Adult-FanFiction.org : Harry Potter

Reviews for A Wonderful Caricature of Intimacy

By : AnasellaEmm

From jekodama on February 03, 2016
Beautiful story. Simply wonderful.
Report Review
From Annecia89 on September 18, 2015
I thought it was beautiful!
Report Review
From Yoffee on March 30, 2015
I'm so sad this story is over. I love 4 year old Zane. I love Donny, and I love that she got Oliver and i love that we found out anout her engagement through Zane thinking about it haha. I went on to read other fanfictions but couodnt stop thinking about this one and missing the characters. So even though you wrote this years ago and you may or may not see this review,I just came back to say ty for this story
Report Review
From Trelweny on August 01, 2012
Fantastic story. Absolutely thrilling. I about choked when my connection was lost as I was trying to load the chapter after Zane fell. My heart was literally in my throat so bad I thought I'd choke on it before the wireless restored.

Donny is an excellent OoC. She was wonderful in her support role. I adored how you worked Oliver Wood in with her. He was always one of my favorite characters even if he didn't have much of a role in canon. Gotta be the accent. That and it was totally cute how into the game he was. I think you did a really wonderful job representing him here.

Speaking of wonderful jobs... the Twins, sweet High Ones, the TWINS! I love the pair of pranksters anyway, but every time they had a line in your story it was perfect. You really captured their intelligence, caring, and devilishness swimmingly. When they showed up in Zane's fireplace at Pansy's I nearly squee'ed aloud in giddy delight at the implications. It also really showed how Wise they can be when they want to.

It was truly a delightful read.

Thanks so much for writing.
Report Review
From ANON - Rain on February 02, 2011
I just want you to know that I have long thought that Dramione was the most repulsive, disgusting, blasphemous concept ever to grace the world of fanfiction... and I began reading this story expecting to belittle and ridicule every detail of it...
And I have been thoroughly put in my place. Beautifully written, perfectly executed, and entirely believable.
OF COURSE I MEAN THIS CHANGES NOTHING. I ship canon pairings to the bitter end.
But this story was brilliant, and I thank you for it.

Report Review
From Chavela25 on May 05, 2010
I loved the story so much until the very ending.
Could have dealt without Pansy coming back into the picture. That ruined it for me. LOL.
Report Review
From ANON - Kansol on December 28, 2009
I'm from texas too and noboby knows I read fanfiction, but I thought you might like to know that I read your story!!! It was totally great. I didn't want to stop, but I had to because I was starting to go cross-eyed. Your OC was adorable and I loved every time "Woodie" would talk. Yeah this was great.
Report Review
From Babelfish on February 26, 2009
Loved it, great piece
Report Review
From ANON - Anon on November 30, 2008
is there ever going to be a sequel?
i constantly check for updates, but i never see anything. did you move to a different site?
i hope you didnt stop writing! hope to hear from you soon! youre awesome!
Report Review
From margotlefaye on November 10, 2008
I'm so glad I stuck with this story. This line?

Ok, dad
Report Review

From margotlefaye on November 09, 2008
I hope you will take this as the constructive criticism it is intended to be and not as a negative review. On the whole, I really am enjoying your story. I'd seen a lot of positive recs for this fic, and decided to give it a try. I'm on the second chapter, and while I am finding a lot that is very charming, there are two things that are driving me up the wall and taking my attention away from the fic.

1) Why does Donny constantly use the word "babe" instead of "baby?" Since "babe" is now far more often used of hotties (normally of the well-endowed female persuasion), or as a term of affection, rather than as a term designating young children, I'm finding this usage is jarring.

2) Wolf and Zane are second cousins. There is no removal in their relationship as they are the same generation. Draco and Nymphadora, as the children of siblings Narcissa and Andromada, respectively, are first cousins. Therefore, his children are her first cousins once removed, and her children are his first cousins once removed. The children's relationship to each other is that of second cousins. In twenty years or so, when Wolf has a daughter named Lupe and Zane has a son named Grey, Lupe will be Draco's first cousin, twice removed, Zane's second cousin, once removed and Grey's third cousin. Here's a link to a kinship chart dealing with degrees of kinship for legal purposes, which gives the titles of the relationships. Now, I am aware that there are regional differences in usages of such terms as "great aunt" and "grand aunt" but that's not the issue here. There's no dispute about the "once removed" terminology. http://www.mystatewill.com/degrees_of_kinship.htm

Again, this is meant as concrit, not as a dig at your story telling abilities. A Wonderful Caricature of Intimacy is an engaging fic.

Report Review

From ANON - Jen on September 07, 2008
I want to thank you for giving me the privilege of reading such a fantastic story!

I love all of the new characters, and how you portrayed the old.

I would love to read more from you

All the best

Jen x
Report Review

From ANON - alle on September 05, 2008
aw man... i honestly did mean to, but i can not stop crying! its just such a great story, and it is amazing how zane grew up! i know i will re-read this whole thing over and over again.
I can't wait for the sequel!
Report Review

From Ithilwen on September 05, 2008
Just finished this story!! And as I told you on LJ. I think its absolutely brilliant!

I just love how you portray them all!! Even Pansy lol.

Great stuff! Can't wait for the sequel about Zane!

Ithilwen aka Calairiel ;)
Report Review

From bananasforyou on September 04, 2008
wow a sequel?really? nice, loved the chap btw
Report Review

1

2

3

4