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Reviews for Living in Darkness

By : Thedarkunicorn
  • From angelnomiko on June 28, 2007
    man .. poor draco .. please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

    angel
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  • From ichiruki on June 28, 2007
    @ch 4. Nice! Yes it did get a lot more interesting! I'm happy to see your updates are fast! lol. :)

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  • From ichiruki on June 28, 2007
    @ ch. 3 - wow, I'm really curious as to how he's going to come out of this downwards spiral, if he's even still spiraling that is, seems like he's hit rock bottom. I'm surprised Hermione hasn't more revulsion but maybe curiosity has her attention for the moment?

    Here's how to format, follow everything listed in the link below and you'll have bold, italics, and underline. Be sure to watch where the backslash is, if it's behind the letter it makes everything after it bold, italics or underlined etc. when in fact your aiming to have it just the word between the formatting commands display bold, italics etc. It's really simple!

    http://resource.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600005245

    Oh also, for flashbacks I tend to see that most people set up the event and then use italics to portray the past. People also use italics for inner thoughts

    So here's an example:

    He drew back the curtain and the red leaves reminded him of the blood that'd been spilled. He saw her face.

    "Please no, no more." the girl whimpered.

    He stared at her coldly. It was as if he weren't even in control of his body when he completed the task.

    "Don't move to much, it only makes it hurt more."

    He let the curtains fall. No sense in remembering these things now, they were over and done.

    Ok...so dramatic yeah, but there's a set up, flashback, reality. There might be other ways but I tend to see this more often here.

    Here's inner thoughts (bold or underlines used to stress words -and underlines could be used to list titles to books too, don't what else thought!lol):

    "NOOOOOO" she screamed to herself "Not Ginny!"

    HTH!
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  • From nymphbot on June 28, 2007
    i LOVE this story.
    i really like the dark tones
    and the whole bit with the playing piano, the blood on his hands, and her not recoiling
    great great imagery

    i eagerly await the next chapter
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  • From xsexxandxcandyx on June 28, 2007
    This story is quite interesting && has a lot of potential.
    I like how Draco can still be doing Death Eater things while being his whore-like self as many depict him.
    I kinda feel bad for Ginny though,
    Being raped and cut like that,
    But I guess it's just business for Draco.
    Anyways,
    Update soon,
    I really want to know what's going to happen next.

    Much Love...
    XXX
    Xx-.k.a.y.y.-xX
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  • From angelnomiko on June 28, 2007
    that was awsome .. please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

    angel
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  • From BekkahJ on June 28, 2007
    OK - it took me a little while to get into this story. After the first chapter I was curious as to where it was going, but not really hooked (this may be becasue of my dislike of so many flashbacks - but that's my issue, not yours). The second chapter got me in though. I'm liking the different sides to Draco's character and I'm enjoying the way your story is progressing.
    I hope you'll keep this story going.
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  • From ichiruki on June 27, 2007
    I liked your take so far and beginning chapter. I'm curious as to how this is going to evolve! I'm thinking it's about to get a whole lot more interesting.
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