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By : PensievePerson

From screamguy on July 09, 2008
Yeah that was pretty awful. I didn't consider the snake screwing them both at once.... *laughs in horror*
Well, I have to say your story has inspired me to make mine more foul and loathsome than previously thought of, since for the longest time I haven't progressed much due to the fact that I've been torn between two options, extremely revolting or just more censored. So I'm contemplating, the more hideous, the better, but not stretching it. I am almost sad that your fic is coming to an end for me ... /:(
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From screamguy on July 09, 2008
O.o He . . . slurped her menses.. how lovely. Well, if you really wanted to base this off Nazi Germany and be more accurate, *assuming that voldemort is based off of Hitler* then you should have given him a fecal matter fetish since Hitler was rumoured to have one >DDD. THe PWP is good, I think I can understand what you mean about how difficult it is to write because I'm one of those people who have alot of trouble writing it as well. :P
Voldemort seems to gravitate towards inserting things into anuses, which is almost like a shit fetish but not quite. *shudders* I can't believe all the people in this fic that rim each other >P... you would think that they would be concerned with cleanslyness at least and thoroughly scorgify or whtever the area they will be inserting their tongues... Ech... lol. Actually, the toe fetish wasn't really that bad, in comparence with the child rape.... I actually enjoyed these PWP chapters profusely. Making her sit on Lucius's face was a tad extreme, but then again, I was actually anticipating Voldemort to raise Lucius up in the air with his wand and humiliate him in some rather inventive yet revolting manner as only he can. So I'm wondering, since Nagini is joining them in the room, perhaps there will be a part for Naginin in the chapters ahead?
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From screamguy on July 09, 2008
Oh goody an unexpected plot twist. This makes it much more intriuging... *rubs hands together gleefully* Lucius drinking the potion in Narcissa's stead. Too bad for Voldemort, looks like he won't get his
>D
"corpse action" after all, *as Bellatrix doesn't realize she'd be doing him a favor by drugging Narcissa with dreamless sleep*.
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From screamguy on July 08, 2008
Ugh. Greyback has his own agenda doesn't he? Good thing he isn't governed by what others think of him, bizarrely enough, I actually envy that about the revolting , unscruplous werewolf. For all of his vices he seems not to give damn what anyone else thinks of him. Also I occasionally feel that he is a deranged child trapped in a werewolve's body, because he just seems very childlike in his mental capacity and in that he has no will or discipline ot speak of, in the manner of a child. >>>> god how it must be difficult to have one's home so thoroughly and humiliatingly ruined, not only physically but I am sure the imagery will be a dreay companion to Lucius for years to come of how his house was desecrated. I wonder what Voldemort is going to do to Narcissa? *strokes chin thoughtfully* Since everything else has been so wondferully descript, I can only ponder the possibilities.
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From screamguy on July 08, 2008
I imagine Narcissa's humiliation is extremely hard to swallow for her, as she was used to being treated with such high regard and now seems to have hit rock bottom. Hai, I concur that Bellatrix would make some kind of attempt at defending her sister, especially since it has to do with Voldemort and she completely reveres him as a god. Too bad that Bellatrix turns on her so quickly. I don't even want to think how Lucius must be feeling as he's aware of the next event which will be Voldemort violating his wife. That has to be rough, since Lucius is not the type to share willingly. LMAO! when Desiree implored upon voldmort if he was a man, I could not stop laughing, honestly.
I'm actually a bit suprised that voldemort didn't make her regret that, since he is not one to allow insults made on his behalf, whether they be intentional or not. Desiree realizing he was more than a man and yet nothing like a man was actually very insightful for an eleven year old. Damn and I though my parents were bad....
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From screamguy on July 08, 2008
Ah so the Veela finally come into play. Very well written chapter, I especially enjoy voldemort's little throne with his crescent cape. Reminds me of the graphic novel based movie "300" when Zurkses meets the king of Sparda on his massive throne made of gold. Lol - that's almost funny that Lucius would have to repetitively smack Draco to keep him from popping a boner - albeit sad. The dance of the 'slaves' was I thought very haunting and melancoly, since they are being forced to perform for those that will most likely rape/ torture them later on. I'm surprised that the Veela haven't gone insane yet with the extent of their capture and all the many months of mental trauma associated with it... if they haven't yet become mad that is.
>>>>>> Lol ...just had a laugh with that part you wrote about Greyback >>>>>>
Unfortunate that Snape could not rescue the hapless Narcissa from her plight, very emotional scene with her prostrating herself before Voldemort and all that like she is a particularly amusing gift or in her case more of a sacrifice really. The weak flesh is offered to the dark maw of malice that regards with an insatiable eye...

