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Reviews for Revelations of the Heart

By : Bonza87
  • From ANON - Anon on September 18, 2007
    Okay..That scene at the table was really hot.

    It did feel a bit too much like she was a Mary Sue when you described her, though.. You might wanna see to that just a bit..
    Other than that, I've no real complaints.
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  • From hoser41 on September 16, 2007
    Very nice start. I am anxious to see what Hermione has in store for Harry.
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  • From Bonza87 on September 14, 2007
    To everyone who reviewed,

    I'd like to thank you from the bottom of my heart, every time I get an email telling me I have a new review it's like Christmas has come early. The nameless numbers who view the chapter and make up numbers are touching in their own way, but the people who review give me the heart to post the next chapter and keep going with my writing.

    So again, thank you so much for your kind words of encouragement. You won't have to wait long for the next chapter, two weeks tops, as my second Beta is away on holidays and i like to have both of their opinions.

    Best regards to you all,

    Bonza87
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  • From Bigfunk89 on September 13, 2007
    Great first chapter. I hope you can update very soon because I like your style of writing thanks. -Silvana
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  • From SarahGranger on September 13, 2007
    I LOVED your story. Its written so well. (and I must add... THANK YOU for writing a Harry/Hermione fic... I've been missing them!)Please update soon, I'm really interested as to what comes next! I don't comment often, but I had to with yours. I want more... wait.. I Need more. I LOVE 'What a Witch Needs', its what inspired me to write too :)
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  • From TCardan on September 12, 2007
    Hi Bonza!

    You did it! Yah! It's good to take that first leap. I was nervous the first time I posted a story on here (which was WAWN's btw) And some of the reviews weren't so nice. LOL But if you have that idea in your head and you are excited to write about it, then you press on and let your story come out.

    I must say you have done it the smart way by getting a beta immediately. I didn't have one for almost half my story and the grammar police would attack once in a while. Your story looks very well written and my compliments to your beta as well.

    Good start on your plot. I could feel the mystery surrounding Hermione: whether or not she wanted to intice Harry or not from the get go, or if she was just happily surprised that he took notice of her. And if she was, then for how long had she wanted Harry. Harry is definately confused about what is going on and what feelings he might have for her.

    I look forward to seeing where you are taking this and how.

    One tip I recommend for getting your fiction more exposure is to double post it. You have it in the Harry/Hermione section, but some people also put another copy in the General Section as there are alot of readers in there. I started WAWN in the General section because there was no Threesome section back then. The mods don't really like double posting, he he, but most of the time they don't notice. Lots of people do it anyway and you should try to get more exposure in the early chapters of your story.

    And don't let numbers get to you. You can get hundreds of readers, yet only a few review. It's always like that. Just keep going and draw the readers back to your story for more. More will start reviewing:)

    Great start! Now get back to writing some more!

    Petal


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