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Reviews for The Sins Of A Father

By : Bunnyboiler
  • From ANON - Eve on February 24, 2008
    PS: Yeah, um. . .didn't know my email would be hidden so here it is if you want to contact me for the beta job.

    eveville89@gmail.com
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  • From ANON - Eve on February 24, 2008
    I read in your intro to chapter 16 that you wanted to know how us readers felt about your story. Well, here's how this reader feels.

    I really like it. It's a very interesting plot. I was worried when I first read it, considering most AU harry potter stories fail to meet the fan's expectations. But I didn't have that problem with this one. Sure there's no magic and a lot of the story has changed around, (Snape ending up with Lily and the addition of Jimmy), but the story itself can support those changes. You really nailed Snape's character and made his POV a delight to read.

    A few suggestions though, you need a new beta. I've spotted dozens of errors (my fault for being a grammar/spelling nazi) and would love to offer my services if you're willing.

    And maybe this is just me, but I would love to see more Snarry action instead of Snily, after all this story is in the Harry/Snape section. If you had planned on more Snarry, then feel free to ignore me. I guess I'm just anxious to see them together.
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  • From alma on February 23, 2008
    Good chapter.
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  • From alma on February 23, 2008
    Wow, very brutal word on both their parts. Good chapter.
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  • From ANON - secretlf on February 23, 2008
    OMG!! I LOVE this story. The story line in completely new and I love where its going too...I really loved the last chapter and Harry is so cute... You're doing an awesome job, please continue!!!! Can't wait!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 23, 2008
    OMGEEE. i love u. ive stayed with u since the first time u posted the story and i still love it. im really wanting some harry/snape action tho. i love all the plot thickening, but its time for snape to realize where his heart really ventures towards. i dont want to see harry hurt anymore cuz its too sad. snape should start doin some lovin, damnit! jk. but please, for me, a devoted reader? thx

    brandi
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  • From ANON - amazingZ on February 22, 2008
    since you asked nicely, i will give my input! i liked the interaction between severus and harry up until about last chapter. the whole dinner argument just seems so childish. i think i could forgive harry for saying that -seeing as how he's a teen and all but i think severus just lost control there. it seemed very unadult and childish of him and extremely out of character to say those things to harry like that. i do like how it added to the drama though and cant wait to see how he amends things. it's getting more heated and i cant wait to see what happens next.

    thanks for ending it there. (sarcasm) i mean seriously, you expect us to WAIT for more? i despise you and your evil torturing ways! :(

    anyway, i hope to see more from you soon! i really do like this fanfic. really really!
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  • From dominique1 on February 22, 2008
    i really do enjoy this story, but how can harry and sev get together sev's part is perfect lily is the best wife ever. and than poor harry is in love with sev how can they get together what will bring them together because sev is going to ruin his marriage for harry and maybe lose his son for him i guess it would be easier if lily was cheating on sev with black. its going to be really hard to plot this story. because i don't want harry to be the home wracker i guess my question would be how will you be able to make harry out to be the victim writher than a mistress? because as it stand right now i like the way sev handle harry and i feel harry wrong his mother. oh and wats up with james?
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 21, 2008
    wonderful
    glad to see u back to writing this :)
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  • From cravedom on February 21, 2008
    Ah, yes you are back! I missed your authors note about your beta; found one yet?
    Goodness there is no way this two are going to be able to act naturally around others. Imagine how hard it will be for Harry not to cry every time he looks at Severus and now that Severus knows how Harri
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  • From dominique1 on February 21, 2008
    oh yeah we still read this story because you have a good plot but the only reason why is i check for updates about every 3 days love it up date soon.
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  • From alma on February 20, 2008
    good chapter.
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  • From dominique1 on February 20, 2008
    thank you yhank you up date again soon
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  • From ANON - amazingZ on February 20, 2008
    wow! and i thought you'd gone off and disappeared. i'm really glad you're back. the plots starting to get interesting. i cant wait to read more.. make sure you update soon!

    as for the worry of people not remembering what's going on, maybe you could do a little recap to remind your readers of whats happened so far.
    if not, then that's fine.. cause i remember everything.. lol.
    update update update! cant wait to see more.
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  • From Nikte on February 20, 2008
    OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This was a really intense chapter, I really liked it, PLEASE UPDATE SOON!! Can
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