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From tanyaflorio on March 29, 2010
PLEASE PLEASE FINISH THIS STORY PLEASE!!!!!!!!!
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From BloodyLove on November 17, 2007
This is so good. I love it. I think the whole blow up was great. Definatly on the menu to be let loose. And some cornering huh? Sounds like fun. I can't wait until the whole Hermine Draco liking part comes up and Draco becoming a man again. Well I hope you update ASAP! I really want to know what is going to happen next.
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From Damiana on November 13, 2007
Wohoo! A new chapter! I love the little Ginny vs Jocelyn friendship/rivalry! hehehe

I'm glad that Hermione got all that angst off of her chest, maybe now they can work towards a healthier connection. Hmm, it might be fun to have Draco give Hermione a makeover...

Good stuff!

Oh...and NaNoWriMo goes on in Canada as well. I know quite a few people that have taken up the challenge over the years. :)
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From kazfeist on November 13, 2007
I waited til I'd read all of what you'd written before reviewing. Well done. Good emotional force, and an plot that's not been seen for a while. I remember "The Fire and the Rose", but that had Snape and Hermione actually exchanging bodies. Looking forward to having them become closer, now. :D
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From Utopia on November 13, 2007
Can we Brits join in the novel-writing too?

I'm rather lucky in the fact that I rarely bloat! Though, the downside is that I get cramps when I'm not on too - they're not as bad as that time of the month, but a bit of a shock because I don't expect them to happen

Malfoy is reminding me of someone I used to go to school with, and if we're being honest she was the closest thing to an enemy I've ever had. She had a beautiful appearance, but that was where it ended; she was rude, insulting, copied my work as she sat next to me, bitched, spread nasty stories about people, announced I'd never get a boyfriend (no boyfriend, does fience count?? lol)... and she'd never get caught for it either. Her Mother thought she was the perfect little angel and getting all the best marks on work... unfortunately for her, and to my utter joy, she was caught out copying my work word for word; and she and a group of girls who kept fighting had to sign a hastily written "contract" to say they'd either be civil to each other or just avoid them altogether. She was a bit of a tart, I'll say that much - I couldn't care less who her boyfriend that week was, I just wanted to get my work done ASAP so she didn't have time to copy it! So, I have been in Hermione's shoes - but didn't bother to argue back - I have brains and I'll use them to MY advantage, not for getting tied up in a bitch contest.

Malfoy NEEDED that verbal slap around the face, it isn't Hermione's fault she is having to look after him; it isn't her fault he's now a she; she just happens to be the closest person to him at the moment - and you always snap at those who care for you because they won't snap back. I wouldn't be remotely shocked if Hermione was in her room crying after realising she'd actually sunk to his depths in her retaliation - it would probably make her more upset than what he's saying.

Blaze [sp] is proving to be a real pig, no means NO; and I just hope it doesn't go past innuendos and little (but still unwanted) touches... I hope Blaze's [sp] attitude and Malfoy's repulsion of it stays with him when he gets his dick back; perhaps he'd think with his brain, rather than his balls and become a LOVER, rather than someone to just have sex with. I wonder weather Malfoy has ever actually made love to anyone? You could probably write the names of the girls he's fucked on a loo roll - but has he ever gone the extra mile and made love? Perhaps he can discover that?

I love that Ron is gay - he's not camp, but is as straight as a roundabout. I wonder who knows about that? I'm not sure how prejudiced the wizarding world is, but gay marriage was legalised recently in the UK - so perhaps there's someone for him out there?

