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By : graballz

From misslala on April 09, 2007
Well I suppose i should feel honored hahaha THAT WAS HOOOOOOT! OMG Yeah that was totally hot! DAMN! *fans self* I think I may have to go pounce the hubby in a bit...again...LOL Anyway, yeah that was HOT as hell. I have no coherant thoughts, I just woke up and I am so ready to get back to sleep. LOL BUT YEA THAT WAS HOT!
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From NightLo on April 09, 2007
Hum...since I don't want anymore 'quick' review, so I have waited when I have my own long free time - sorry for a little bit late review.

After reading your explanation, Snape's actions did make more sense - actually after reading many fanfictions, I found a little bit more interests in him...but so little is exposed by JK. We did know that he can be a bastard, he is a highly accomplished Occlument (?), and he was very protective of Draco (especially he helped him a lot in Hogwarts + taking the unbreakable vow), so your ideas got a huge point.

So...maybe I can only say Snape is really a sadist - he cannot love and be loved, he can't trust others wholeheartedly, he has no friends to turn to...though he may have Lucius and Narcissa, but those two were more like a threat than friends. He had made mistakes of taking Dark Mark, even he turned for the good, he was in the shadow, with only Dumbledore trusted in him (even Minerva said something against him for several times)...he really is a nobody. That's why when Draco turned out, I would say he was given a chance, and where all your protectiveness came from. I totally agreed that Draco asked nothing from Snape (apart from mistreating Harry and marks), so Draco deserved no such punishment from him.

But now we knew everything, if such truth is reviewed, how would Draco and Harry act? Would there be something like conversation scene between the three? Would others be included in the second episode to help him 'think'? Actually I don't care much between Blaise, Pansy and Narcissa, but I do want to read more interaction/discussion between Harry, Draco and Snape. Snape...deserves a chance to explain all his actions (as his motive is such strong), and that may help Draco rebuild his confidence/trust.

However, when the chasing is moved to England - there is a great problem of magic interference! If you would like to keep this like WOaT, magic and potions and fame of Harry will pose a great hindrance...so would Hermione, Ron, Remus, Minerva and the Ministry appear?

Lastly, please give me the second half of the night out asap...though personally I like Draco topping more, but I also very agree with the idea of equal roles!!! BTW, where is our cute little Parker?
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From EmeraldGrey on April 09, 2007
YOU ARE FUCKING INCREDIBLE! THAT WAS woah, HOT STUFF!
EEEE! I am eagerly awaiting round two!
When Harry does Draco! lol
YES! D/H sex! WOOT! ;)
Oh my, I feel like I could sleep for hours and I am suddenly parched...
Very well written, you do very nice, erm, HOT sex scenes, just like I like em too! VERY descriptive!
Ya done good kid.
EG
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From EmeraldGrey on April 09, 2007
I ask you, does Hagrid love furry woodland creatures?!!

*rolls eyes*
OF couse we BLOODY want the bonus features AND sex! We need sex, LOTS of Harry Draco sex in them too!
EG,
who is now gently easing back into the awaiting story...snorts, un BEE leavible! to even suggest that we didn't want it!? Humpth!
;)
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From EmeraldGrey on April 09, 2007
I'm shocked and hurt that you would even HAVE to ask!
OF course I want the bloody picture!!! grrr's
Gimmie! Gimmie!
EG
who is now going back to reading this savorous,...story.
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From EmeraldGrey on April 09, 2007
OOOH! TY! TY! YEA!! An Easter Egg prezzie, Draco/Harry sized! YUM!
lol
I cracked up from your last Chapter reaction to my *innocently placed* cough cough, pun in my review, heh. :)

