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From Suse1980 on April 06, 2007
Eeh gawd, that was intense. Great chapter, can't wait to see what happens next. Will there be more Parker? And more sex between the two hot gods of Hogwarts? Lol, I hope so. Onto your reply from last review. I am from Edinburgh, (born and bred) and live about 10 minutes away from the castle. Yeah, Edinburgh is beautiful during the festive season, with it's outdoor ice-rink and German markets. It's the only time of the year I venture into the town, lol. I have been to the castle loads of times but mainly for concerts. I'm off to see some Irish sex gods tonight (WESTLIFE, You might have heard of them, living in Ireland) and I seen them two years ago at the Castle. Beautiful surroundings on a perfect summer night, it made me so proud to be from Edinburgh at that moment. Not forgetting JKR though, who I've only ever seen twice in Edinburgh, she keeps a low profile. Anyway, can't wait for the next installment, will be checking for updates every night. Keep up the good work, I am hooked.
Suse
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From CrookShanks on April 06, 2007
Snape is another character I absolutely love to hate...he's a bitter, unforgiving, sniveling coward...he was protecting his own arse here and it wouldn't surprise me on the least if harbored those type of feelings for his godson. A very good chapter, I'm looking forward to see how you wrap all this up in a neatly wrapped packeage.
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From thrnbrooke on April 06, 2007
Sooo need chapter 17! I'm thinking Severus has several loose screws. What he and Lucius did to Draco and continued to do... makes me want to filet him! Alive!
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From EmeraldGrey on April 06, 2007
okay, NOW things are starting to make MORE sense now! lol
Great sewing up chapter, but?
I have a very, very bad feeling that Snape isn't done with Harry just yet. And?
he STILL hasn't made Draco suffer enough.
Also, Narcissa, Pansy and Blaise must be held accountable too.
I also think that Ginny might not be as innocent as she is being made out to be.
Suddenly she just leaves? When she had ALL of this time to do so before?! hmmmm.
Nope, I think our Hero Harry better watch his back, and protect his heart, as well as
his *jewels* and I don't mean his nuts.
great chapter btw ;)
EG
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From NightLo on April 06, 2007
Going back to work in another 20 minutes, must be real quick!

After reading this...I just feel that Snape is a sadist. He has an imperfect life, he is taunted by the great and famous and popular James Potter, later even saved by him (that would be an insult to Snape)! He had greasy hair when he was young, I really pitied him when I read that. He had made a terrible mistake by joining as a Death Eater...but above all, when he realized how f**k up his life was, he was given a chance to correct it...and that was Draco.

Draco was beautiful, powerful, rich and loved, I personally believed that he was everything Snape would love to be - so Snape protected him so much! He was also vulnerable, relied and trusted Snape so much, even more than his own father Lucius...that's why when all added up that would be one protective and possessive Snape and a young helpless Draco...that had truly reflected in the first half of the story. So I totally understood why when Draco returned from that night, Snape would be very angry (as in a parent thinking - how could you be so irresponsible when I was so worrited with you). When Snape had found out what happened to Draco, his reaction would be that dramatic! As Harry long been projected as a mistake in Snape's life, now that mistake had destroyed all Snape's work - Draco's perfect life! So Snape would really be pissed and punished Draco with that evil plan. Even after Lucius death, he really would try his best to...keep a hold on Draco. Maybe I can say...Draco is the only one that Snape is managed to love, and be 'loved/liked/trusted' in return, so he is...in such possessiveness mode.

But what made me fuzzy...if Draco had lead a 'perfect life' that Snape has planned for him (married with Pansy, had a cute son and being a good Lord Malfoy even his wife had lovers), he had no other reason of changing the plan with Spaulding - he tried to focus on Harry as Harry was a mistake that must be punished or even eliminated...what has happened to make Snape change the plan? Maybe when I have more time to read it second time I would find out the answer! Or...would you explain more later?

Lastly I would suggest you to change the escape of Cissa with Snape and Blaise from glamour to polyjuice potion. Azkaban is a heavily guarded place, even nothing detail has been mentioned about it in the JK's series, but generally we had a good guess that in there, no apparation is allowed, every dark spell would be disabled. So glamour wouldn't work there...however, polyjuice potion does work. Basically it changes everything to the polyjuiced person - even with magical signature, finger print and iris...so it would really be more convincing to have that. I believe there must be something left in Hogwarts from Harry for Snape to polyjuice (as Harry is in NY); for Kingsley - sure that would not be a problem...
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From chantalmalfoy on April 05, 2007
Yummy!!! :D So worth the wait...