I've stood in Hermione's place and I knew exactly what went through her head - the chapter was all too real... but times change and things become brilliant...
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From ichiruki on November 13, 2007
oopps now I went and looked up that "contest" yeah, I'm retarded, it's a movement not so much about a prize as a)getting people to write and b)a non-profit thing...though it was cool to read some people (like 12 so far) who cranked out a novel in a month got picked up by publishers later, of course their submissions were treated as rough drafts, but really who produces perfection under such a crazy deadline I ask?!
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From ichiruki on November 13, 2007
fun fun fun! loved it as usual, and as usual I can't wait to see more. About November being writing month, I've heard of a few contests circulating for folks who can crank out 30,000-50,000 word submissions...I'm not entirely sure those are all going to be greatest submissions ever (lol), but it is a neat idea that apparently pays.
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From princesspeach on October 27, 2007
This story is wonderful! I've never read anything like it before, but Draco dealing with PMS was too funny. You really captured the insane moodswings really well. Only constructive critisism I can offer is that a few chapters go beyond the page(width wise) so they are hard to read. It might just be my comp I don't know but it happened to a few of my chapters before and I found that it was because the lines I was making with the ************* were too long. If you just edit the chapters (I think it was mostly just the beginning ones) so the lines are shorter then the text should fit the page better. Of course it could just be my computer, but I thought I'd let you know anyways. Keep up the good work I can't wait to see what you come up with next!
-Lizzy
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From myangeldraco on October 27, 2007
I think your story is excellent, your best chapter being the latest one (PMS). It is a definate change from many stories that seem to follow the same sequence, don't get me wrong I'm not judgemental I like all them stories, as long as their well written which your's definately is! and damn did you capture the true annoyance of a period!! are you gonna make him have a strong sexual appetite towards the end cause many girls 'suffer' from that as well (me being one of them) lol that would be funny, wonder who'll catch his eye ;) Please update asap luv xax
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From SilentTremor on October 26, 2007
love it can't wait for more

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From kmplease on October 25, 2007
Love it, please update soon!!
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From Damiana on October 25, 2007
Hmm bear hugs... *purrr*

Three cheers for chapter 6! Enjoyable, fun and so very true to the uncontrollable emotional turmoil that our stupid hormones inflict upon us all too often.

Of course the best line is Malfoy's thought that menopause would be a welcome relief...I'd like to see him go through hot flashes! Muahahaha!

*hands you a bar of Honeyduke's Bittersweet Chocolate*
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From IrishChic20 on October 25, 2007
Wouldn't it be fabulous if we could get our menfolk to experience what it's like to be a woman for a while?! Period cramps, tender breasts, fluid retention, mood swings, acne break outs, etc. Think how much sympathy we'd get - not to mention wine and chocolate! And as I said before, if we could get them to experience childbirth - hell, they'd practically start worshipping us as the goddesses we are!
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From BloodyLove on October 24, 2007
Ha Ha I absolutely love this. It would be super funny having Harry and Blaise chasing Draco around while he is a girl and then eventually liking Hermione. It would be like all hell breaking loose but it would be great. I can just imagine some of the cornering done to Draco by Harry and Blaise. And then when Draco turns back into a boy and if they found out they were in love/lusting for was Draco would be hilarious. Anyways I hope you update soon. I really want to know what is going to happen next.
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From Utopia on October 24, 2007
Legoas and Draco? Nah, give me Legolas and Lucius - I'd rather have the more eloquent and intelligent version! lol!

Draco needs to discover Green & Blacks organic bitter chocolate ice-cream, or the 85% stuff. The cocoa content contains chemicals that stimulate the brain and actually make you feel happy - craving chocolate is a perfectly JUSTIFIABLE thing! But it needs to be a minimum of about 60% cocoa to do the job. Draco may want to invest in evening primrose oil - it contains something I can't spell that eases things slightly.

Poor baby, I wanted to hug him too. Bless his little cotton socks for breaking down like that! I think more than the last two days hit him - more like most of his life and his actions!

Tampons aren't the best choice for a first-timer really, towels would be easier for him/her and a lot faster for a between lessons bathroom break. I'd also suggest a hot water bottle and a bottle of Marjoram essential oil - 4 drops rubbed on the lower abdomen eases things for me, and the scent is uplifting.

What WAS that connection? Was it Draco's lack of previous attention? Or perhaps something more?

A nice chapter, revealing quite a bit.
10/10
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