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From devilfancy on March 22, 2007
An extremely interesting read.
I love forensic police dramas.
Original plot and very well thought out.
Thank you.
DF
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From DracaMalfoy on March 22, 2007
YAY! YOU UPDATED!!! I really like this story...it's so clffhanger - y. And I heart law/crime scene drama waaaaaaaay too much! I love how the girls are already bonding to Draco. *foreshadowing* Update again soon??? *pouts* Si vos pla
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From NightLo on March 22, 2007
Just think of some new ideas...I am no American, just would love to know whether are there any trains leaving New York? Should we block them also? Also as Cissa can put up a glamour on Parker (you know...just saying leave for a while and dyeing hair of Parker to aviod catching notice), so even postering face and characteristics of Parker may be of no use, so how can the team trace the 3 back? Thus...would the team be notified with magic, or help being given from the ministry? Would there be any tracking spell used? Even Parker hasn't shown any magical ability, as both Draco and Pansy are from pureblood, sure Parker is no squib...so tracking spell should work...or has Draco placed any tracking spell on something wore by Parker? Has Cissa obliviate anybody? Or to be exact...does Cissa possess a wand after escaping from Azkaban?
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From DracaMalfoy on March 21, 2007
YAY! You're very welcome and if you ever need more let me know! I actually speak "Canadian" French as opposed to "French" French. I think this key board is broken...damn cheap school computers, but anyhow, this chapter was a bit trippy, although I liked it! lol, need more! Update soon?
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From CrookShanks on March 21, 2007
Well. chapter 4 was chilling & terrifying, I can't imagine even a grandparent doing what Narcissa has done. Kidnapping, maybe, but turning a child over to a known pedophile...turns my stomach. twisted.

Oh Severus you are in for it now...harry is gonna rip you a new one...I imagine he'll come back to England to make sure you get yours. And Blaise, you're dead meat.

Now, a question for you dear author...Harry is still capable of magic, isn't he? at a greater or lesser degree after his final duel with Voldie...are you telling or will it be a surprise?
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From Star55 on March 21, 2007
I am one of these people that imagines the story as I am reading it and envisions everything that is happening. So when I was reading your fic, it felt like I was there with the characters and feeling everything that they were feeling. This only usually happens in a well written story, and your's is DEFINITELY one of them!!

Even though I have no idea what Without a Trace was before I saw the summary for your fic, I have enjoyed every second of this story, and by gods I cannot wait to see what happens next!!

You have written the characters brilliantly, and I believe that the reactions of Harry and Draco (as well as Pansy to a degree - stupid whore that she is, never liked her...) were great! Extremely believable, especially for Draco, who loves his son more than anything, and Harry who just wants to make sure that his baby girls are okay. (Actually, I am so glad that you've written Ginny the way that you have, as I HATE her with a firey passion, as a good slasher that I am, I believe that Harry and Draco belong together!!)

Wow, so enough of the rant, I just want to read more of the fic!

Love Star

PS, If you are sending out emails to people letting them know when the fic is updated, can I please be put on the list? My email is starrobinson55@gmail.com.

Thank you!!!

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From xXBrokenDreamsXx on March 21, 2007
Yet another amazing chapter! Don't worry, I plan on reading to find out! I'm hooked! :)
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From Danine on March 21, 2007
Oh no, it's all right! I'm one of thse people get jumpy at anything. I can write smut until my ears bleed but can't sit and watch a horror movie without my hands over my eyes.

I'm loving how the detectives don't delve too deeply into their cults! Can you imagine Harry and Draco trying to explain that mess? and lol now I know why I couldnt' remember Pansy's reaction. I loved it here though. Dirty, naughty Pansy, having an affair. *tisk tisk*

I am on the edge of my seat here, waiting for more. Please do not take too long to post the next part! AHHH!
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From EmeraldGrey on March 21, 2007
*erie music, spooky voice*
You will look into my eyes and spill the future plot twists..* lol

No really, wow balls, stellar chapter as per expected, dude, you
have totally rocked my socks with this story! I am NOT worthy...
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From misslala on March 21, 2007
Ok my turn to leave a long message, LOL

First off, I love the wonderful FBI stories...they make life worth living sometimes. That cruel build up to the end as you wait on the person to be found. And not to mention Anothony LaPaglia is just too hot for words. hehehe

OK DAMMIT, I WNA TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS AND SOON! I must say I like this take on a story and how Draco and harry both have to speak in codes. And damn if I don't want to know what happened between them. Obviously they had a short lived affair but I need more INFO!!!

