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By : soldiersgirl0709

From icybreeze on January 08, 2008
Great chapter...and fic! I love it.

I don't know how you do it, I have millions of ideas floating around my head but I can't seem to make them into a good fic, but you can write like no tomorrow.

Post more soon, can't wait to read it!!
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From Utopia on January 08, 2008
Can I PRETTY, PRETTY, PRETTY, PRETTY PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE make a request for the wedding day??

I'd love to see Lucius being ever so helpful and getting the future Mrs. Snape into her wedding dress; or helping her later in the day with a quick tidy up before the evening reception.

I'd quite like to see a quote similar to:

Lucius: "I could get you out of that corset in two minutes, but it took twenty to get you into it! Severus is going to kill me for this..."
Hermione: "Why?"
Lucius: "I tied the back in a double knot."

just a bit of random daft humour to keep Mrs-Snape-to-be calm before the dum-dum-de-dum.

PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE? I'll beg!
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From Utopia on January 08, 2008
If you'd have phoned me at that time, you'd have got more than an earful for waking me up! LOL!

Snape certainly buggered that up, didn't he! It just shows that the calm, orientated potions master is actually easily ruffled and has a small mountain of insecurities to plough through before he will be truly happy.

Though, I'd have been happier if he'd got down on one knee and done it properly, rather than making a small twit of himself! but, that's just my inner romantic coming out to play.

Ah, a wedding - I presume Lucius will be walking her down the isle... is Draco going to be a bridesmaid? lol! I can see him in a little lilac dress, wearing a tiara and holding a small bouquet! Though, if Lucius walks her down the isle, who's going to be best man? (ponders).

Harry and Ron are going to have a fit when they hear about this! lol!

A nice little chapter, have fun with the crackers!

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From LadyofClunn on January 08, 2008
Holy Grail - Brilliant!

Did US television ever air the "Monty Python
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From bluezauza on January 08, 2008
AHAHAAH!!! That was so funny! One of this days i was watching an interview with Jason about OoP and he is so funny, the man is not only hot but his sense of humor is delicious, so it was easy to imagine ,His Hotness watching MP movies and enjoying it!
That would make my day..me cooking for the Slytherin Gods! ...er...I think i could marry them!! Mrs.Malfoy-Snape...or maybe..Mrs.Snape-Malfoy...What a joy! sweet Merlin, your stories make me..daydream!!!Wild dreams!! LOL
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From ANON - aliciana on January 08, 2008
Wellllll. That was an interesting little scenario. Watching sexy Sev mashing the spuds and the Malfoy boys heating things up in the kitchen. Just gorgeous. Monty Python??...never heard of 'em. Apart from the fact that my 20 year-old (going on 13) daughter can practically recite both Holy Grail and Life of Brian. "He's not the messiah....he's a very naughty boy". When my husband and I spent our 25th wedding anniversary in an Italian castle last year we rang "said" daughter (who was in Lancashire) from above the castle ramparts and in our best phony French accents said about the Holy Grail, "Tell 'em we already got one". Unfortunately we had no cows to chuck over the top down onto any unsuspecting new guests that were arriving. Chances are they would be German anyway and not quite get our sense of humour. Ahhhh....Happy days. "Said" daughter may be working at the Edinbrgh Festival this year. You never know...maybe Rickman might drop in again like he did a couple of years back. He was in Manchester last October (about 20 miles away) and I didn't know. I was gutted. Anyway...I'm havering as usual. So stop reading this drivel and get writing. Best wishes, Love ali xxxxx.
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From twinsie on January 08, 2008
Oh that was a hilarious chapter. I could picture Lucius saying that to Harry with a straight face.

Wow! Two chapters in one day? I was right in my previous assessment...you are superMom! Or did I just miss the previous day's update? Sorry, I try to catch up on my fave stories every so often...but it's kinda hard running around with a two year old who refuses to listen to his mother and wants to torture the dogs and hog the computer (yes, even at his age of 2...he knows how to work the computer...he can log onto noggin dot com...play games...learn his letters and numbers - he can now count to thirty...and then he'll have his lunch and run off the excess energy by chasing our poor dogs). Such is the day in my life...if I'm not picking up after him (lately, he's gotten to stripping off his clothes and running buck naked in the house - don't know where he got this from).

