and then the blast of personal emotions
felt by the first FBI agent, and then, as you honed
his sharp observation skills at Spauldings house,
I was biting my nails thinking about that poor baby Parker,
the blood stained little, ohh so sad!
And what his terrified little mind must be going through.
and then things twisted again, and *nice intro of yourself btw, ;)
But it was really seeing the Potter twins through Draco's eyes,
and I was toast. Soggy, wet, boneless, wheepy toast.
OH. MY. GOD. Tears were JUST streaming when they crawled up into Draco's lap,
but, when Harry saw that, more water works.
I am eagerly looking forward to more.
What is WRONG with me?
That's IT, I have a problem,
I know I am NOT alone in this, I EG am an angst whore. lol
All kidding aside Luv,
KICK ARSED CHAPTER, just when I think, no WAY can she out DO
the last one? lol
YOU bloody well do!
Looking eagerly for the *next* HINT HINT*** ~episode! :)
OH wow, is this getting good!
EG

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From misslala on March 22, 2007
OMG...lol...that was a cliffie...I am sure I am feeling much like you were with me at the end of my last chapter for "For the best" LOL Yes, I wanna know why Harry left, I want the gritty details of him and Draco have their one night of passion and how the hell he ended up with Pansy...hrm...yeah I wanna see Spaulding get his ass killed or something...how does Harry fair with Magic use in America? Has he 'disowned' it? COME ON, give me more!!!!!! LOL

It's rare that I get into stories like this, but I have been finding some excellent ones lately. AU's haven't been on the top of my list, but I coudn't ignore it when you have been so sweet reading my story, LOL. *sighs* I await the next installment patiently.
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From devilfancy on March 22, 2007
An extremely interesting read.
I love forensic police dramas.
Original plot and very well thought out.
Thank you.
DF
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From DracaMalfoy on March 22, 2007
YAY! YOU UPDATED!!! I really like this story...it's so clffhanger - y. And I heart law/crime scene drama waaaaaaaay too much! I love how the girls are already bonding to Draco. *foreshadowing* Update again soon??? *pouts* Si vos pla
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From NightLo on March 22, 2007
Just think of some new ideas...I am no American, just would love to know whether are there any trains leaving New York? Should we block them also? Also as Cissa can put up a glamour on Parker (you know...just saying leave for a while and dyeing hair of Parker to aviod catching notice), so even postering face and characteristics of Parker may be of no use, so how can the team trace the 3 back? Thus...would the team be notified with magic, or help being given from the ministry? Would there be any tracking spell used? Even Parker hasn't shown any magical ability, as both Draco and Pansy are from pureblood, sure Parker is no squib...so tracking spell should work...or has Draco placed any tracking spell on something wore by Parker? Has Cissa obliviate anybody? Or to be exact...does Cissa possess a wand after escaping from Azkaban?
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From DracaMalfoy on March 21, 2007
YAY! You're very welcome and if you ever need more let me know! I actually speak "Canadian" French as opposed to "French" French. I think this key board is broken...damn cheap school computers, but anyhow, this chapter was a bit trippy, although I liked it! lol, need more! Update soon?
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From CrookShanks on March 21, 2007
Well. chapter 4 was chilling & terrifying, I can't imagine even a grandparent doing what Narcissa has done. Kidnapping, maybe, but turning a child over to a known pedophile...turns my stomach. twisted.

Oh Severus you are in for it now...harry is gonna rip you a new one...I imagine he'll come back to England to make sure you get yours. And Blaise, you're dead meat.

Now, a question for you dear author...Harry is still capable of magic, isn't he? at a greater or lesser degree after his final duel with Voldie...are you telling or will it be a surprise?
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From Star55 on March 21, 2007
I am one of these people that imagines the story as I am reading it and envisions everything that is happening. So when I was reading your fic, it felt like I was there with the characters and feeling everything that they were feeling. This only usually happens in a well written story, and your's is DEFINITELY one of them!!

Even though I have no idea what Without a Trace was before I saw the summary for your fic, I have enjoyed every second of this story, and by gods I cannot wait to see what happens next!!

