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Reviews for Professor, You're Mine!

By : chelleybelle
  • From RoseTyler on November 10, 2007
    I love this story already! Please please update soon!Great job!
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 08, 2007
    looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooovvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvveee it! please update soon i cannont wait
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  • From ANON - Genevi on November 07, 2007
    I like the beginning of the story and I look forward to read more of it.
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  • From missharrypotter on November 07, 2007
    This story is so great! I can't wait to see the next chapter!!!
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  • From missharrypotter on November 07, 2007
    hermione and snape in a veela story??? i can't wait to read more!!
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  • From ANON - Claire on November 07, 2007
    YAY! i'm liking this one very much. i hope it wasn't a one shot thing... judging by the title it isn't... so i hope you continue with this one.
    cheers
    -C
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  • From blueartemis on November 06, 2007
    Well, that was an interesting beginning. Hermione got surprised enough to get whiny. I can't wait to see her interact with Fleur.
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  • From nascarcrazy24 on November 06, 2007
    that was an interesting chapter please write more...
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  • From Jadewitch on November 06, 2007
    This is a promising start to an interesting premise. I hope that the rest won't be as dialogue-heavy as this, it will need more description rather than just what perople are saying.

    I just have a bit to say on OO-ness. You could say that all fanfics are a little OOC, simply because it is done by someone else and the characters are in different situations than the original author ever had them in. But when people use that in a review, its mostly about the believability of the character. For instance,it irritates me when I see Snape made into some lovey-dovey, poetry-spouting sap when he's in love. No sarcasm, no Slytherin sneakiness, none of the traits that make Snape such an interesting character. It takes more work and skill from a writer to keep Severus Snape "in character", and yet still make it believable that he could soften up a bit when he falls in love. I hope you won't dismiss every honest criticism just because it claims one of your characters is "OOC". If you are a fan of a certain character (and if you weren't, then why write about them?) then you must have liked that character the way it was originally written.

    If this story changes Hermione into a man-hungry twit who completely ignores all the other stuff we know she likes (books, academics, learning, school) and Snape is transformed into some love-sick puppy, then I won't want to read any more. It needs to be realistic that the character might actually act like that in such a situation. That would be too OOC for me, the characters would not be Hermione and Snape anymore, they would just be ridiculous. Some people might like that kind of thing, but I don't. I hope that's not the direction you are going with this, but if it is that's your business. We all like different things.

    This is just my honest opinion, not a flame or anything. I think this story will be very interesting if it goes in the direction you seem to describe in the summary- where Snape isn't happy about being a "mate" to veela-Hermione, and Hermione has her own difficulties to deal with- the first one being Fleur Delacour! I think you are off to a good start and it will be interesting to see how both Snape and Hermione (and all the others around them) deal with the changes in their lives. So good luck to you, and keep writing!

    If I end up not liking a story, I won't bother flaming, I will just read something else. My criticism tends to be more about the mechanics- grammar, spelling, punctuation, that type of thing. If I ever write a less than positive review, I try to make it as constructive as possible, so you won't have to deal with that from me.

    Summing up this extremely long review- good start, looks interesting, keep it up! A little less dialogue, and don't dismiss every constructive review just because it mentions OOC-ness, it could be a valid and helpful suggestion.
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  • From ANON - CB13 on November 06, 2007
    Love the twist. It's harder to find unique SS/HG stories now - I mean, there are so bloody many re-hashes of detentions and the like (I shouldn't complain; I read 'em all)- but this is certainly new! Can't wait to see where it goes.

    Cheers

    CB
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  • From wicraven on November 06, 2007
    Great post. Love the story, please post again soon. Thanks.
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  • From Delfin on November 06, 2007
    ohhhhhhh sounds really good n promising :D

    keep it up :D
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  • From kmplease on November 06, 2007
    Good start, please update soon
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  • From ANON - yne-chan on November 06, 2007
    I love your story!!!
    And I can
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  • From reirei on November 06, 2007
    I think its a good start with an interesting idea for a plot. I like the idea of a Deatheater uncle. Very angsty! ~.~ Also, the grandfather is great grandfather right? Nice touch having the dreaded Fleur coming into it. Heh. I love Veela stuff. I use a bit myself.

    Just a side note: I think Dialogue is very important to a scene but I would like to know a bit more of Hermione's thoughts, just because this is a shocking event and unfortunately dialogue can rarely carry the emotions necessary to evolve the reader in our "heroine's' plight. I love your start.

    Keep writing!!!!

    Wow, I think this is the longest review I ever left.
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