But enough of that...great update...can't wait for more.
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From Utopia on January 08, 2008
OMG!!!! Alain Rickman is a Yorkshireman!!! *dances with glee* WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

Monnty Python is staple diet in our house - my Dad is permanently barking mad and would probably give your slightly OOC boys a run for their money! Lucius and Draco remind me of Andy when he first came to my house, he walked around the kitchen prodding stuff, opening cupboards, rummaging in the fridge! He still does that in my underwear drawer! I randomly find him dangling a very skimpy G-string from his finger and swishing it around saying 'ooooh'... though, I almost wet myself laughing when he walked into the bedroom wearing one of my lilac thongs!... oh dear, and I'm marrying him too, I'll ave to put my frillies under lock and key! lol! (Has Lucius seen muggle ladies underwear? I see them still in bloomers and corsets! Can you see his face if he got a look at a lady in a G-string?!)

I love Harry actions, the double exit as he saw Hermione and Snape snogging was hilarious! Lucius being told of for watching the TV was brilliant! And the pastry thing... took me a while to realise it was American Pie! (Though, as a flautist, I was horrified to hear that Miss-Band-Camp had shoved it where it most certainly shouldn't have been shoved!). Snape's reaction to that was amusing no end!

Though, I'm quite happy that they aren't watching Eastenders or Coronation Street! lol!
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From catysmom1028 on January 08, 2008
I like it. Please update soon.

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From catysmom1028 on January 07, 2008
I like it. Please update soon.

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From ANON - Kitsune M. Kiras on January 07, 2008
haha i really like this story yes i do lol

man that would suck in a way having your friend walk into your room to find a guy sleeping yep..
but it worked oh so very wonderfully for your stories

and i do understand the liking for British actors i love Alan Rickman as well

but then again i do have a thing for mr David bowie lol
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From Utopia on January 07, 2008
I've just read aliciana's review! Snape's a northener?!! I blooming hope he's a Yorkshire lad! We White roses have to stick together! We are certainly better than those Lankashire Red roses! *growls*. Oh, I can imagine Snape with Sean Bean's voice mixed in with the deep tones... mmmm - oh I could listen to Sean Bean all blooming day and be flipping happy! Oooh, Snape/Bean timbre... *purrs*.

I had two lecturers ask me where abouts I came from in Lankashire - I raised my version of the Malfoy eyebrow and told them I was a white rose! Ha!

And the revision is driving me mad... la la la la la la la la la la la

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From Utopia on January 07, 2008
The Brit dry sense of humour is similar to the Sahara!! lol! Gotta love Monty Python for its influence! I have a few Canadian relatives, my Gran called one a 'Big, daft, gormless bugger'... he promptly asked what Gormless was and everyone fell into fits of giggles. He didn't find it funny, and didn't understand why we were laughing! I frequently don't understand US humour, and many UK shows don't do well over the pond because the humour doesn't fly. I'm currently writing a review, watching Red Dwarf series one... and I should be revising!

Draco is like a little lost puppy, isn't he? Hermione is probably the only woman whose ever looked after him and offered him comfort and cuddles without expecting diamonds, gold and other really expensive things! Hermione is a nurturer through and through and has taken both Malfoy men under her wing.

I loved Ginny's reaction to Snape! "Erm, dress!" Ginny not at her most articulate on New Years Day.

Harry wants a slap or three for his quite frankly rude behavior! His manners towards Snape are horrid! His opinion is dated, one-sided and utterly false! In fics where Hermione falls for a Slytherin, either Ron or Harry turn into total Smeg Heads (oops, Red Dwarf moment lol!). What will it take for Harry to mature his opinions and move on?

10/10
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From Delfin on January 07, 2008
yei this chapter made my day :D

continue writing :D
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From twinsie on January 07, 2008
Another great chapter. The way you have written Snape - I wouldn't mind letting him have a go at spanking my behind *les sigh*.

I can't wait for your other stories - especially the one with Moony (did I mention to you how much I love him? He's just so sooo yummy!).

I'm sorry that you spent your New Year's without the hubby...but at least, you still have your kiddies to ring in with you. Looking forward to more of your story...
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