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Reviews for Granger, Why are you crying?

By : darksideup
  • From ANON - Anon on August 24, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From amsev on May 12, 2007
    Ditto ChristyRae75's review. There is amazing dramatic potential to be found here. Please do write more!
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  • From amsev on May 12, 2007
    OH MY! This is greatly in need of a SEQUEL. Excellent one-shot. Wow!
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  • From ChristyRae75 on May 09, 2007
    I think this makes a great prologue for a longer story. I would love to read more about what happens between Hermione and Severus in the future and how they get together. I also think you should ignore some reviews as they sound like they were written by an uptight grade school English teacher who has a broom up their arse. Sometimes you just want to write what you feel whether it follows the "rules" or not. The reason we love fantasy and sci-fi is because there are no rules you can make characters do and be anything they want. I hope you write more.
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  • From DarqueHart on May 09, 2007
    Oh why only a one-shot!?!?! This could be the basis of a good story, y'know chapters! We need the rest of the story! Make this a prologue! It's a good idea and could roll into a nice romance, action adventure. Come on, what else have you got to do until July!
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  • From CryingCinderella on May 09, 2007
    Hrm. Well, I'm glad I'm the first to read it, however, I find I have severe believability issues with it. The first rule of the time turner is that you cannot let yourself be seen, for various obvious reasons. That aside, Severus would never make such a decision aloud, let alone in front of Malfoy, it would alter the course of history and things would end up far more terrible than they are. Neither Hermione nor Draco would be stupid enough to not have attempted to stop the other with some sort of curse or defensive spell, especially not with wands drawn. Severus seemed weak in his standing. It was short, could have been expanded upon, though thankfully its brevity did not cause a lack of correct grammar or otherwise illegible story. Perhaps you could tinker with it a bit. Don't take the easy way out. Finding the solution wherein the challenge does not allow Draco or Hermione to contact the professor directly in person, however much they may come into contact with one another, raises the stakes and makes the story ultimately more interesting. It would also give your readers more time to adapt to what's going on as well as fall compassionately in love with your characters. You want your reader to take an interest in the character and what happens to them. Good luck, perhaps you'll revise.

    ~CryingCinderella
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