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Reviews for A Man Cannot Control His Dreams

By : UnexpectedNudity
  • From ANON - Bree on November 12, 2007
    This story is very literate to say the least; a masterpiece in the smallest form. I would have to say though that your love for commas certainly shows. I have nothing bad to say about this story. I'm very entraced by the vocabulary and the way you go about describing intense situations as well as the character's emotions. The first scene between Harry and Snape was very well written. I only have one critical review in relation to the grammar of the story. While you use the sentence structure very easily and most times, very well, I will have to say that you do tend to use commas where they are not needed, and you use broken sentences. You can choose whether or not to take that to heart. Don't get me wrong, I love the way you write; I am no "writer" or "editor" when it comes to writing stories, but that's just a little help from my end; it's something that I learned in the years that I was taking college English. I can't wait to read the next chaper of this story. It has become a very dear one to me.

    Your faithful reader,
    Bree
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  • From alleycat88 on November 12, 2007
    NOOOOOO! OMG Update soon please! This fic is sooo good!!
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  • From mikaela717 on November 12, 2007
    OMG!! Update friggen soon!!
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  • From knowingdivine on November 12, 2007
    :D I love it!
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  • From ANON - Jadzia on November 11, 2007
    OMG...this is so effing hot. The desperation, the helplessness, Snape's wicked, domineering desire...*fans self*. MORE, please?
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  • From ANON - tie me up. tie me down. on November 11, 2007
    read it one sitting! very good...love it.
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  • From ANON - tie me up. tie me down. on November 11, 2007
    read it one sitting! very good...love it.
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 10, 2007
    *_______*
    You evil cliffhanger-er!! ;]
    This story is just so hawt my underpants burned up.
    Thankyou for teh smexinessh.
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  • From Hambares on November 10, 2007
    Oh my! Perverted!Snape. Shame on him! Looking forward to more
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  • From Dragonpink on November 10, 2007
    Yippy, I was readin' this on the other site only to come here and find even more yummy chapters...**does a little happy dance***.....Today will be a good day =^.^=
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  • From Lib on November 10, 2007
    ohohoh, every new chatper is just too short Q_Q give us more!

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  • From myniephoenix on November 10, 2007
    to end there is cruel! i look forward to the next chapter, or i will once my heart stops racing!
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  • From mikaela717 on November 10, 2007
    Cool *thumbs up* Update soon!
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  • From ANON - kunitsu on November 09, 2007
    Whoa those last two updates kinda made me feel that way, I dont know why but they just do. In a way this is starting to get really intense and I like it

    Update again soon
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  • From ANON - Ryu on November 08, 2007
    Damn, what a fantastic story. Its storys like yours that keep me reading this coupling. To be honest, about 85% of the SS/HP couplings out there are complete trash.No building up to the event and usually Sevs completly OOC, acting like a complete pansy.But your story gives me hope^^ Please keep up the good work!
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