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Reviews for The Wrong Time

By : snapescauldron
  • From kmplease on August 30, 2007
    thats what ron gets, love this chapter,please update soon!!
    so next chapter are hermione going to talk to rose and hugo??
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  • From CryingCinderella on August 30, 2007
    Dearest,

    You're forcing me to procrastinate. I should be on my way out the door to class. But nevertheless. It was a lovely chapter. I feel as though I don't know that you'd be able to get that over on a two year old, and him take it so acceptingly? I don't know, but I find that in my works as well I have a hard time characterizing what situations would be accpetable for the young children. It was brilliant, Ron trying to come to terms and what not, that bit I really liked. And it was touching that Joe still wants to love Ron...kudos for a speedy update, I can't say, however, that mine has had a speedy update. I've been busy with heaps of other stories, though I'll try to get you two chapters this weekend. I promise. Thanks for being a good writer and not taking my criticisms too harshly!

    ~CC
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  • From VivaLaKitty on August 30, 2007
    I've rather enjoyed this fic, I've been reading since chapter 18, but only recently aquired an account, so I thought it's due time that I review, isn't it?

    I like the idea of Severus owning a winery. That's... brilliant. The plot twist of making Josiah's paternity results Severus and Hermione was absolutely brilliant. I really dislike Ron, I hope he dies painfully, or Lavender's baby ends up deformed or something. But more than all that, I hope Josiah starts talking like a two-and-a-half year old. (Because he is approximately 2.5, right?) I've had a little sister, and they don't talk like that, most of the time. 'sowwy' has to be the biggest offender, because my little sister could say 'can I have my bottle' and it would only sound a little bit slurred.

    In other circumstances, I'm really enjoying your story and I hope you don't end here. May the show go on!
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  • From ANON - crissy on August 30, 2007
    wow i really like this twist of events cant wait to see whats going to happen!....
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  • From CryingCinderella on August 29, 2007
    Oh my dearest. I'm not sure I know what to say here. I honestly feel like the story could have survived, and strong, had you not brought that particular plot twist into the works, though I suppose I cannot bemoan you too much for doing so. It isn't a bad plot twist, just overdone, I feel. It's not wrecking your story, I'm still going to read it. And I'm not calling it a cop out (though other's may) it was surprising. The fashion in which Severus revealed the information about that night seemed a bit too coolly done, even for him, however that was my only major issue with this chapter. That and it hardly seemed that ten minutes had passed before Hermione was glowing pink and Severus glowing blue. I feel like this makes it all too convenient to get Ron & Lav out of the picture, which is a good thing, however, I really feel like you are a talented enough writer to not have had to resort to conventions like this. I find myself struggling at current because there is no 'quick fix' wrap to my story without having Blake get run over by a bus or contract cancer, and without having those devices to aide me, it makes me struggle a lot more to resolve the conflict. I would have liked to seen some more struggle. I find that struggle challenges us as writers, though as I've said before, I feel like you've come a very long way with your work and are handling it beautifully.

    I'm a little shaky on Josiah's immediately reaction to Ron. Lavender I can understand, but before he met Sil/Sev he was still hugging Ron and being close with Ron. And despite spending time at the villa with Severus, he should not have such a violent response to Ron, despite actually being Severus' son. I could understand that he may have thrashed about and inadvertantly hit Ron, but a blatent attack on his father, or the man that he's cognitively identified as father would seem a bit out of place. But this is just me. Of course I've no room to talk, I've got Caterina all over the place between Blake & Severus, so who knows. Good luck getting your next chapter. What on earth are Rose & Hugo going to say?

    Much love,

    ~CC
    P.S. I updated.
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  • From CryingCinderella on August 29, 2007
    My dear,

    I stopped to place the review here though I'm quite anxious to get to chapter 32. I had to commend you on your amazingly skilled efforts at that lemon scene. I know someone was whining about it before. The wait made this one all the more special. You have a good hand at it. Though I rather like the idea of grapes and mud and the like being all over them. Hehe. Unfortunately I'm really rather unhappy to see Molly with a sad Josiah. Couldn't care about twat & arsehole. Keep it up, my dear!

    ~CC
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 29, 2007
    Whoaaaaaa. Kind of an extreme twist there, but interesting.
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  • From rox487 on August 29, 2007
    love it Ron and Lavender deserve what that kid did to them please please please update soon cant wait to read more
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  • From missbliss on August 29, 2007
    omgwtf best update ever. :D
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  • From ANON - annie on August 29, 2007
    AHAHAHHA I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!! what a plot twist!! whoooweeeeee! but i love it and i love you for writing this story!! keep it comin!! i live off this stuff!!
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  • From ANON - pickles87 on August 29, 2007
    excellent twist.
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  • From DarqueHart on August 29, 2007
    If you hadn't given it away with your confession, I would have thought you had planned it this way from the beginning! Of course, Josiah having a more pleasant personality does not ... must take after one of Hermione's parents, eh. Don't worry, it's perfect this way.
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  • From Malycat on August 29, 2007
    You absolutely rock! Please please please continue! >.> I love this story it is one of the few reasons I bother even coming to this site anymore. So please keep up the good work!
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  • From kmplease on August 29, 2007
    IM SO HAPPY, THAT 'JOSIE'IS SNAPES BABY!! Now, how are Hermiones other children going to take the news that their baby brother is there half brother, and how are they going to take that Hermione has found love!! I hope the children understand, and love Snape, but still hate Lavender (never liked her)!!
    Please update soon

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  • From ANON - mariteri on August 29, 2007
    Sweet! Wouldn't it be interesting if Snape tested Lavender's baby a minute later and Ron didn't turn blue? Just a thought. Great job and I hope you update soon.
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