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From DB1 on May 05, 2007
@15. great story, very emotional but good. update soon

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From NightLo on May 02, 2007
Well...personally such cliff hanger is somewhat...questionable. If Draco cannot summon enough magic to place the ward - the same would be for all the 3 unforgivables. At least I have not read / found out if it is possible to do an unforgivable without a wand (even Voldi and Harry, as strong as they are, need a wand for that. In other fanfics, usually they have other natural powers/creature magic to cast it wandlessly successfully).

So either...Narcissa possesses a wand or there is another way to force Draco. Especially Narcissa has spent so many years in Azkaban, the drain in her magic would be much (though we do not know whether the Dementors are still in place or not, but in a prison without your wand and all the hatry around you, keeping sanity is a good question, keeping powerful magic would just be impossible. Even for Sirius, he stole a wand in order to perform magic in Hogwarts... and it takes him around 11 years to turn into animagus... so whether Narcissa could possess such powerful magic would really be...quite impossible - unless Snape has done something already!)

And for the reason that Narcissa can polyjoice as a nurse - a full explanation must be given soon. As Draco only recognizes her eyes after his name is said, has Narcissa polyjuiced? But I believe...even in a state of drained magic (+ imperio), Draco can fight.

Without a wand pointing at him and for such a short span of time, the curse cannot last long - imperio must be constantly casted in order to have perfect control, so without a wand, such effectiveness would really be...questionable, so now my personal guess is...either Draco can fight off the curse (as it is weak) or Ash and Aoife (maybe even Parker) found out something wrong with Draco...if it is the picture of Harry that brought Draco back - that would just be another lovely encounter...but really...has Narcissa got something from Snape/with her originally? (Again...anything on her body would be confiscated before sending to the cell / recorded, that must be something obtained after her escape...)

But given Draoc's background, would crucio and imperio be constantly casted (by either Lucius or Snape) on him for training? Would that area be considered in this story?

However, since Pansy is not around, even Narcissa got Parker, with Pansy nearby, maybe nothing damaging can happen to him. But now the question is - after his drain of magic, can Draco fight of the curse?

For Danny - actually he is really out of place, but that is reasonable (maybe not acceptable) - his girlfriend is hurt, he just arrived at the hospital and knew nothing detail of what's going on, he just had a desperate but negative talk of Draco with Martin...if he ever wants to marry Ash soon, he should show more than that.

For Harry, where has he gone after talking with Vivian? It is unlikely that he would be that careless to not consider possible thing that Narcissa and Pansy can do to Draco and Parker (esp. after his frantic call not so long ago), so constant mobile call would be possible. However, given the situation of the twins, Harry's logic and action maybe....again questionable.

Lastly for Parker, he is really a smart boy, as he understands the meaning of good boy and bad boy so good (but this maybe the training given by Draco), but I must admit outburst maybe good and reminder of how good he is....is the answer...but Draco must be fit for him to cure!!! So Cunning, dark and revengeful Draco, be right back soon!!!
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From melodelic on May 02, 2007
Uh oh!! This looks bad for Draco and Parker!
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From thrnbrooke on May 02, 2007
I'm hoping the three other adults in the room won't let Draco take Parker! Oh I need chapter 27!!!
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From misslala on May 02, 2007
OMG OMG OMG!!!!!!

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From misslala on May 01, 2007
OMG!!!!!! Ok, so I think I have this down, long review here i come! :)

"The girls would initiate it at times, knowing that it was a way to ask for reassurance without actually having to ask, and Ashleigh and Danny always complied, as well as Harry, when he was around." This is brilliant! In all my years of working around children, they need a lot of reassurance about many things and I have to say you have captured this brilliantly. I used to babysit two girls, the younger one would simply wake up in the night and see if everyone was still around in the house and waddle back to bed. All she wanted was assurance. Its so incredible how fragile children are and knowing this I swear I want to be a good parent. After taking Adolescent Psychology I got answers to a lot of things from my own childhood. Made me wonder if I just lacked perception or if we all act that way.

Draco rebuffing the "help" from martin - haha Since I am not as familiar with Martin, please do explain a little more of his character traits, and you can do it in a personal email if you want. I like our little banter back and forth :)

"the little boy played with his father
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From NightLo on May 01, 2007
So at least the twins, Ashleigh, Danny, Vivian, Martin, Draco and dear Parker are all safe at present (as we know nothing about whereabout of Pansy and Narcissa)...Vivian and the twins are going back to headquarter, and they may even meet Auntie Hermione! After that, they would just be safe, as sneaking inside a FBI headquarter without magic is rather difficult...hoping Harry and Hermione can calm them. But after that, who will be looking after them? Ashleight and Danny are unavailable, Elena and Sam stations in the airport and all stations, Jack is at a loss......that's why I hate Ginny for this - a mother should never leave her children unattended! But if she is present and caring, maybe I would feel more unhappy...

Good to see that old taunting Draco is back, but sad to find out little Parker is frightened and hurt...still we don't know whether Parker remembered anything or not, maybe after the talk with Aofie, we will know more. But a detail discussion between Harry and Martin is necessary - as Martin know nothing about the danger that he is facing.

