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By : Lomonaaeren

From GreenEyedCat on February 07, 2008
If Draco won't wake up soon I realy wouldn't want to be near the maze, because what if it doesn't mater what happens next?
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From Tesp71283 on February 07, 2008
hahaha I saw the broth part coming, but it was still horrifying to read. Whoa. that scene is going to stay with me for a while. Good job! I hang in suspense for what will hapeen next.
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From SoftObsidian74 on February 07, 2008
As soon as Richard brought in that tray of food, I knew it was human flesh! I kept yelling at the screen for Draco not to eat it, but when Richard had some, I thought maybe I was wrong. I guess Richard is sick enough to do that though. I didn't realize Pearl had become like a friend to him, but I can definitely see that. How awful. So even if Draco had stuck to a higher moral code and not performed the experiments, he would have ended up being broth. I hope Hermione and Ron weren't fed to someone like that. I'm getting anxious about what their fate may be. Harry holding Draco is becoming more meaningful now, maybe because of the way their developing. It's kinda funny Draco seems to want to shag every opportunity he gets, I agree with Harry, that wouldn't be the wisest. But seriously Harry should do something with him before he sacrifices himself or whatever he's planning. OK, I'll go back and look for this phrase, it's really bugging me now...
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From misslala on February 07, 2008
Wow, what a cliffie! That was a truly disturbing thought to have eaten someone that was helping him; I couldn't imagine that, and find myself truly sickened for the first time reading this, so, well done! LOL They have a very strange dynamic. Harry's truly kidding himself if he thinks that he's only kissing Draco for Draco's benefit. At least, I think, anyway. Stubborn to a T, though, so very in character for him in that regard. I feel horrible for Draco. So he definately has my sympathy from this. This Rochard guy isn't going to be much fun by the time they reach him, whatever form he's in, and I worry that they'll be stuck there. Or will Harry die - hell, is Draco already dead? Maybe he died before they could complete everything, and this is merely a cloned version of him as he was when he died. Now I have all kinds of crazy scenarios running through my head about what's going to happen next. I swear I check for updates at least twice a day. (I normally don't become that impatient with stores!) LOL Something in the severeity of this situation has me held absolutely captive, though, and I commend you for that. Actually, that's happened with most of your stories that I've been able to read.

I can't wait to see what happens next. Fantastic work.
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From graballz on February 07, 2008
Oh my GOD I love the fucked-up-ness of this story!!! I know I don't review even HALF as often as I should because you are one of my heroes, and seriously, I do a happy dance every time I see your name on the list!!! I am steadily growing more terrified for the ending and what Harry plans to do...because I SO want him and Draco to end up together!!! But I trust you, so I will stick with you to the end. *whimper* I just hope Richard dies a horrible, painful, slow, torturous death (or gets replaced as the 'never-ending sufferer' in the maze for what he did to Draco, that miserable bastard!!!)

I absolutely LOVE how you keep Harry positive and strong despite everything that he and Draco have endured. And I LOVE the way their relationship is playing together!!! I totally see Harry as the strong one, steady as a rock, and able to bear everyone else's burdens as well.

That being said...Lom, I love you. Thank you for the Sirius chapter. Because, siriusly (haha) no one can be strong all of the time, and I'm SO GLAD that Draco was there for him to be the strong one in the face of Harry's weaknesses!!! I think that is currently my favorite part of the entire story (but I reserve the right to change that in case they end up having sex at some point...)

Keep it up! Again, I'm sorry that I don't review as often as I should, but I hope you remember that I read every new chapter and LOVE it!!!
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From alleycat88 on February 06, 2008
Oh my. Where did the smoke plague come from?! I thought for sure Harry was done or...but then I thought yeah right. Poor Draco....he depends on Harry so much. I hope Harry comes to terms with their relationship because I think if Harry leaves Draco after getting out of the maze Draco will go insane. Nice update!
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From GreenEyedCat on February 05, 2008
Okay they got away but so much to ignoring things in the maze!
Oh and Harry is still an idiot.
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From ANON - LarienMiriel on February 05, 2008
awwwww!
I love the whole ball of light idea, its very good! and I want them to stay together, even tho Harry's still freaked out about it...
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From thrnbrooke on February 05, 2008
Sooo need chapter 25!!!
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From QueenB on February 05, 2008
Ch. 24 Once again, another original chapter. That shadow was a scary, new threat. The idea of being devoured by shadow is even worse than being eaten alive. There are all sorts of things out there in the world that will eat people if they can. But being swallowed up until there's nothing left of you but a shade is horrifying on a primal level. I wonder if Harry would have faded into the darkness or turned into a ghost eternally trapped in the maze.

Once again, he's having trepidations over Draco's continuing closeness. But he's got valid reasons at keeping him at bay this time. If Draco becomes too dependent on him, what will happen when they finally get out of the maze or if Harry dies. They've made it through so far. But Harry's lost a foot and still hasn't found his friends. They have only one more obstacle to go. Yet they could still lose it all.
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From ANON - rAiNwAtEr on February 04, 2008
I don't know how you do it, but once again you have produced a wonderful chapter. Please update again soon!
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From SoftObsidian74 on February 04, 2008
Oh, what a lovely chapter....again, loved the last few lines! I love how you end your chapters but this one kinda got to me. Not sure why. Maybe I'm just pmsing right now..lol. I love this spell, told you that before, there's so much you could do with it in terms of symbolism and painting visual pictures for the reader. I was worried about the shadow thing getting Draco for a minute there. How ironic though that Harry is worried about Draco's dependence and lack of self-confidence in his abilities when he's suffering from a bad case of both himself. You say there's a hint about the ending, well, I give up, I'm gonna let myself just be shocked, saddened, or god forbid, happy when the ending arrives. I'm gonna wish for a happy one, even though that probably a long shot.
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From ANON - Kayo on February 04, 2008
Excellent chapters as always! I was shocked (sort of) by how Draco had chosen the conditions he would torture the boy under (it being a young boy, pain, etc, and all) but mostly I was appalled/sympathetic for past Draco. I'm glad we got to see fingere solis again (or whatever it is). I really like it for some reason. Maybe it's just the descriptions attached to it in the first instance you used it. Especially their minds as panes of glass. I'm also glad that Draco finally used magic! I understood it would be hard to hold a want and he couldn't speak, but I still never quite understood why he couldn't use magic. This chapter really cleared that up for me! And Draco needs to wait on the whole lets-have-sex-while-in-an-evil-torture-maze-of-suffering thing. Really. And I can't wait till we discover what happened to Draco's voice! And Richard (Kill the Bastard, Harry!!!! Crucio!!)! And how they're going to escape. And Ron and Hermione. ^___^ I'm just too curious for my own good I suppose.
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From misslala on February 04, 2008
Whew! What a mess of a chapter! Very intense, and that kiss was very nice. :) Hah, I love how Draco pulled away and mouthed "I'll wait until you're ready." LOL God, they're both really in it thick now. Maybe now that Draco knows he isn't completely helpless, he'll be able to do something other than hang on to Harry's every word. That shadow plague was pretty wild. Another excellent chapter.

I was more worried about whether there would be character death. I can't be doing with character death, and I hoped that this would at least have a happy/hopeful ending despite all of the trauma. hehe. Can't wait for more! :D
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From DannyLove on February 04, 2008
man this keep surprising me well it's 12am here and i,m going to bed keep doing this wonderfull story. can't wait for more.
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