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By : chelleybelle

From ANON - Diana on August 02, 2008
thank you for finishing this story. i really want to know who in narcissia's soul mate because i have no idea and its driving me crazy. thank you again for finishing this story.
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From Catstaff on August 02, 2008
Why do I suddenly get the feeling it's a married Weasley? Namely Arthur.

*puts on best Oliver Twist accent* "Please, miss, can I 'ave so'more?"
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From Mdunlap on August 02, 2008
I'm going to go out on a limb here and say that you seem a bit upset about a review. I'll admit I haven't read your reviews, but someone flamed you? Because I've had people tell me that I suck (not that they're wrong, but trust me, they wouldn't know), that I write the worst sex scenes they've ever read because they aren't in first person (writing in the first person is difficult, especially when the rest of the fic isn't in first person, duh), that I don't know how to make pizza margherita (as if I hadn't exactly described the pizza at a place where the waiters barely speak English), you name it, I've heard it. I hate to see you give them so much satisfaction, knowing that they've bothered you.

You have an excellent story with some errors in the areas you mentioned. You don't know me, but in my own humble opinion (cough, cough), I am a good beta. This is probably less than 200 pages, let me know if you'd like a bit of help. I must admit, there were a few times that I tried to puzzle out what a sentence meant, then had to give up.

So what does happen when your soul mate is married to someone else?
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From chickaboo on August 02, 2008
So who's she matched to? Is it Arthur? Honestly that would be just ironic. And it would explain a lot of shock. Unless, can people be matched to a soul mate that's already married if said married person wasn't matched to their spouse by a soul mate test? lol I can't wait for more!! OH! And ice in your wine and beer? For shame!! LOL
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From chelleybelle on August 02, 2008
Karen:
thanks for your response. i wanted to address a couple of points. I am the same author...not a new one. i put it up for adoption but then ended up working on it again because i got so much flack for not finishing it. as for an outline, i do have an outline. i outlined every chapter with what i wanted to happen...a couple of things cropped up that i was not expecting, but the words just came out...i am sorry that you have lost interest in my story. i personally don't like ginny/harry together. i always thought he took her because it was easy....his whole life was a big complicated mess and there was ginny in love with him and already a part of the only family who ever showed him any love and acceptance. why should he make an effort at a real relationship when he had ginny already there and available? good luck with finding another story that you enjoy...my favorite pairings are hermione/draco so i am sorry to say i can't reccomend any harry/ginny. as for cliffhangers, i will probably have one more...it hasn't been filler information, it has been lead up to something, and you will understand when it finally happens.
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From poepoedawn on August 02, 2008
Thank you, thank you, thank you!! As a fellow author, I know what it's like to get flamed. I also appreciate the next addition. I wonder if Arthur and Narcissa were destined for each other???!!! Just a thought. Well, I'll go so that you can get back to work. Just know that you have my complete support.
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From blackrose2606 on August 02, 2008
Amazing story, but stop teasing us!! I'm dying here to know who Narcissa was matched with! Lol.
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From ANON - Misty on August 02, 2008
I'm really enjoying this story and I'm so glad that you didn't abandon it.

I love all the non-canon pairings and your most recent cliffy is evil ;)

In regards to people nitpicking certain misused words, I would ignore it. It's very easy to read a story and find errors but when you're writing it, things can be missed or your mind is skims over it because you know what it's suppose to be. I've looked back on my stories and found typos (This is after I've had two people look over it!).

I usually fix it or thank the person that pointed out my errors, provided that they didn't point it out like a snarky git. After all, this is fanfiction and we all write it for our enjoyment. We're not getting paid for our work or the time spent on creating the story.

If someone wants a perfect manuscript, read a published author that has had a score of editors revising and tweaking the story. Also, if they don't like your writing style, no one is forcing them to read.

Keep up the great work! I can't wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Karen on August 02, 2008
I understand the idea of a cliffhanger. A cliffhanger is to keep the reader in suspense for the next chapter -- to keep the reader reading the story. However, using a cliffhanger on the same topic three chapters in a row actually pushes the reader away. To me, you have written these past few chapters with filler information just to purposely do a cliffhanger. It is obvious that the next important thing going on in the story is Narcissa's soulmate. All the other stuff is filler while making the reader wait.

This story started off quite good. While I would have preferred a Harry/Ginny match, the story itself had been quite enjoyable to read. Then, it started to lose momentum and purpose. Perhaps that is why it was put up for adoption? To all fanfic writers I suggest the same method JK Rowling used herself: an outline. She outlined the entire series before she started writing the story. That way she knew where she was going with the story. It seems to me that this story never really had a complete outline, and now with a new author it appears to be the same. Writing chapter by chapter, with no clear goal in mind, just doesn't work.

All of these things combined have made me lose interest in this story.
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From ANON - Nika Solntsova on August 02, 2008
I love that you update so often! Keep it up!
And yes you're killing us all with your cliff-hanger.
Is it Kingsley? Do tell!!
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From distinctlyME on August 02, 2008
UNBELIEVABLE!!!!!!!!! *sigh* oh dear, when I said three chapter in one week, I meant on with the answer we're all dying to hear. hahaha.

okay so a few notes in my review.

At this point Ginny was obviously not going to her wedding night pure. They had put the cart before the horse and there was no way to back it back up I laughed at that hysterically. God I love the horse and cart reference. I've never heard that before, but I certainly like it.

As for Molly, well she grated on my nerves this chapter. She is way to tyrannical(is that a word hah) sometimes. Even in the books it was a bit much for me. Sweet woman, loving mother, ut man oh man does she need to control lives. But I deny ever saying this if she were to hear it. *shudders*

I was a little disturbed at the Ginny and Blaise after sex scene. POOR Mr. Weasley. I mean it was funny, but it was like uber humiliating, and I could just feel for the Fathers. Especially with the "lick me" and "fuck me" comments he obviously heard. I mean c'mon that is his baby girl. I guess I would have toned it down a bit. But thats just because I was humiliated reading it. hahaha I'm not a prude I swear!!

I'm so ma at you about Narcissa though. Death will come if you don't update soon and have her match put in the chapter. Slow, agonizing, death!!

Well Enjoy your weekend!! ;) Hope it's lovely.
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From smmz79 on August 02, 2008
AAAAHHHHH omg not another cliffie.... but it is fun to think ok she is gonna tell us then you don't it is kind of funny.... ok so i loved luna with fred and angelina esp when she made the comment about fred looking good naked bc she knows what george looks like... yummy scene with blaise and ginny!!!! great job!!!!
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From ANON - Anika Kitty on August 02, 2008
ok...first off....OH MY GOD!!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!! WHAT THE HELL!!! *cough* now that that is out of my system i give you kudos for having us all jumping up and down thinking we are gonna know who her match was and then poof! you prove us wrong by leaving a cliff hanger...i just gotta say thats ouch...but cool i would soo do it too ^_^ many props and kudos! cant wait till the next one ^_^
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From genna on August 02, 2008
Argus Filch?

Who is an "oh bloody hell"?

Tom Riddle is dead already.

Goyle or Crabbe?
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From blondpierogi on August 02, 2008
hello. awesome chapter. finally Alice remember who Neville is. and omg ur evil. LOL :-) Leaving such a cliffy. oooh i cannot wait to find out who it is. love ur work!!!
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