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Reviews for A Battered Snape For Breakfast

By : loveismydestruction
  • From ANON - AkaneIkeda on March 25, 2007
    Fucking cool, this one!
    Go on, pleaze!
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  • From CelticWarrior on March 24, 2007
    Love the idea!!! But you need to slow it down a bit because it just seems as if everything is in a big rush o be finished!
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  • From ANON - UniGirl on March 24, 2007
    I'm sorry but your spelling, punctuation and grammar are terrible. The story seems to be all over the place - it doesn't 'flow' smoothly. You need to work on your chapters a LOT more before posting them. Don't give up though - it takes a lot of guts to post a story! Good luck with your next chapter.
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  • From sanda on March 24, 2007
    I like it
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  • From ANON - vampirebabelover on March 23, 2007
    love the story please update real soon
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  • From ANON - imbar on March 23, 2007
    I like it thus far, though that was quite the evil cliffhanger you left readers to dangle on. The title makes me think of crepes (you know, those thin italian pancake things) they are so yummy with strawberries and whipped cream, come to think of it crepes with strawberries and whipped cream, snape with strawberries and whipped cream... *grabs train of thought before getting too off track* anyhow thanks for sharing your story!
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  • From Makovaso on March 23, 2007
    Next chapter please.
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  • From Jicky on March 23, 2007
    very cliche, both the internal monologue and the Snape and Vernon confrontation.
    too short.
    half of the chapter squashed into one paragraph did not appeal reading interest.
    plz chek grammar and spelling.
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  • From Selera on March 23, 2007
    EVIL AUTHOR!!!! MORE!!!
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  • From tar on March 23, 2007
    Your fic seems promising, hope you continue it ... can't wait to read the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 22, 2007
    I don't know. It's way too short for a chapter and the idea way too overdone. I won't bother keeping up with it.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 22, 2007
    Very nice but very short.
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  • From Jicky on March 22, 2007
    an ok start. for a beginner, i'd say u'll improve, so dun get too worked up when u get criticism on ur first fic.
    as my usual preference, i prefer longer chapters. this felt more like a preview. so give more content n substance, would make it more interesting. cuz like this, it reads like any other fics' start.
    i'm sure u'd improve by time, but just so u know, reading through it lacks a tiny bit of smoothness. maybe it's just me, but it may be the phrasing style.
    anyway, i hope there's more to come, n have fun with it.
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  • From mindovermadness on March 21, 2007
    awesomenessessessess!!!!!!!!!!! More.............Please?
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