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By : sunset20
  • From ANON - sayanything76 on November 07, 2007
    Wow! That was just heartbreaking. But beautiful.
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  • From on April 17, 2007
    Oh God, I was just put on anti-depressants, but this is totally making me cry. It's so beautiful! I thought the ending was going to be horrifyingly sad and lonely, but it was tragically beautiful, or beautifully tragic, either way. And my fiance just disappeared (I honestly think he killed himself. >_>) and now I misss himmmmm. :(
    But dude, this was seriously so amazing. I hope you've written a lot more! I'm going to go check! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Kayla on April 07, 2007
    i love this story it was so good. it made me cry!
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  • From thrnbrooke on March 27, 2007
    You blew me away!
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  • From RDWind on March 25, 2007
    I think that was one of the coolest stories I have ever had the privilege of reading. Bravo!
    --RD
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  • From NightLo on March 25, 2007
    ...only left with one thing to say...really, it is the choice that defines us, it is the choice that makes us what we are!
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  • From graballz on March 24, 2007
    Chapter 1--Oh man, why do I do this to myself? I haven't read your story yet....but I read the reviews, so BRING ON THE KLEENEX (it sounds like). Or maybe by the time I get to the end, you will have updated it and made it happy.....(doubt it, but I can always hope) (PS I generally write my reactions as I read, so forgive my impending meltdown)

    Oh jesus!!! Opening chapter and FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK! That's never good!!! OH BAD! RON SAW DRACO!!!!!! I think I know why Draco's there, and I don't appreciate you being mean, Ron!!!!! YOU BASTARD!!!!

    Okay...Ron's protecting Hermio--wait a minute!!!! WTF WIDOW???????????????????????? HERMIONE AND HARRY????? (That's not right!) WTFFFFFFFFFF

    OH MY GOD!!!!!! THAT'S ALMOST WORSE THAN THEM NEVER BEING TOGETHER!!!!!! BEING TOGETHER AND THEN BEING RIPPED APART?!!?!??!?!??!?!?!! sonofabitch!!!! BUT if they WERE together, that means there's hope of them getting BACK together!!!!

    OH GOD!!! That's so sad for the Weasley family!!!! Poor Molly! And Ginny!!! WHAT HAPPENED TO HARRY??????

    Hermione....thank you for being good to my Draco!!!

    AWWWWWWW bittersweet sex scene!!!!! That breaks my heart!!!!!! OH GOD!!! *whimper* Ending with a fight just to survive it?????????????? MY BABIES!!!!!!

    Cancer?????? CANCER?????? THE BOY WHO LIVED FUCKING BEAT VOLDEMORT TO DIE FROM CANCER?????????????????????? FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK NNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's not fair!!! IT'S NOT FAIR DO YOU HEAR ME NOT FAIR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    (PS Nice touch...I didn't expect that)

    And the ending.......totally not as bad as I thought it would be!!!!!! Tragic, yes, but (I have to believe that) they will be together in Heaven (or in death)!!!! If both of them can't be alive, then I'd rather have both of them dead, because at least they'll be together.

    It's more tragic when one is alive but the other dead. But the MOST tragic (and the one that I can't handle) is if they're both alive and just not together...for whatever stupid reason. (With the exception of the ending of Samayel's "All I Ever Wanted"...I still can't handle that ending...it just depresses me too much)

    This story was really good!!! Bittersweet, and of course, I'd rather have both of them alive and together, but absolutely, breathtakingly tragic!!!!

    You did VERY well with the English! Here's the only mistake I found:

    "I have already known that he loved you even before he himself found out" would be better said as "I already knew that he loved you; even before he himself realized it." or "I had already known that he loved you"

    You're talking about Hermione knowing (before Harry did) that Harry longed for Draco. So therefore you're talking about a past event that occured BEFORE a past event, which means that you can't use the present tense to talk about it. Using "had" is better, but actually, if you just say that she "already knew" that is fine (and simpler)

    And saying "he himself found out".......it has the wrong connotation, I think. "Find out" implies that an outside source reveals something to you, and I think you want to say that Harry "realized" his love for Draco, which means that he discovered it within himself (ie NOT an outside source) I know this is a really small point, but it's just my thought. (You *could* say "I already knew that he loved you, even before he discovered it for himself." which ALMOST has the connotation of "outside source" but because we're talking about love--and you can't help who you love; you just love them--then "discover" can work as in "he discovered it inside himself".)

    Okay, enough with the English grammar lesson! I hope that was helpful, and can I request a happy reunion in Heaven or the Veil or the Afterlife or whatever??? lol
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  • From shevien on March 24, 2007
    How *sniff* incredibly *sniff* saaaaaad!
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  • From ANON - Jo on March 24, 2007
    Holy crap, you made me cry! That was so devastatingly beautiful and heartbreaking and perfect. I will tell you I am usually a silent reader, but this story deserved praise. Excellent job on writing this and thank you for sharing it with us readers. I look forward to reading more from you.
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  • From ANON - cirquegirl999 on March 24, 2007
    Oh God you had me in tears! Usually these sort of stories try to make the emotions the characters feel resonate through the words but can't succeed, I have to tell you that this did exactly that. I felt what the characters were feeling and just burst into tears from the way everything was expressed, this truly is a beautiful piece of art. I'll definitely be looking into your other works but maybe not for a day or so if they're tragedies such as this was, I can't take more than one emotional tumble a day! Again, it was indeed a very heartfelt and beautiful piece and the ending was perfect, thank you for posting this.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 24, 2007
    Oh god. That was so good. It made me so sad, my stomach hurts. :(
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  • From Extraho on March 24, 2007
    oh, boy. i was fighting tears after 'married'. bet its not nessesary to say i was sobbing at the end. it hurts to loose someone the way they did. it just happend too often , even in the real world. makes me wish we all had more time.
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  • From ANON - Kade on March 24, 2007
    Beautiful...

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  • From MrGalion on March 23, 2007
    I have to say that you made one of the best Tragedy stories ever.
    Truely remarkible.
    Award Winning.

    That truely is a peice of art.

    (continues rant of compliments)

    How long did it take you to write it? Proffread?
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  • From SnapesSweetheart on March 23, 2007
    It made me want to cry!!

    It really made me feel sad and the last part was saddest of all because I'm sure Harry would want him to continue to live.

    I loved it!!
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