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Reviews for Harry Potter and the Possessive Husband

By : toryamane
  • From Lucifoy on April 05, 2007
    i liked it.. very original, i just found it.. dont abandon it please
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  • From sando on April 05, 2007
    Interesting story. Looking forward for the next chapter.
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  • From on April 05, 2007
    Oooooh! I like it!(Though the real name is a bit, er, crappy... sorry!)Update soon!
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  • From Auroawinter on April 05, 2007
    My interest is piqued. You have an interesting plot here though I would like to point out that its a bit unbleviable that you gave Sevvie so much control over harry.. it kinda makes me wonder if he is going to abuse said powers.. and what will happen to Harry if Sev decides he is doing to much and shuts off his magic ( I hope Im understanding that right LOL)? Another thing is where exactly is Harry standing on said war, is he against his Father or is he for his Father..I understand he doesnt want to be heir but that doest say where he stands. Also why give Sevvie so much more power than the DL and Dumbles when the prophesy written ( which by the way was the whole reason for the attack on Harry's parents) says basically Harry will defeat the DL? Which brings up my final issue.. what happened to Harry's adopted parents and Voldie the night they were killed? You have an interesting plot line going but I think you have a few holes you need to work out.. the biggest being the parent issue.. I mean if Voldie knows Harry is his son.. why did he still AK him?

    Also I would like to ask if you could put spaces between your paragraphs, it was a little difficult to follow because of that. Other than a few mispelled words and the stated above I think you have a really good story going here and I totally look forward to your next update.. Keep up the good work and I hope that this review is helpful to you

    Ja ne
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  • From Hambares on April 04, 2007
    Please continue! Good start!
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  • From Selera on April 04, 2007
    I already like this and look forward to your next chapter.
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  • From Snarrylover on April 04, 2007
    im very curious to read about what happens next. although i do find the concept interesting, your story is going at a very fast pace and sounds very unrealistic. there are way too many changes with the plot within the 1st chapter and there are spelling and grammer mistakes. i also dont understand harry's action. is he with voldy or is he on the light side? either way, it sounds unrealistic. my suggestion is to try to spread out all of the changes you want to make to the plot over several chapters and perhaps get a beta to help you with the grammer/spelling mistakes and to help you spread out all of this you've given us.

    please dont take this as a flame. the fic has potential and im very curious to see where you take it. gods, i love a good D/s fic and i'd love to see how you incorporate that dynamic with with this sexy pair

    cheers!
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