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Reviews for Thus Let The Light Shine

By : AriaErna
  • From Shellnet on August 28, 2019

     You stop riding with and so it begins wow you should've done at least one more chapter you like Babylon 5  I would guess 


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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 25, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can please write some more chapters?
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  • From AriaErna on May 31, 2007
    I understand, as far as the words, structure, ect. mainly its because im working w/out an editor, should be getting one soon though so that it do not take away from the story. thanks for the review.

    blessed be,
    aria
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  • From Ithilin on May 31, 2007
    You have a good premis for this story, however Your grammar, capitalization, and punctuation need serious work. It's "I'm" not Im and "I" in the middle of the sentence is ALWAYS capitalized. Watch out for your homophones! "Except" does not mean the same as "Accept", nor does "weather" mean the same as "whether". Avoid using abbreviations for words like "minute". These things need to be spelled out. Work on description. Fill out your story and breathe life into your characters. Who are they? What is their motivation? Where do you want this story to end up? How are you - or your characters, as the case may be- going to get it there?

    Again, you have a good start. Work on your writing and make this story fulfill its potential.

    Peace,
    Ithilin
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  • From catysmom1028 on May 30, 2007
    I like it. Please update soon.

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