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From tambrathegreat on October 28, 2008
Woot! And I was the first AND second reviewer for the chapter. I feel very special.
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From tambrathegreat on October 28, 2008
I think Ginny might be surprised at how close the two men actually are. I loved the Christmas interlude. It was calm and very nice. Why do I think that things are going to change and soon? Because both of you are evil authors? Maybe.

I love that Snape loves James as much as he loves the rest of the family. I've read too many stories where he can't stand the infant simply because of his name. It seems right, since he's found a family and love, that he would have room in his life for a child, even if it is named James Sirius.

Great job. I want more, please.

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From Darkless on October 28, 2008
A family date night...hehehe. And Severus still has to go to the Weasley gathering. *snicker* Poor baby.
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From tambrathegreat on October 27, 2008
Aw, a family date night. How uncomfortable will THAT be? Especially if Harry keeps having those unwanted thoughts about the three of them together.

I love that Severus was trying to find any way out of the Weasley clan's Christmas. Oh, and that Severus actually called Harry down in class for his inattention. Some things never change.

Great job.

T
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From dirtydarella on October 27, 2008
Yay, an update! Kind of feels a bit short though... *ahem*

And double yay, a chapter with Ron. I always enjoy Ron. (Does't that just sound deliciously dirty. ^_^)

A date night sounds like an interesting event. XP Well, maybe just because I wonder what kind of drama may occur..... :D

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From cravedom on October 26, 2008
Do you think Severus would be angry if Harry confesed his fantasies? I have the feeling Ginny would be more undestanding...

I am very happy that you updated and was most amused by Harry's return to the classroom. It was disapointing that they were too cought up in their thoughts to apreciate the humor of the situation. I bet they will laugh later when they think about it.

Your use of guilt is impresive, it is almost as good as my mothers; have you been talking to her? Anyhow here is my review and I am very sorry for any tears my lack of prompt reviews may have caused. Tell my mom I will call Saturday.
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From opy3332 on October 16, 2008
Just started reading this story. Enjoyed it very much, you guys have done a great job with it and I cannot wait to read more. Update soon. Can you add me to your update list? My email is zackeringrillot@hotmail.com Thanks!
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From SamHill on October 14, 2008
Ugh!! Why did you have to go and show the family man side of Lucius?? I was so set to hate him, to write his name on bits of paper and the burn them while cursing him silently for being such a cold-hearted bastard! (Yes, Lucius, I'm aware that there is no such thing as a Malfoy bastard in the literal sense of the word. Kindly shut up and let me rant, please!)

Um, yeah, that opening scene was hot. Totally embarrassed myself, too, by getting all excited. One of my co-workers was like, 'oh, are you hurt?' I was like, 'oh, um, yeah. slammed my knee. that's it...' of course I'm not reading red hot smut online!!! That would be wrong. Deliciously, sinfully wrong. And so I had to wait to write this review.

Tastiness of the smut aside, I can't say that the idea of a SS/HP/GW sandwich turns me on. It doesn't turn me off, but it's just not as hot. **drools slightly while envisioning steamy Snarry sex-capades** Anyway, that aside, I do look forward to the next update.

On an aside, how on earth do you guys do it? How do you write and collaborate and have your lives all while living worlds apart. Okay, not worlds but an ocean. You're stellar and don't let a single bad (or just plain questionable) comment get you done. People are just jealous of how wonderfully done your story is.

Now, off to put my chillun to bed. Until the next update!!
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From dirtydarella on October 14, 2008
-Chapter 61-
Lucius is killing me! Is it wired I kind of felt for him? I suppose that just makes me weird. XD

Another great chapter, you two are just so fantastic! I really want everything to turn out alright in the end, for everyone. That's going to happen, right? *Sits anxiously on seat*

Either way, I can't wait until an update. :)
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From Darkless on October 14, 2008
Hmm...an angsty Lucius. Interesting. And Harry's having fantasies so strongly he looses sight of current events. He's acting like a hormonal teenager and letting his 'other' head think for him. He better step carefully or it'll all come crashing down on him.
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From cravedom on October 13, 2008
Well that first part was way too hot. Is Ginny really that inocent? Did she not notice her flirting? We were all having thoughts we shouldn't.

I almost felt sorry for Lucius, he just have a completely different way of thinking. Is not that his thinking he is doing the right thing justifies his behavior but it does help us understand it better. I would like to know how Draco feels about his father. I know the story is not about them but this scene was moving and left me wanting to know more.

There are so many grey areas in this story that I cannot help but NOT wanting what is right because while people are doing things that are wrong they are not being evil. Well, Lucius is evil but you made him human and now I want him to be OK. If you think about it we have two men risking their families -not for the same reasons- but they are both in danger of loosing what they love the most. Sooo, I went from hot to sad, the mood swings are killing me.
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From Jan on October 12, 2008
Maybe if Lucius would considers to stop with his vengeance towards Harry & Severus, I'd feel sorry for him, and wish him luck with bonding with his son.

Please update chapter 63 soon ^_^

Jan
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From PantherRain on October 12, 2008
Aww... Lucius! *hugs him* Poor guy. Well, I'm still rooting for him revealing things to Ginny. Maybe that makes me a bad person. *shrugs* Though as someone who's had a paramour for a few years now, I somewhat understand Harry and Sev's position. Only my husband knows about it and had recently taken a paramour of his own. I really feel for Harry and Sev, but strangely that's why I want Ginny to know. I spent a year in love with my paramour, unable to tell my husband because he wasn't ready for the news, and when he was ready I was all too grateful to tell him. Keeping a secret like that is painful!

Btw, I don't think Ginny is one-dimensional. I think we just don't see as much of her. I mean, one could say Lucius was until this chapter, where we finally got to see a new facet of him. She may seem a little "dull," but she's your fairly typical working mom. How many working moms do any of us know that probably don't seem one-dimensional without stopping to get to know them? I remember a story from a retreat I went to. The woman leading the retreat talked about masks or whatnot. And she was talking about when she first met one of the other ladies at the church, she seemed perfect. Several children (and I really mean several, I think she's up to 7 now or something), calm, always had things done for the church, active, etc... I mean, if you wrote about her from an outside view, she would be a totally Mary Sue character. And one day the women telling us this story got a call from our Mary Sue, and it was her begging for help because the kids were being wild that day, the house was a mess, the laundry wasn't done, etc. It was the first sign that this person was "normal." Kinda made me laugh and feel a little better, since I had been certain I was the only insecure one there, when they all seemed all bright and cheery.

Either way, every time Ginny is alone, we're seeing Harry and Sev. Of course she might seem one-dimensional, we barely get to see her! And we don't often get her thoughts and such, either. We're getting everything of Harry and Sev. Being main characters and all, I guess that's to be expected. And if you really want to read Ginny upset or something, go back to some of the early chapters where Harry was being an ass.
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From tambrathegreat on October 12, 2008
It was nice to see Lucius as more than a cardboard cut-out villain. He had to endure quite a bit because of his poor choices. That his is bent on revenge now seems to speak to his pain rather than his evilness.

The scene with Ginny and Harry masaging Severus was interesting. I know this won't be a threesome fic, but wow, what images. Harry seems to be feeling more guilty as time goes by during this new relationship. I wonder when he will break?

Great job as usual, Chicas. I look forward to more.

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From dirtydarella on October 11, 2008
-Chapter 60-

Oh that Lucius...

Wow, this story sure has gotten big! Er long. Well they both sound equally perverted in my mind so I'll just shut up. :3

I have to disagree with LadySybyl as well, I think you two did a fantastic job of rounding out Ginny's character. She isn't one dimensional because she actually has a personality. :)
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