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From screamguy on July 08, 2008
The Latin is a nice touch to the ceremony... but you do know you could just use an automatic translator online instead of hours manually translating it yourself don't you?
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From screamguy on July 08, 2008
Yes of course it is blatantly obvious, its merely that since Rowling loosely based them on Nazi Germany to begin with that I merely felt you were keeping them canon. I guess comparing them in my mind to Nazi Germany is a bit unsavory and there are times when I just would rather see them in a more humane light, although this is not logically plausible lol I suppose it is merely the philanthropist in me.
Actually, I did read your fic with Umbridge spanking the minister... which in my opinion is in the same family so basically the same thing as caning. I'd have to say so far I do like your story for it's realism, but not really for the sexual... scenes >.o as they are rather unsettling to say the least.. If I was Voldemort I would not let my followers carry about in such a manner ah but then I guess it wouldn't be the same would it?
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From PensievePerson on July 02, 2008
Okay, first I
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From screamguy on June 27, 2008
I loved the dagger scene, as it is a small hobby of mine. However I am surprised that you wrote Voldemort as being skillful in this area, as personally I would find him lacking. He can't have time to be good at everything. But it is appropriate that he woudl be attracted to a weapon with a history entwined with deceit.
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From screamguy on June 27, 2008
Ech. I completely agree with Malfoy observing the bathhouse. Sick. >P. And I do not think Voldemort killing them all for their obvious lack of control or any sort of lack of attempt at normality would be unreasonable. In fact, were he to massacre them all at this very instant it would bring a smile to my lips to know that their perversities would be ended. Draco needs to join the good side, so he doesn't have to see this vile junk.

I pity the houseelves, because if I were one in that house at that particular moment i would lock myself away in a closet with a bottle of gin and rock back and forth until all the party goers had left and i was thoroughly intoxicated.... I hope when Voldemort takes Narcissa, it is nothing like this. Run Malfoy - run far away while you can!
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From screamguy on June 27, 2008
Draco is a little shit. lol, Yes I think you are a little fixated on caning ..... btw, the wizarding wireless network as a name for a broadcast company doesnt necessarily make sense in that I figure wizards would not have any knowledge of wires, in an electronic component, as they are a muggle device - at least not to my knowledge. but i suppose it could be reasonable if it was named by someone who had knowledge of muggle devices and perhaps named the company thusly - a partially ironic twist since the company broadcasts for Voldemort and he despises muggles.... I enjoy reading the political aspects you inject in your chapters, and I actually did the bit with Draco.
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From PensievePerson on June 26, 2008
To Screamguy:

Thanks for all your reviews. I hope you come back soon. I appreciate all your constructive input, it helps me realize little mistakes I made. I am still editing and trying to make this story much better. I have to tell you that the degradation of Narcissa was my initial inspiration in conceiving this fic last August. However, this turns out NOT to be the A-line plot. The real reason for this story is to show Voldemort taking over their society, a look at the culture. I really do show a look at wizarding culture in the British Isles, as almost every aspect that we know of wizards in Britain is at least mentioned here. From
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From screamguy on May 31, 2008
((Two suns in the sunset))I agree that Voldemort would not be affected by the Dementors, but I disgree in that I think he would only not be affected by them because he controls them so well. The part about Snape flying like a bat made me laugh...he reminds me of flying rodents at times...lol. Very grisly scene , although I must confess I was laughing nonstop when I read the part about Fenir biting off...sexual appendages. lol. I pity Narcissa more and more with each chapter you write, how she's being degraded for their pleasure. On Voldemort molesting the dead, well, you already know how I feel about that...
The snippet regarding Umbridge was rather amusing, how she thought voldmort was a dashing gentleman and all, until she saw his face..XD
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From screamguy on May 23, 2008
((triumph 4&5)) I pity Narcissa, she seems to be the only sane one admist a sea of lunatics. A very insightful line you write there, about the war that was waged really not concerning the purity of blood. It's more like Voldemort is batteling his own personal demons, and selfishly at that. As he is self absorbed using his little subjects like pawns to move for him, murder for him, and die for him - all the while denying he is not pure blood either, he is of the same make as those he despises so greatly, so in a way; it's like he's destroying his own kind. Awful sort of hypocrisy.
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