Now they can go kick some more badguy butt AND have more hott steamy sex. Right? ;)
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From Suse1980 on April 04, 2007
Hey, not reviewed all the chapters because I've been too engrossed in the frickin' story, but I thought I'd better send a review now. This story is awesome, so much action and cliffhangers. I love it. This chapter was so sad, even with the sex. Draco remembering what he had done to him by Snape and his father. I hope you're gonna let Harry kill off the greasy bastard, if not, can I? I live in Scotland and I know what a rape kit is, (I had the unfortunate experience of having it done to me) but it's a bit different than in the States. A WPC (woman police officer) deals with most of it and the police doctor (usually a female in rape cases) takes the swabs and stuff. Not pleasant at all. It's probably better for Parker to be asleep when it's done. Poor little mite. Draco and Harry are going to have to be strong to help with the psychological trauma that child has suffered. Well done on a great story/chapter and I can't wait for the rest. Hopefully Harry offing the greasy git lol.
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From devilfancy on April 03, 2007
Just thought I would tell you,
Ive been recommending your story everywhere.
Thanks again for the great read.
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From Jan on April 03, 2007
OMG! When I read what Draco had to go through I almost cry for him. I wish Lucius was still alive so that Harry could give him the hurting he deserve. As for Severus I can't wait to read what Harry's going to do to him. Hope it's very, very and I mean very painful. Both Lucius and Severus deserve to feel what they did to poor Drcao and be torched to a slow gruesome death.

But Oh My! That little sex scene was wonderful. Can't wait for more. Seeing as Ginny left Harry all he has to do is start the Divorce papers. As for Draco....well seeing as everyone thinks that Pansy had something to do in the kidnapping thingy, and that she also had an open relation with Blaise, that should be enough to start the divorce and child custody in Draco's favor.

Well I can't wait to see. So please update soon. ^__^
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From CrookShanks on April 03, 2007
Just got caught up on the last 3 chapters and all I have to say is....Wow...'specially ch.15...Well Done!

your characterizations of Lucius & Snape, to me, are pretty spot on...It's probably a good thing Lucius is already dead- I can only imagine what Harry would do to him...As for for Snape, well I'm sure you'll figure out something suitable to torture him with.

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From EmeraldGrey on April 03, 2007
Oh god, OH my GOD!
I am just SO choked up right now, it hurts to even breathe!
So MUCH emotion! I'm drowning in it.
I can smell it, feel it, see, it taste it...
I am a blubbering fool right now, and lol I'm not even down the bloody page yet!!
You have my heart in a vise like grip, and
I am daring to move on, to page down and finish this chapter.
You know that old attage, "Be careful what you wish for?"
Wow, I wished for it, but it feels like a double edged sword.
a very humble
EG
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From EmeraldGrey on April 03, 2007
AAAAHH yes! YES! YES! lol I am reviewing the bloody thing BEFORE
I have had a chance to even read it lol!
Just the tempting promises has me SO excited!!!
Will write more AFTER I read it, but just wanted to say,
glad you had a safe trip back from France.
Glad to see you've dished up the hot man on man lourve...yum!
And WOO HOO! Ya updated it, JUST like you promised!
I LOVE YOU MAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
EG who is feverishly off to read this NOW!
;)

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From NightLo on April 03, 2007
Well...I think both Lucius and Snape deserved a well-planned punishment (you know...better let them have a 'taste'), it was really horrible for Draco to experience that, facing everything (plus Harry's hate) ALONE...That would be a nightmare and a regretful event, no wonder why Draco always sat with little Parker and drank in the past.

It really is a sad news to find out they now have a great challenge - just how to get a divorce properly! I agree if the British ever finds out the real reason behind the divorce of Harry and Ginny, that would just be what they need at the moment...would there be a solution after the turning of Snape, Blaise, Pansy and Cissa? Can we use that fact of plotting against them, so Draco could get a proper divorce and a new start with Harry?

Lastly, I am really looking forward to that night and the scene in the park??
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From Danine on April 03, 2007
Oh no, poor Draco! OMG... Snape and Lucius were so utterly cruel!

But the sex was soooo lovely, thanks for that! I just got home from work and it was a wonderful thing to walk into =)
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From liquidvamp on April 03, 2007
oh smutty goodness! totally off topic note, i read you AN about Vector and Cutco...my husband has an interview with them this week. lol
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