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By : PensievePerson
  • From sheherazade on December 18, 2007
    Wow! I can see why you were a little nervous of posting that, but actually I was very impressed; I thought it was a magnificent and imaginative realisation of a scene Rowling herself points us to. Again, I could really see it happening (and was glad I'd already eaten breakfast ;)), and it lent more realism to the character of Greyback as well. Actually, talking about cinematic again, I think this would make a great anime film too. If I had the slightest bit of artistic talent I'd try my hand at drawing some of your scenes.

    Narcissa's costume was fantastic too - I'd love to see that. Bad Bellatrix!


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  • From alleycat88 on December 18, 2007
    Sorry I haven't read in a while! forgive me! So...the party started...very disturbing.....I like it! When will the kids at Hogwarts get a taste of this madness? Or is this just a voldenmort and his followers thing? Keep updating hunny! Its extremely good!
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  • From sheherazade on December 17, 2007
    Ha ha, Dolores got more than she bargained for there! Sorry not to review earlier; was away for part of the weekend & had a ton of Christmas stuff to do.

    This is wonderfully realised drama - the Dementors descending from the sky like a swarm of locusts was an inspired touch. You have a very cinematic writing style; this would make a great (albeit grim) film, I think. I'd love to know what this other way of controlling a Dementor is too; I wonder why JK never told us?

    Poor Snape suffered the full horror of the Dementors & I liked all the other characteristic touches - poor ickle Lucius didn't want to get his feet wet, awww.

    Still really enjoying this. Wow, Voldemort knows how to throw a party. LOL!
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  • From sheherazade on December 10, 2007
    You took the words right out of my mouth! I was going to say, this so reminded me of footage I've seen of the Nuremburg rallies in the 1930s. It had it all - the stirring rhetoric, the slogan-chanting, the crowds saluting and cheering. Very powerful. Amazing detail again; loved the description of the ceiling and the general gothic-glamour. I was interested in Avery's girlfriend - is she significant? Or is that incidental?

    What a night this is turning out to be. Hope you can update soon, with the Christmas holidays coming up.
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  • From screamguy on December 06, 2007
    So the dejected melatonin deprived corpse goes to pout in the bedroom.... lol. That melatonin bit makes me laugh, triggering an image of him sunning himself on a beach... ridiculous lol. This guy doesn't really read up on soldier's morale, does he? I swear it seems the majority of villians always make that one mistake, treating their followers, ect. like scum. Which of course leads to violence, treachery,..... betrayal... and their inevitable demise. He made them . . . remove their clothes. . . revolting. hopefully his only motivations are that of humilation for those two.

    Was the snake Nagini challenging Bella you think? as her head rose up to stare into Bella's . . . Or do you think she does that to everyone.... becuase it seems like Bella is jealous of anything that gets close to voldemort.... perhaps next she will accuse him of beatiality with the snake? Sorry, *laughs*, that was something of a joke, albiet not a very good one.

    Can't wait for more, keep up the good work, it's very compelling.
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  • From screamguy on December 06, 2007
    *Chuckles* Imagining Bella rolling around in the linens like that, one gets the feeling that she is really obsessed with Voldemort.... Counseling anyone? Lol. Hmmmm, Narcissa'a getting brave, good for her.(It is unfortunate that she had to die in my story..... she is such an interesting character to play with.)
    Voldemort's booming voice .... good description there, I can tell you didn't seem to rush this one, and I really love these scenes you write between sisters. Bella and Narcissa are fun because they are so very diverse and are bound to clash. Bella actually voicing that she was angry that Narcissa 'took him' from her - surprising. I always assumed Bella would be far too arrogant to confide in her own sister about how she truly felt for him, and just dance about it. All in all, love this chapter.

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  • From screamguy on December 06, 2007
    No it didn't seem stupid.

    I'd ask why didn't they just shove some Vetriserum down her throat but I know that they wouldn't get their jollies off as well if they didn't use their preferred means of extraction.

    Lucius using his cane as an extension of himself. What a bastard, but then again without him the story wouldn't have enough egoism in it, although between you and me I think Voldemort and Bella have enough for the whole fiasco.

    Felt a slight sadness for Snape for some reason, his beautiful love was taken from him, but then there is still that other part of him, that dark other that exists in his duality whispering into his ear. It's actually more. . . of him, its irritating when a person writes Snape as this woebegotton sort of guy who everyone feels sorry for. I like that you highlighted him being tainted, slightly but just so.
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  • From screamguy on December 06, 2007
    They're all lined up like little ducks in a row. Ha!
    Lucius is definitely not a risk - taker, like how that was exclaimed. "Pretty Fly for a white guy." Wow. That's just.... disturbing, because I can actually picture them chiming it in my head . . . Well it's no surprise that Draco failed his appariation exam.
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  • From sheherazade on December 05, 2007
    Voldemort really is the perfect dinner guest, isn't he? He subjects his hosts to sexual mockery and lets his snake eat at the table. Poor Narcissa; still, it all works out for her in the end, unlike most of them. Nice scene, with Ollivander's torture interrupting the conversational flow and the portents of doom for poor Snape. Right, I'm girding my loins for the next bit...;).
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  • From alleycat88 on December 04, 2007
    God! He's such a bastard! Poor Narcissa. Voldemort loves to be cruel. Thanks for updating! Please update soon!

    Awaiting another chapter full of evil Voldemortiness (i just made it up!),

    *Lilith*
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  • From sheherazade on December 03, 2007
    Ha ha, you're absolutely right - it's impossible to imagine Voldemort eating. I guess perhaps he takes an intravenous potion or something.

    Lovely scene setting - everyone gathered for the grand celebration, but hardly any of them feel like celebrating (especially Scrimgeour). I can't wait to see what Voldemort has in store for the rest of the evening. And ouch! at getting 1981 vintage champagne - how tactless!
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  • From alleycat88 on December 03, 2007
    Yeesh....man he's evil. How does he do that? He always knows what other people are thinking...*shudders* Nice update!

    Anticipating the next chapter,

    *Lilith*
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  • From sheherazade on December 01, 2007
    23: Oh my God, I love that Umbridge is crashing the party - how funny. I bet even Voldemort finds her incredibly annoying.

    You're on a roll here, PP; I'm looking forward the rest.
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  • From sheherazade on December 01, 2007
    22: Oh, this is lovely! This is where you shine, I think, with your attention to detail. The Graphorn leather and the ruffle that reminds V. of a beard and gives him a sense of outdoing Dumbledore - so inventive! And you just know Lucius would be the most fashionable man in the wizarding world. No way he could attend the party without his pimp cane! Yay!
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  • From sheherazade on December 01, 2007
    21: That's a lot of strain on a marriage! I like the way you dwell on the dynamic between the Malfoys and Bellatrix - everyone is just so bored with her, lol. This must be really hard on Narcissa; she's regretting the whole thing quite badly, I feel.

    Well, on to the next chapter!
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