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Reviews for A Room in the Dungeons

By : Severusluciusallthebadboys
  • From ahhsgirl07 on January 30, 2008
    Please God... don't be one of those mean horrible authors who thinks it is cool to leave Severus alone and loveless. Please make her come back!

    Ok... panic attack over. But really... I like this a lot it has the makings of a really long really good story and I hope to read more.

    Keep up the good work.
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  • From myangeldraco on November 10, 2007
    I liked the fact that Snape was upset that Hermione saw it as a one time thing. ok the crying part was a little ooc to critics but I'm not one so fuck them!!! and I read your comments * sorry I do that a lot* and I have to say one of the above comments about the huge cock annoyed me cause lets face it who the hell would write ''she was shocked by his average cock'', '' she was scared thinking that his average cock, 'won't fit in me' '' , come on people its fantasy fiction these are not real people therefore if the writer wants to say he has a large cock then fuck... HE HAS A LARGE COCK!!!!! deal with it!!! Sorry rant's over and done with now, please update soonxx ps. you could try spacing out your paragraph's it makes it easier to read and makes it seem like a longer chapter ;)
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  • From miamadwyn on November 08, 2007
    What a charming story! I love it. I love Snape's reaction to finding a drunken 14-year-old Hermione in his bed, and his reaction to hearing her masturbate. Scrubbing himself clean in the shower is not what I expected.

    I hate that she only saw him as a "loose end," though, if that's how you're ending it.

    Poor Sev!

    But still, a very charming little story. I enjoyed it!
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  • From Delfin on November 06, 2007
    ohhhhhh man, poor Severus :(

    but I'll wait to see what happens next :)

    great job!
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  • From kmplease on November 06, 2007
    PLEASE UPDATE SOON!! It was getting so good, please update soon
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  • From Heidi191976 on November 06, 2007
    This was a great chapter. A little sad. I hope that even though she is leaving him, that she either regrets leaving and comes back to him, finds out she is pregnant and comes back, or that he follows her on her travels. I don't think he will allow her to not be with him now that he has taken her. I look forward to reading more.
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  • From dannilawless on November 06, 2007
    I loved the build up but the last chp was far too short.
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  • From kinkyfairy33 on November 04, 2007
    oh wow! lol i should've expected that, but i didn't. I love how you through the whole bed thing back in!! awesome! update soon!
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  • From Delfin on November 04, 2007
    awwwwww :)

    im glad i made someone happy hehehe :)

    anyway ;)

    ahhhhhhhh u tease :D

    u love to leave us waiting :P

    really good :) keep it up like that, love it :)
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  • From Heidi191976 on November 04, 2007
    Excellent. I love how she took the first step at getting together with Severus. I hope that they become a couple. Please update again soon.
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  • From catysmom1028 on November 04, 2007
    I like it. Please update soon.

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  • From Delfin on November 04, 2007
    ohhhhhhhhhh its goooood :D

    keep it up girl :D
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  • From Mmoirai on November 03, 2007
    Well, I think you have a decent start here. I wanted to give you some honest feedback, because I think you have alot of potential with this, so please do not take this as a flame of any kind. I am only giving you my opinions as your reader.

    The only criticisms I have are that Snape too easily accepted Hermione in his bed, his arms, and his rooms in general. He didn't seem very grumpy about it at all, which is very out of character for the potions master. I think if you add some appropriate rage and responses in those areas, it will make for a great scene. Also, I felt that the part about Hermione climbing onto the couch with him was way out of place and was all wrong in timing. You could take that part out completely and leave the rest and have a situation that helps build the gradual relationship with these two.

    Of course....I do love naughtiness, so I did like the little masturbation scene and his overhearing it. That's always hot. You do have a great set-up here and I look forward to your next chapter.

    Thanks for writing!
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  • From Heidi191976 on November 03, 2007
    Another great chapter. I love this story and that you will age Hermione to at least 17, so that she and Severus can get together. Please update again soon.
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  • From catysmom1028 on November 03, 2007
    I like it. Please update soon.

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