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By : graballz

From chantalmalfoy on March 30, 2007
Harry staying in the hospital room is so sweet. And the Ginny chapter kind of made me feel bad for her, but not enough to want Harry to stay with her... ;P

It's too bad you don't know Law and Order as well as you know WOaT. Because a 'british version' of L&O (probably SVU... ummm... Special Victims Unit) would be a better fit for your 'second episode'. Either way I'm sure it will be wonderful. You have a gift for writing. I've enjoyed this fic emmensely.
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From NightLo on March 30, 2007
Finally have time to read Ginny's extra...really tiring of today work.

Well, I must admit that it took a long time to break someone heart and belief. Being fascinated and infatualated with Harry for MORE than 5 years (as in book one, Ginny squealed when she first saw Harry), especially after the first year incidence (as Ron might tell her) and second year disaster (as she personally involved), Harry's knight image was just too big to be probably disposed of...no wonder Ginny would thrill and only be happy with Harry's attention.

But now we knew it was Harry that avoided, ran and hided...he must be in denial to be in love with Malfoy, or, knowing that Draco was going to engaged and married Pansy, still Draco had the nerve to ask Harry stayed with him, would Harry be so broken and started with Ginny, after finding out the newly formed couple. Though he never expected the pregancy, this just gave Harry a chance to start anew.

Still, some faults were brought by Ginny, had she not invited the Slytherins, of all Draco Malfoy, would their marriage be destroyed so soon...Draco must be very enraged to obtain an invitation, raging that Harry got a nerve to send (or in Draco's POV - order/challenge) one - so this just started another chain reaction...brought Pansy, gave present, wished well and showing off...so in the end, Harry could not bear the news of Draco's wedding, and typically flied all the way high to USA - avoiding possible another Draco's confrontation + wedding challenge...

So now I understood why Draco was so peppered up and taunted in challenging Harry even though in such despair situation...and he must be very very happy to hear Harry's confession...
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From Shananigans on March 30, 2007
Alright, 'Cold Case' is definately what i was thinking of!! thank you for clearing that up:P. Great Job. I tottaly know that Pansy (being the bitch she is) knows something!!! even if it is her own son, maybe she really did want to just get rid of him so she would feel no ties to Draco whatsoever. I mean that would be easier (in some sense, the crrrrraaaazzzy one) then just up and leaving your child, getting rid of him so he wasnt a burden on your mind. Keep it up, I love it, part two should be spectacular!

Shannon
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From Danine on March 30, 2007
Bye Ginny...

Wooo!! Awesome story! I can't wait to see how you turn the second part out!!!!
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From Star55 on March 30, 2007
Yay for special features!! (that is the reason I *always* buy the dvd lol)

In a way I feel bad for Ginny, but I can't help but not really care for her. She was stupid to think that Harry could ever get over a sexy god like Draco!! heehee...

Well written, and you still live up to the title!!! Woot =)

Can't wait for more special features, especially that of the Harry/Draco kind!!!

Love Star
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From misslala on March 30, 2007
Well at least he tried to do the right thing...poor Harry. Poor Ginny too...but at least she could have been honest with Harry. Man...that's harsh. I can't wait to see Harry and Draco go flying back to England together or Draco uprooting to America, LOL Though...harry should leave that job and do something else...something where he can be with all three children and his sexy, tasty new mate, LOL Are you going to go into the bitter dovorce stuff or leave that to the imagination? I mean, its crazy how much you have to attempt to pull from this bad boy, lol
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From on March 30, 2007
Ginny is a bitch... update soon!
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From NightLo on March 30, 2007
Just finished...however, this is a crossover between HP and WOaT, right? How can tracing Snape and Blaise mix with WOaT? Would not that be other FBI team/ police work, not THIS team? Or do I know insufficient about WOaT??? I am all confused!

Well, personally I suggested you can add one more episode to end all things, e.g. documentation, interrogation, release of news and report etc, that will wrap all better (or in a more FBI way)...instead of opening a new episode, change Snape and Blaise into another bouns scene...sure there MUST be another scene between Harry, the twins, Draco and Parker...

