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Reviews for The Change

By : SFPANTHER
  • From VivaLaKitty on August 25, 2007
    So finally I'm reviewing, hey?

    I signed up so I could review this, because your story has -so- much potential to go far.

    I know, I'm a hypocrite, even though you don't know me. I can say this, because even though I don't have any trials going on in my life at the moment, I've stopped updating my story (Another site, another place, another time.)

    So before I go on to give what I -hope- is constructive criticism, you have to remember firstly- I'm a wannabe British Aussie.(We all are, at heart, I think.)And secondly- I'm enjoying your story immensely. I'm SO glad things are looking up for Voldy for once.

    So, onto it! I'm not sure whether you're writing when you're tired or stressed (I'm guessing the latter from some of your more... recent Authors Notes...) Try not to write a chapter really quickly, forget to reread it and then post it up quickly. I'm not sure whether the site's word processor is funny (I've seen it act up in some stories, trust me.) or whether you're not getting anyone to double check your work, but just keep that in mind, because sometimes you see words that are out of place or something. (Like the occasional 'your' instead of 'you')

    Um... I'm not sure whether this is an American thing or anything, but you've been spelling Voldemort wrong for the entire story. Personally, I think Voldemort is awesome, so that's the only reason I'm mentioning it.

    As far as Ronald Weasle goes, I hope he dies by Hermione's hand.
    And Voldemort shall rule the world!

    Honestly though. I love what you're doing with Ronald, having him bashing the crap out of Hermione on regular intervals (Does that sound masochistic?- I've been through domestic violence, not pretty, but it changes people, so I guess that's the point of you doing that.)

    Just before I end my review, I don't want you to go thinking that I'm all crushing on your story. I love your story, I just want to offer some pointers so you can send it in the right direction.

    The bondage sex was kind of strange though. Just a little bit out of place, maybe?

    Anyways, Hermione in Thigh high leather/vinyl boots sounds exciting, so I'd better go distract myself.

    Toodles!
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 25, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Angie30 on August 25, 2007
    Love your story and let me just say that Ron is a complete idiot. He is lucky Severus left him alive. I want to read more about what Severus and Hermione are doing.
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  • From lilbitbord on August 25, 2007
    Family always comes first most of everyone here understands that and will stick with you no matter what.

    Now on with the review, Ron is an idiot!! But don't torture Charlie by sending him to Romaina LOL. Great twist, will Hermione be able to handle Severus's fantasy. Will we see everything in the fantasy? Yes my mind is in the gutter today :)
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  • From DB1 on August 25, 2007
    @7 someone knock sense into ron. hes such a bastard. awesome chapter, update soon

    *DB*
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 25, 2007
    another brilliant addition to what is now one of my favorite stories.
    and i enjoyed sticking up for you. i hate when people assume things and say hurtful things to other. pshh i sound like one of those miss americas.. haha. but anyways. i am glad that you are healthy and as i said before i will keep your family in my prayers.
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  • From RoseEvans on August 25, 2007
    The Five Chocolate Chip Cookie Vote came as a sort of a thing I would do. I love to read, even before I came to the U.S. My gram had a plate of five cookies for me. When I asked her why five she told me it was her highest vote. She never wanted to tell me the truth. I found that out on my own when we came to the U.S.; but the five chocolate chip cookie still goes. I hope your dad is feeling better. have your doctors looked at your thyroid? Try to take it easy. Trust me I'm not just blowing wind I came over here with a seizure disorder and I thank God I work at the same hospital that my doctor gives me my meds at.
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  • From CarlaRush on August 25, 2007
    Wow, definatly a change of pace. I was actually scared for Hermione as it seemed she jumped from the frying pan into the fire! This was definatly an unexpected, but welcome twist!
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  • From hermioneandseverusfan82 on August 25, 2007
    am sorry for the rude thing that was said to you on monday but to clear the air right now it was not me as i was out at them gym monday at the time it was sent. the person you can thank for that is my cousin's gold digging bitch of an girlfriend. and she was getting me back for tell her what i thought of her. and yes she like all harry potter fanfics. and am sorry in way it is my fault i should have log out of aff before i left but i did not think she would have the guts to get on my computer with out my say so. if you and all your reviews want i will beat the piss out of her. and am sure that queenoftheunderground is eather her or like you said a sock puppet.
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  • From catysmom1028 on August 24, 2007
    I like it. Please update soon.

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  • From ANON - Anon on August 24, 2007
    i just am commenting towards "queentheunderground"
    she was obviously not asking for pitty of any sort what she was obviously saying is that she will not put the story in front of her familys health. whoever does not get that has serious issues. lets put it this way.. if you were to write stories would you be writting the story when you baby was misscarriaged or after your friend commited sucide.. cause i know i wouldnt.. so she is not going to be writing as much but she will try.. she is worried about her dads health and no one should put her down for that.
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  • From ariannaqueenoftheunderground on August 24, 2007
    Frist off I want to say how dare you be mean to someone by draging them in the mud because of one little fucking thing they said. when they are not around to tell their side. And from what I read in this chapter your a person who wants nothing but fucking pitty and everyone to feel sorry for your ass. Well your not the only one who has shit happen to them. How about I tell a you fews things scine you seem to like pitty from everyone I miscarry a baby at 5 months and my friend who was gay killed himself because his family disown him.
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  • From slygriff21 on August 24, 2007
    Great chapter! I love how you have Severus completely whipped by Hermione and he doesn't even realize it yet! LOL! It's great!

    As for the person you mentioned, they must not be a true friend if they were more concerned about you continuing your stories as opposed to the health of your dad. Don't let them get to you.

    Love ya,
    sis
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 24, 2007
    this is a brilliant story.
    i can't wait for the next update, but i understand that it might be hard for you to get it out for awhile. i will keep your dad in my prayers.. i know how hard it is seeing as i know many people that have cancer. i can only hope for the best for you and your family!
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  • From RWHandLoraineProductions on August 24, 2007
    Good Goddess Honey, If push comes to shove...screw the story, family always comes first. It's a great story, but you and your father comes first. I hope he comes through this with flying colors and I hope that your biopsy is clear. Please let me know how you and he are doing.

    Brightest Blessings!

    Red

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