You have written the characters brilliantly, and I believe that the reactions of Harry and Draco (as well as Pansy to a degree - stupid whore that she is, never liked her...) were great! Extremely believable, especially for Draco, who loves his son more than anything, and Harry who just wants to make sure that his baby girls are okay. (Actually, I am so glad that you've written Ginny the way that you have, as I HATE her with a firey passion, as a good slasher that I am, I believe that Harry and Draco belong together!!)

Wow, so enough of the rant, I just want to read more of the fic!

Love Star

PS, If you are sending out emails to people letting them know when the fic is updated, can I please be put on the list? My email is starrobinson55@gmail.com.

Thank you!!!

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From xXBrokenDreamsXx on March 21, 2007
Yet another amazing chapter! Don't worry, I plan on reading to find out! I'm hooked! :)
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From Danine on March 21, 2007
Oh no, it's all right! I'm one of thse people get jumpy at anything. I can write smut until my ears bleed but can't sit and watch a horror movie without my hands over my eyes.

I'm loving how the detectives don't delve too deeply into their cults! Can you imagine Harry and Draco trying to explain that mess? and lol now I know why I couldnt' remember Pansy's reaction. I loved it here though. Dirty, naughty Pansy, having an affair. *tisk tisk*

I am on the edge of my seat here, waiting for more. Please do not take too long to post the next part! AHHH!
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From EmeraldGrey on March 21, 2007
*erie music, spooky voice*
You will look into my eyes and spill the future plot twists..* lol

No really, wow balls, stellar chapter as per expected, dude, you
have totally rocked my socks with this story! I am NOT worthy...
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From misslala on March 21, 2007
Ok my turn to leave a long message, LOL

First off, I love the wonderful FBI stories...they make life worth living sometimes. That cruel build up to the end as you wait on the person to be found. And not to mention Anothony LaPaglia is just too hot for words. hehehe

OK DAMMIT, I WNA TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS AND SOON! I must say I like this take on a story and how Draco and harry both have to speak in codes. And damn if I don't want to know what happened between them. Obviously they had a short lived affair but I need more INFO!!!

It is wild to see Pansy a raving lunatic amongst the americans...very funny indded. But yeah, I want to know about their past and poor Ginny, dealing with Harry's lack of affection. Damn boy is too gay for words and then he goes and knocks her up. What is up with that!? I can't wait for more!!!!!!
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From NightLo on March 20, 2007
Wow...thanks for a quick update. Actually now I am sated - with the knowing that nothing would seriously happen to cute little Parker is a great relief. Though I am no mother, I am a teacher, so I would be distressed by child / teenage molestation. For permanent - I mean permanent - that things would haunt for a lifetime...though Parker is very small and doesn't understand & remember everything being done to him, but it may take the form of nightmares and depression, and I really don't want to see this happening...Also, with the knowing that Pansy does love her son, this is a great relief, that means more chance is given.

Actually I would love to see more Snape in this series, most of the fics described he is really a good guy, so planning and helping something like this is not common. And Snape is a good character, he can do great evils, so I would love to see more of his coming.

What have I missed...yes...would there be magic involved? And England? Would Draco and Harry contact their old acquintances (esp. Ron and Hermione) in publizing that Cissa has escaped and is harming her own grandson? As Cissa is a witch, it is a reasonable guess that she would use this to escape, so what Jack has ordered maybe fruitless - so how can a muggle excellent FBI team deal with this? Again would American ministry help? But...with publizing escape of Cissa and kidnapping of Parker, this may stir greater obstacles for Draco - as his old enemies may take a part, would this story be so complicated.

So...in distress time 2 people can bring together, that means Harry will not be kicked out...then I must wait and see the confrontations between Harry, Ginny and Draco...with a pair of lovely twins!
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From DracaMalfoy on March 20, 2007
I SPEAK FRENCH!!! I would be more than happy to offer you my services, as I already have! Email me if you want to take me up on that! I just wanted to point this out though : "Mon fils, allez-vous se faire voir chez les grecs. Au revoir!" Direct Traslation: "My boys, do go see the greeks. Good bye!" The expression doesn't carry so well. I would suggest: "Mes fils, allez voir le diable...o
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