BRB...
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From EmeraldGrey on March 30, 2007
Ballz!!! YOU RAWK MY SOCKS!
KUDOS for: No Cliffy! *does happy feet Snoopy dance*
I LOVED this!
Yes, now bring on the deleted scenes, footnotes,
whatever your little heart desires luv. You write it, I wanna read it! :)
Ohh, and I was swooning, cooing and making you virtual cookies, cakes and steak dinners, lol
ANOTHER EPPIE!!! YIPPIE!!!
*happy dances through the orange peel trails out of the room* ;)
EG

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From thrnbrooke on March 30, 2007
Soooo need chapter 14 or episode number 2! Whichever way it comes! Gotta know what happens next!
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From misslala on March 29, 2007
Yay! Harry is out of the broom closet! hahaha So cute. Ginnyleaving him...dang...bitch, LOL Oh well. I am so glad you updated tonight I was waiting and waiting and waiting, LOL....Yes it isn't at a close but I am gonna stick around, cause I love it :) I know what you mean about not thinking a chapter is up to par I think that a lot with my own work quite frankly but hey it happens and then I get 25 reviews that say you rock! LOL Which I am now going to do to you!!! YOU ROCK! *giggles* I will wait patiently for the next chapter. You are going to keep attaching it to this story right and not make a seperate or will you do that? Hrm...

GOod for Harry sleeping with Draco and Parker to protect them. :P Too cute! KAWII! Ok I am done now...lol. I gush too much over this story, BUT I am sure you love it :P Feeds the writers ego. mwuhahaha it's great, keep it going.
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From Shananigans on March 29, 2007
All i have to say is "Wow!!!!!!!" THis is an amazing story, really well-thought and just..wonderful! I never was a huge supporter of Without a Trace, but now i think you may have swayed me to watch it. Do you watch the one that the killings happen in the past, and then the files are brought back out for re-exacmination after some new evidence is found? I can't remmeber what it's called, it's driving me crazy, but it's a pretty sweet show and i bet you could incorporate it into a good HP story!! lol, okay sorry im rambling. This is an awesome story and i cannot waaaaiiittt to read the rest of it!!

Shannon
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From DracaMalfoy on March 29, 2007
*screams* no! not my Draco! *jumps on top of him to gove body heat and huggles him* Yes, you would do that to Draco, maybe just in a fiction, but you would do it! I read this last night and had a really long review wrote out and my internet went *KKkKKAAAAAAA BBBBOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMM!!!!!!1!!!one!!!!* so that made me mad, but here I am! Oh my, yes a support group wouldn't be needed if you weren't so angsty! lol, but yes, loved this chapter because Parker is okay, and I'm still dancing for the fact that you blew the mother fucker, or I suppose kidfucker away. A while ago you asked if you should kill Ginny, and I origianlly thought, yes, but I was thinking about it and no. She may be an asshole, but she's still the girls' mother. So that would be causing them pain. So, maybe maim her a little bit, but not too much. But yes, feeling ADDish again...wwwwwoooooooooooo! So yes, I'm going to start making Harry and Draco dolls, I think they'll kind of look like Potterpuffs. And they'll be squishy and cuddly. I have to work on the chocolate stain/tearpfoof ness of them though so we can cry on them with our cookies/brownines while reading fanfiction. Oh my, I think that's all for now. *munchs on some snackage from party* and I send cookies and Doritos, because I have a Costco mega bag that I'll never eat all by myself...*munches* update soon!

*loves* Draca
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From Jan on March 29, 2007
WOW! You really update quick, last I read was CH:8. But I am happy that I didn't see your updates sooner, because it was worth reading all the climax together then separately. Oh and the whole hypothermia thing-y, OMG! I can't tell you how scare I was that Draco was going to die. Good thing Harry knew what he was doing. Well I hope I see your next update, cause I want to see what's going to happen now that Draco is going to be ok (I hope) and He and Harry are going to be talking about their relationship(I think). So please update soon. ^_^
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From Snarrylover on March 29, 2007
i know i havent reviewed for like 2-3 chapters, but damn this is good. im glad i didnt read each of the climax chapters seperately. i think i wouldve gone crazy for more. im so happy that jack killed spaulding. if i'd been the one to shoot him, i would have stomped on his head and reveled in his blood. i hate him grrrrrrrrr. the whole hypothermia thing had me on edge. made me realise that i should really update my first aid training. and our boys are connecting again. i love this fic. kudos to you for writing something this amazing and making me read a cross-over ^__^

cheers
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