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By : chelleybelle
  • From Malfoysgirl on November 06, 2007
    Poor Hermione lol! Great job! Please add more soon
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  • From ANON - megan on November 06, 2007
    I love it. Great start please update soon
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  • From ANON - Rosedown on November 06, 2007
    Just a continuity thing: you wrote that Mrs. Granger's parents were dead then later on you wrote something about Hermione's grandfather still being alive. I think you meant her great grandfather.

    Hermione certainly doesn't look Veela. Will this come out with her inheritance? I really can't see her with blond hair.

    It will be interesting to see where you go with this.
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  • From Jen618 on November 06, 2007
    OK, I'm prepared to give you some feedback which isn't about oocness or anything. I don't know much about Veela blood and I doubt anyone else does so you're prob on safe ground there canon-wise. My comments relate to two things. 1st is this: nearly your whole first chapter is dialogue. It feels very random, like there is no background to this dialogue. I know you give a little, and you may give a little more in future, but it's unusual to read a good story that is so dialogue intensive without the story to support it. The second thing relates to the first: why would anyone want to kill Hermione's mother that desperately if she were a squib? And what 'dark wizards'? It just doesn't feel plausible.

    I guess the importance of my points raised only matter if the plot is essential to the story, that may not be the case. Ch 1 may just be a reason to have "veela-hermione" with "Sev-mate," and that's fine. I'm not trying to be uber-picky, but just wanted to pass on a view. It's not completely against the odds that Herm's parents could be magical (well, apart from canon, but still it's not totally out of bounds), it's just the way you've presented it.

    gosh, there must be a reason I said all this??? I normally give concrits a miss, but I felt like I really wanted to because it's interesting, but I'd like it a little bit tighter :-))
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  • From ccino49 on November 06, 2007
    Now this storyline is certainly interesting. Can
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  • From catysmom1028 on November 06, 2007
    I like it. Please update soon.

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  • From Carine on November 06, 2007
    Hi chelleybelle,
    I enjoyed the first chapter of your story very much.The plot is known but yet you have a different approach to it.I've read a lot of adoption stories where Hermione is of pureblood lining but the idea that her mother is a squip and her oncle a known death-eater is simply genious.
    The fact that Fleur Delacourt will teach her everything she needs to know about Veelas makes me hope that there will be some humorous events coming.I cannot wait to read more.LOL Sureves Epans
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  • From theorgskittles on November 06, 2007
    Yeah I got the First Reciew cant wait for more
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