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Reviews for Dark Gifts

By : lazycrazykitten
  • From zeldaofarel on July 09, 2007
    Ok, reading on. I like the subject, but you could use a beta. At least someone to correct the grammar. Your style needs a tad bit of work so far as well, it's a bit abrupt. I know that's not easy to overcome, I'm working at it myself.
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  • From zeldaofarel on July 09, 2007
    I'm at the 2nd chapter, but it's very strange to me. You keep switching between past and present tense. I'm an English as a second language teacher and it bothers me. I recommend rewriting it to keep in one tense as it could be a really off-putter. I'll try reading more, but if it goes on, I just won't be able to. My hand is itching for my red pen. I think you should stick with past tense as that is what is usually used for story-telling.
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  • From DarknessOfNight on July 09, 2007
    Yes!!! The twins turned dark!!! Woohoo!! And Harry is safe and back with Tom. The baby is fine!!! Dumbles is dead and Charlie will meet his doom. Great chapter!!! Keep up the good work.
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  • From Aalto on July 09, 2007
    What a relief, he's back where he belongs. I can hardly wait, the baby! And Charlie torture. Please update soon.
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  • From velox on July 09, 2007
    fantasic!!! update soon ^_^
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  • From Wendy on July 09, 2007
    I do truly think that Charlie has ballsed himself up serverly! ^_^
    Go Harry and Go Tom!
    And Go To Next Chapter... (Hopefully soon?)
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  • From RheaSama on July 09, 2007
    ... I feel entirely too amused by Dumble's pathetic, easy death. Heehee. He was undeserving of a dramatic death.
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  • From MrGalion on July 09, 2007
    W00t for the rescue

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  • From bowbow1212 on July 09, 2007
    harry's finally saved. this was such a good chapter. seamus is soooo stupid, how could lavender be pregnant with harry's kid? hope you update soon
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  • From kyuubifreak on July 09, 2007
    harry and tom finally together!! i was bitting my nailes and waiting for the story to come!! is the twins and bill dark or not?
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  • From Jetbstraub on July 09, 2007
    I love it. i can't wait to read the last chapter...........Jet
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  • From Kaitlyn on July 08, 2007
    DUMBLES IS DEAD! DUMBLES IS DEAD!! YIPPEE!!! THANK GOODNESS!!!!
    Lavender is dead! thank gods i hated that little !
    not much i have to say about this chapter, except Finally!
    Gosh Tom i mean you took forever to propose and you choose then to do it!
    i can't blame him though. Can't wait for the Charlie torture and reunion sex!
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  • From Selera on July 08, 2007
    Thank you. Thank you.. but it so fits.. especially with what you just had Charlie do to poor Harry.
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  • From Faschmer on July 08, 2007
    OMG this was so great, your so great... And I'm rambling, but it was soo great and OMG. Okay taking a breath, anyways this chapter was way beyond my expectations. And you killed Dumbledore and Lavender Brown, could it get any better =) Well, if you kill Charlie too, but that will without doubt happen soon. So to sum it up: great, good work, keep going, and can't wait ^^
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  • From misslala on July 08, 2007
    Harry a cold blooded killer? Wow. I wasn't expecting that, even with the little bint's antics.
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