Oh and now?!
I wanted to wait until all the hoopah was over with earlier today, so that I could take my sweet time and savour
THIS Chapter like a fine wine and large creamy chocolate, mmmm.
I will be back... ;)
EG
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From Suse1980 on April 08, 2007
Oh my god, that chapter (well the second part lol) was so freekin' hot. Draco was just the gentleman wasn't he? Sigh! And I tell you what, Dan Radcliffe can sing to me anytime he wants. I just loved Draco singing and I bet he has a beautiful voice, there is nothing bad you can say about Draco's looks and body so having a great singing voice would probably be normal for him. This was a great chapter hun, and I soooooo can't wait for more. I'm emailing you re: that pic. Update soon.
Suse x
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From thrnbrooke on April 08, 2007
That was wonderful! Need chapter 18! The only problem I found was is Lucius dead before or after Severus finds out. The reason I brought it up was it seemed that Severus found out almost immediately and this chapter mentioned he was killed later. So how much later?
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From CrookShanks on April 08, 2007
Took a side trip to youtube, and you're right...the song is awesome!
WHEW! sexy shirt-ripping (always wanted to do that), stimulating dirty talk, romantic setting with two over-sexed, sweaty, aroused seventeen year olds...Could it get any better than this?

I'm with you, I have no problemo, visualizing the entire scene in my fevered brain...HOT HOT HOT. Hurry with part duex, I don't want to lose the momentum. Oh well, I'll probably re-read this part anyway, take your time. (not really)

Hell yes, I want a copy of that picture!

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From misslala on April 08, 2007
Ok you know you gotta send me that photo! LOL I wanna see it! lol I love it, I can't wait to see Harry take charge again. Don't ask my why but I am very into them as switches. Either can be dominant or submissive depending on their mood. I am really into that...
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From NightLo on April 07, 2007
Well..I did go back and re-read, but still it confused me. If, just if, Draco has led a life that Snape was approved of (i.e. marrying Pansy, conceiving Parker and being Lord Malfoy) in 6 or 7 years, would not that be enough time to calm Snape? Cissa is different, as she thought Draco was no longer her child, he really was a traitor and very much wanted her own son dead. For Blaise, as long as he got Pansy's love and trust (even able to threaten Draco!), he was out of the picture...so why is Snape still being so fury against Draco?

If Snape is really obsessed with Draco, protraying as the only protector and guidance (even against Dumbledore and Cissa), with Blaise's persuasion, his dislike would re-direct to Harry. And he succeed it...so how can very suddenly (at least to me) the plan would change to Draco's + Harry's revenge? Have something happened?

Also if Harry hated Draco so much as shown in the order, has anything happened between them during Draco's disguise during the summer? Or the ten days before the New Year eve? I strongly believe you have held up something between the two and would love to find out more when you update...

Lastly, for your other fic of punishing Lucuis, I have read it but...well, I can only give thanks for the punishment, I still need sometime to accomplish it, sure I will review later!
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From DracaMalfoy on April 06, 2007
YAY!!! I feel loved! Thanks for the credit, and anytime. Yes, I most likely used the Canadian version there...yeh, I suck at French French. *dances wildly for actually helping some what...*shifty eyes* dances more*
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From DracaMalfoy on April 06, 2007
YAY! Everytime I tryed to read chapter 15 internet would die and I couldn't read it! UNTIL NOW! And I just read 16. YAY! Slightly ADDish again! wwwwoooooo *dances* okay, but yes, thoroughly enjoyed it! More please! *waits* I want to see what happens next! NOW! *hugs* - Draca
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From misslala on April 06, 2007
Brilliant...so Snape did all that because he's a complete idiot and can't let go of a grudge against a DEAD MAN! *kicks Snpae so hard his balls cease to exist* What a FUCKER! OMG Oh, I may be adding some back story to "For the Best" so I will let you know one the Beta's get a hold of it, LOL I shall toss some ideas with them and see what they think as well...whee! You are definatly going farther with this than I expected but I love it!
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From devilfancy on April 06, 2007
No problem honey. I know how it is when you get one of those plot bunnies
gnawing at you. lol
Everyone Ive recced this to has loved your story.
I dont know if theyve told you here or not but theyve come back and told me.
Thanks again. I loved your story and cant wait to read more of your stuff.
DF

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