It is wild to see Pansy a raving lunatic amongst the americans...very funny indded. But yeah, I want to know about their past and poor Ginny, dealing with Harry's lack of affection. Damn boy is too gay for words and then he goes and knocks her up. What is up with that!? I can't wait for more!!!!!!
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From NightLo on March 20, 2007
Wow...thanks for a quick update. Actually now I am sated - with the knowing that nothing would seriously happen to cute little Parker is a great relief. Though I am no mother, I am a teacher, so I would be distressed by child / teenage molestation. For permanent - I mean permanent - that things would haunt for a lifetime...though Parker is very small and doesn't understand & remember everything being done to him, but it may take the form of nightmares and depression, and I really don't want to see this happening...Also, with the knowing that Pansy does love her son, this is a great relief, that means more chance is given.

Actually I would love to see more Snape in this series, most of the fics described he is really a good guy, so planning and helping something like this is not common. And Snape is a good character, he can do great evils, so I would love to see more of his coming.

What have I missed...yes...would there be magic involved? And England? Would Draco and Harry contact their old acquintances (esp. Ron and Hermione) in publizing that Cissa has escaped and is harming her own grandson? As Cissa is a witch, it is a reasonable guess that she would use this to escape, so what Jack has ordered maybe fruitless - so how can a muggle excellent FBI team deal with this? Again would American ministry help? But...with publizing escape of Cissa and kidnapping of Parker, this may stir greater obstacles for Draco - as his old enemies may take a part, would this story be so complicated.

So...in distress time 2 people can bring together, that means Harry will not be kicked out...then I must wait and see the confrontations between Harry, Ginny and Draco...with a pair of lovely twins!
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From DracaMalfoy on March 20, 2007
I SPEAK FRENCH!!! I would be more than happy to offer you my services, as I already have! Email me if you want to take me up on that! I just wanted to point this out though : "Mon fils, allez-vous se faire voir chez les grecs. Au revoir!" Direct Traslation: "My boys, do go see the greeks. Good bye!" The expression doesn't carry so well. I would suggest: "Mes fils, allez voir le diable...o
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From Samaelthekind on March 20, 2007
Oh dear! Draco and Harry's secrets are out in the open, Little Parker is with a complete sociopath, and now we're all waiting on pins and needles! I cannot wait to see how this pans out! Peaces, Samayel
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From Samaelthekind on March 20, 2007
Never seen WoaT before, but then I rarely watch TV anymore...just select movies and anime, and a lot of news via the computer. I have been catching as many episodes of 'Heroes' as I can tho. I have a great fondness for science fiction :-) I really like this quick paced fic, and thanks for the lovely rec in the A/notes :-) More power to you, and three cheers for Ireland! My family may be 150 years American, but we're from such a rural area in the North of Michigan that it doesn't count for much...still got a bit of brogue and lilt at family gatherings :-) Peace and Love, Samayel
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From NightLo on March 20, 2007
Finally find some time out of work to read...wow - now we know Snape is not a spy and he is intended on catching Harry for his 'work', and Blaise really did join in the kidnap (or how will Cissa know about it...though Pansy maybe too thoughtless to tell her also)...

Actually personally I hate the idea of molesting child with only 3 years old, so now may I ask you a favour - nothing permanent and taunting will happen to cute little Parker? Actually I believe Cissa can do anything to Parker, as she is a death eater and intend on revenging on Draco, but that would really be heart-breaking on knowing awful/horrible thing and death of the boy...would there be some conscience in Cissa's heart?

Okay, back to review, I would love to know whether Snape will appear sooner and later? Would there be revenge on Harry from Cissa and Snape? On him or the girls? As Ginny and the twins are getting to the headquarter, will they be safe? I would guess Draco will live in the headquarter/nearby with Harry (okay - also with Ginny and the girls), would Harry comfort Draco? And actually what has happened between them? Oh~~~~ would Ginny say something rude to Draco?

BTW, will Pansy repay Blaise on kidnapping her son (as I believe she is a mother and really love Parker)? And would the American and British wizarding world involve in it? And...the team - how would they 'manhandle' Harry? Would Harry be kicked off? OH~~~~ there are so many unanswered questions, so please review soon!!!
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