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Reviews for The Pureblood Coup

By : PensievePerson
  • From sheherazade on March 11, 2008
    I'm glad Greyback got his come-uppance, but now I wonder if Voldemort will be angry about the ripped robes. Uh oh.

    I have to tell you that I LOVE the track 'Astronomy Domine' - it's so insane. You're making me drag out all my Pink Floyd CDs, lol.
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  • From sheherazade on March 08, 2008
    That was a nicely set up scene between Snape and Yaxley - I like the way you have interpreted Yaxley's character, from the little we know of him in canon, and it does make sense that some of the real loyalists would be suspicious of Snape and jealous of his position in the Dark Lord's circle. We see this from Bellatrix, and she can't be the only one.

    Good scene - I wonder if Yaxley will take his vengeful attitude towards Snape any further?
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  • From sheherazade on March 03, 2008
    Yes, I can see this is a difficult dynamic to write - the Malfoys obviously aren't used to open affection and it seems that both Lucius and Narcissa are contemptuous of Draco's emotional displays. And we have Lucius trying to deal with the knowledge that he has to 'lend' his wife to Voldemort, and Narcissa not keen on the prospect and probably a bit resentful of Lucius for not doing anything to protect her. Complicated stuff! I can't wait to see how it pans out.
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  • From Kaitlyn on March 02, 2008
    haha.
    pimp cane.
    in an context that makes me laugh.
    i feel for poor Narcissa. if it were my child...and we lived in the Harry Potter universe...i would have done the same thing.
    i thought they were in character, especially Lucius. Usually he is too soft on Draco in other stories, but i think this was the closest you can get to canon, especially since J.K. herself never really delved into the dynamics of the Malfoy family too much.
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  • From sheherazade on February 27, 2008
    This was an absolutely amazing chapter; one of the best I've read of yours, I think. Pure nailbiting drama from start to finish, and the climax was incredible with first Bellatrix, then Narcissa, then finally Draco seeking to neutralise the mad werewolf. Tension on top of tension, and I really appreciate all your psychological insights - such as Draco's reasons for wanting to be the one to finish Greyback, rather than his mother. All the Death Eater in-fighting and bitching is really well done as well - the peripheral shadowy characters are coming to life under your touch.

    As you say, there is a great deal of underlying sadness, but it's still a cracking read.
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  • From alleycat88 on February 27, 2008
    YES! Go Narcissa! She rules! and Draco...is so sweet. He gives me little warm fuzzies. nice chapter. Glad to see Greyback where he belongs!
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  • From PensievePerson on February 26, 2008
    I just noticed all the characters get in trouble at some point:

    Lucius: punished by Voldemort by trying to get his wife/son to escape and then raped by Bella

    Bellatrix: Punished by Voldemort when she made the shrine for him.

    Draco: caned by Snape because of the ridiculous prank on the kids.

    Narcissa: she will be treated terribly by Lucius later, won
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  • From sheherazade on February 26, 2008
    Oh, a nice setup there with the roulette game. I wondered what the hell Greyback was up to, but it turns out Snape has foiled him, clever as ever. It will be good for Greyback to get his come-uppance; he seems only barely in control of himself and a bit of a liability all round, I think.

    Great work, as ever.
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  • From sheherazade on February 23, 2008
    Congratulations on getting your story read at the conference in August! You must be excited. I wish I could go, but it's kind of a long way from home.

    Anyway, this was another powerful chapter. Your Voldemort is authentically frightening, and I particularly loved the description of the violent, erotic music played by the spade-shaped windchimes. Your eye for exotic detail is so very good. I'm sure it'll go down well at the conference.
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  • From alleycat88 on February 22, 2008
    congratulations! and this chapter was excellent! The game was very well thought of! I liked it!
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  • From PensievePerson on February 21, 2008
    Just like to show the wonderful email I got concerning this fanfic:



    "Thank you for your submission to Terminus. We are delighted to inform you that your fanfiction reading has been accepted by the vetting board.

    A few pieces of business (please read carefully and respond if necessary):

    -As a presenter at Terminus, you MUST be registered for the conference no later than April 15, 2008, or you will be dropped from the programming schedule. If you have any difficulties registering online at http://www.terminus2008.org/registration/, please contact us at registration@terminus2008.org.

    -Terminus has three full days of programming scheduled for August 8, 9, and 10th 2008. Please let us know of any scheduling conflicts you might have by April 15, 2008, and we will do our best to accommodate you.

    -Per your abstract, the title, length and type of presentation you submitted will be listed as follows in the conference program book:

    Presentation title: The Midsummer Coup
    Program book name: Pensieve Plotter
    Format: fanfiction
    Time: 50 minutes

    Any changes to this information MUST be submitted to us no later than April 15, 2008.

    Thank you again for submitting your proposal, and congratulations on your acceptance. Please feel free to contact us with any questions or concerns at programming@terminus2008.org."


    With warm regards and thanks for your contribution,

    The Terminus Programming Team
    www.terminus2008.org
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  • From sheherazade on February 11, 2008
    I wouldn't know where to start writing about economics and wealth creation, so I thought you did a great job here. I love Voldemort's scheme to drain the money away from the Muggles.

    I really liked the image of Daphne using her wand as a hairdryer as well; made me chuckle.

    I did read the conversation between Snape and Voldemort; not sure why I didn't review it - I guess I was having a brainstorm that day. It happens too often.

    Anyway, still enjoying this a lot - it is your meisterwerk, I think.
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  • From alleycat88 on February 11, 2008
    Interesting. Lets you in on the inner workings of the politics and economic standing of the group. Well done.
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  • From sheherazade on February 03, 2008
    Leave it to Snape to break up a party - he did it so well! I loved that image of the giant pyramid of shot glasses crashing to the ground with the neon-coloured wine spilling everywhere - and then the poor house elves pricking their hands in their haste to clear up.

    There is something new and startling with every chapter of this; I can't imagine what you could come up with next! Obviously Voldemort is getting a bit stressed and that can't be good news!
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  • From alleycat88 on February 02, 2008
    nice chapter...it seems to me that Voldemort has some trouble controling his followers. Update soon!
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