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Reviews for Hidden in Plain Sight

By : Katay
  • From Utopia on December 20, 2007
    Chapter 10 (I'll go back and review the rest soon; shhh... I'm supposed to be revising for my Jan exams - don't tell anyone, it would ruin my street-cred as a know-it-all who always does her work!)

    Just one comment: I expected the last line to be something along the lines of: "Did you mention something about giving them a show, darling?" purred Lucius into his sated wife's ear.

    10/10
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on December 16, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Citten on December 10, 2007
    now i really want to know more about hermiones situation! there was a hard and very sore spot on the subject of other children. well now we can move on from ron and hermione, yeah! well now i really hope that you update soon-really soon! :) well lucius and draco can now become closer, lucius i know would like to see his grandson-well that will be an interesting meeting.
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  • From StarKneazle on December 10, 2007
    Oh that breakup was perfect. I love the drag out, knock down fights that lead to Hermione and Ron break ups, but that was just beautiful. It was so heartbreakingly real. It was real and fresh, just like the rest of your story. I really hope you can update soon because I just adore this story. This story goes beyond well written and I truly envy your writing and imagination.
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  • From DB1 on December 09, 2007
    @9 great chapter, update soon

    *DB*
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  • From chickaboo on December 09, 2007
    That was so sad. But I have to agree. They're too good of friends to have one of "those" breakups. I think you wrote it rather well. Can't wait for the next update!
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  • From wishywashy on December 09, 2007
    i love this fic. it satisfies my need to cheat and look ahead in a story without actually having to cheat. so perfect. and really well written. i look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ladyravenna on December 09, 2007
    So many new surprises. I liked the way you wrote Draco, he's still has the mockery of his child self, only now he's has some definite maturity in his manner. And Ron..tsk, tsk. He too has earned some maturity, and I am glad he's living up to his responsibilities.
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  • From angeleye68 on December 09, 2007
    So glad you updated, I loved this chapter especially the conversation between Hermione, Lucius and Draco. I felt so bad for Hermione when Draco asked her if they had children and she said "no children" but the way you wrote it sounded (at least to me) so painful. This must have been something with the curse she received in the war. I also want to thank you for writing about the embrace between Lucius and Draco and the fact that Lucius was the one to pull his son to him for the hug. I think this must have meant so much to Draco, to feel his father's love in such a long time.

    You wrote the break-up between Hermione and Ron very well, I think it gives way to how future Hermione is able to be friends with Ron.

    Look forward to the next update.

    -- and I completely understand, I have finals this week coming up and one last project for one of my classes. I do my final presentation of material tomorrow and am putting the finishing touches on it today. Good luck with your finals.
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  • From ffpoisongirl on December 09, 2007
    Again, I like the way you use a non-linear style for your storytelling; it's not an easy style to accomplish, but you seem to have it down. Also, while you do make Ron a bit of a jerk in this, it's in an in-character way, not a completely irredeemable douche way. Good job!
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  • From Heidi191976 on December 09, 2007
    This was a great chapter. I am glad that Draco has returned and visited his father. I can't wait to read more soon.
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  • From angeleye68 on December 05, 2007
    Hey, I came across your story today and I am really enjoying it. I like how you go back from where Lucius and Hermione met to the future Lucius and Hermione. And if I am guessing right, I think it may be Draco who walked in on them. Looking forward to the next update.
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  • From Cassiopeia on December 04, 2007
    First, I want to tell you that I love your story. You make the AU quite believalbe and plausible. Just one small thing for chapter 7: It's "Comment faites-vous?". Otherwise, I think your French is very good - but I'm not a native either, I've only learned it in school for 4 years.
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  • From Citten on December 03, 2007
    well it looks like draco is in for a suprise. well now i really want another chapter and soon! i wonder who daddy is for lavenders baby- i have a feeling rons in BIG trouble. :) i really hope that the problem hermione has is not that she cant have children cause that would suck! well i love everything so far and i am dying for more! PLEASE!!!! :)
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  • From StarKneazle on December 02, 2007
    Goodness, it just keeps getting better and better. I really want Ron to pay something fierce for what he's doing. I can not wait to see what you have coming in the next chapter, especially with Lavender's pregnancy and the mysterious man at the door.
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