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Reviews for Valentine's Day

By : KraeHi
  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 07, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From LaBibliographe on November 10, 2007
    Very nicely done. Readers of Deathly Hallows would know what was coming, but you made a believable secret romantic involvement between two intelligent, lonely people who might have really found each other if Voldemort hadn't intervened. The story was destined to be sad, but Hermione had something lasting from her love and so she was lucky in one way.

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    Minor suggestion: watch out for your tense changes. You have some present tense mixed in with your past tense. Your story is written in the past tense so the few present tense sentences stand out and don't fit in.

    Some examples:
    "His normally tightly buttoned overcoat is(WAS) no where in sight." (nowhere is one word)
    "She is(WAS) a student and it would be unethical."
    "The flimsy barrier is(WAS) the only thing that stood between him and salvation."
    "She knew he wouldn
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  • From reirei on October 16, 2007
    I thought it was great, very gut wrenching when she accuses him. I enjoyed it and I think you should write more!!! Another story perhaps, since its a one shot. You have great instincts.

    Cheers!
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on October 13, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on October 12, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From CandyxCotton on October 12, 2007
    It was beautiful. *Sniff*
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