But what's more, I am really looking forward to Snape's appearance...
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From thrnbrooke on May 01, 2007
I sooo loved this chapter! I was afraid the good doctor was Narcissa as well! Sooo need chapter 26!
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From Jan on April 30, 2007
I don't blame Draco for being so protective with his son, when he knows that both his mother and wife can do just about anything with magic, poor Martin doesn't know that, so I don't blame him for his thought's regarding Draco's behavior. Please update as soon as you can. ^_~
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From chantalmalfoy on April 30, 2007
Thanks for the email! You Rock! I was like a kid in a candy store! I haven't figured it out yet, but I will... I've been busy.

Another amazing chapter! My heart lept into my throat when I thought Pansy and Narcissa had Harry's daughters, and again when I thought they might get to Parker and Draco. Such a relief to find out they are all safe for the moment...

Can't wait for the next update. I SO love this fic!
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From Jan on April 27, 2007
OMG! This story is getting more and more intense by the update's. Nice way of making both Pansy and Narcissa escape ;) Though I do feel bad for the guy. Poor Harry he's in an emotional roller coaster. God! I hope they don't try to go after Draco and his son Parker. Ashleigh didn't deserve to be under the Cruciatus. But what can you expect for two psycho bitch? Happy to see Hermione there, though I hope she doesn't start trouble between Harry and Draco. (Like trying to split them apart or something). Hope to see and update soon. :D
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From NightLo on April 26, 2007
Okay, my question about lab report is - would this be the one for matching Parker's blood on the pant with Draco's (failed because of the chase) previously intended, but now I knew the answer - as you kindly pointed out. Since you have mentioned the rape kit analysis, so when you first mentioned about the lab report, I am just wondering would that report be the rape kit or others...

As you promised nothing dangerous would happen to Draco and Parker, so this time it turned to the twins, still I am worried about them (same for Harry) - as Harry cannot make the move, and both witches are missing and being very dangerous, better to send Mione over to protect them. Martin and other FBI agents cannot help, as guns are no match for magic...would this be able to arrange? Sure Jack will have no argument (as he has no connection with Mione and he knew nothing about their rival past), so with Harry's explanation to Martin that Mione being their old school friend and worried about Draco and cute little Parker - this can be fixed...for Draco, I understand he knew the threat once the information about Pansy and Narcissa are missing; while for Mione, she will understand...

For Jack, even all traces of magic are removed, muggles cannot feel anything funny, and the tapes are cleared by that mysterious helper...Jack's logical sense will know something - this only means another long explanation either from Harry / Mione or step in help from Ministry of America. Probably he will question once more with that poor guard, and Martin about the exact time of putting them in (same as Harry). However, with the lab analysis of exact time of when was Pete being killed, that would not match the explanation by that poor guard...what kind of reason/guess can Jack form?

Sure before putting both witches in, they would search their bodies for any dangerous items, with none being found - that would remain mysterious - but this would foster Harry's argument of how dangerous of that cult followers can be...hoping Jack can trust Harry and Mione more from now on...if Jack ever demand explanation from Harry of how - I have not thought of any possible logical reason yet.

For Sam and Elena - once they found out how Pete was dead, they must give a big thank to Harry...though again logical reason is needed...but I highly doubt would Pansy and Narcissa will leave through plane. Given the stupidness of Pansy but cunning nature of Narcissa...I don't know...please tell us soon!

If Pansy and Narcissa is on the loose, and assum they are not going over to the hospital, but running from Central Park - their next move probably trying to get back to the hotel (as hotel staff may not know they are in custody - sure Narcissa will hide and Pansy will get necessary stuff back) / Narcissa's original hiding place...OR...Pansy will definitely try to make contact with Blaise, then he or even Snape will come over - by illegal means of flooing (international floo network??) or portkey (can this make it on time? Or this is the way how Narcissa get over to USA?)...then we can kill them with one stone!!!

Though I still doubt whether Snape will be in the act or not (I am sure Blaise will come over), but let see...

BTW, how will Harry explain that to Molly and Lily? Especially Lily? I believe some time later more discussio on magic is necessary...for Ash, give my sorry to her, and she will be a great mother, Danny probably needs to make a quick proposition...

You give us a long story, I try my best to give my longest review...XD
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From ANON - Anon on April 26, 2007
Great chapter...I'm so excited to have Hermione there, and Cissa and Pansy on the loose is a good twist...I'm still waiting for Harry to tell Jack about his magic - I mean, can you imagine Jack's face after that kind of announcment? LOL...I think after he had a bit of time to think about it, Jack wouldn't mind someone as gifted as Harry around...Just one note from early in the story, "and by one of his own agents thirty years his senior, no less!" Harry is his junior...Can't wait for the next chapter, and more Harry/Draco happiness...

SyXX
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From thrnbrooke on April 26, 2007
Sooo need chapter 25! Glad Hermione and her "contacts" took care of HJ's blunders. They almost got Lily. Why not Molly as well? Poor Ashleigh! Thank goodness Draco and Parker are safe!
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From misslala on April 26, 2007
YAY! Yes this was a long chapter and DAMN that is insane how you worked their escape in. Damn Narcissa and Pansy for using Cruciatus against Ashleigh. That is no wrong! There is no reason for that! Some people never learn that isn't the way to get what you want...I might have to re-read tis chap though because my dorky butt didn't catch who was missing outside of Narcissa and Pansy...hrm...I mean I thought I saw that the girls were ok...maybe I was wrong... :/ I am glad Hermione is there to help though. He needs it and I am kinda excitied about the new magical additions to the story. I mean granted, I don't usually write a lot into my stories but hey I like reading it. Oh well...take care! I loved it as usual!
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