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From NyxBlossom on November 05, 2013
I am reviewing your story: wow. Just wow. That was a serious trip indeed. It was like you just knew what was coming when reading through each chapter but you hope you are wrong. Its so serious and crazy. It really had me going.

I would like you to know that I was enjoing your story so much that I got in trouble at work for reading it and not doing my work.

Definitely could use a re-read and edit but that stuff wasn't to terrible. And just wow, it was so feeling. I really felt whst I was reading. And I loved Severus' threat. Positively evil.

Beautiful story ^^ thank you
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From DarQuing on May 25, 2009
I'm going to start off by saying that consensual incest isn't wrong. Consensual sex of any kind is not wrong. There doesn't really need to be love, just lust, but I think it makes the experience better.

When I first read the rape scenes (Severus didn't really have a choice and that's really what rape is, the removal of the victim's choice), I wondered why they were important. And then I read the very last chapter, and I think I understand a bit more why they were important. I don't think I'd call that love, though, I think I'd call that an obsession, a twisted mockery of what real love is about.

I don't know if this is one of my favorite stories, but the chemistry between the characters felt very real and I enjoyed that part of it. Good job. :)
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From ANON - magic on July 14, 2008
I really like that story even if the end is sad with Lily's death. Will you write a sequel or scenes of this story from Harry's point of view? There are a few scenes that would be interesting to read from his point of view. Like that scene in the alley, at the restaurant, when Severus found out that Harry was in love with him or when Lily told Severus about Harry and Draco. That could be interesting!
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From TheSiner on March 29, 2008

I stumbled upon your story, so, wht I liked about it - a different AU, original in it's own way, menaing that I haven't seen this kind of AU before. Those little foreboading sentences in the end of most of the chapters, they kind of make your unique style. And I enjoyed the story in whole as well.
What I didn't like so much. Well, Lucius' blackmail, kind of too much, easier to tell Lily about drugging than do what Lucius asks - but that's my personal opinion. And I think that probably you could go through the story one more time and make sure that everything is in character. Like, there was a place where Dumbledore said 'kick of the team' - rather informal speech for a headmaster. But it doesn't matter much of course. Overall, good job!

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From Veracityrules on March 25, 2008
You may remember reviewing at the very beginning of this story, telling you that I wasn't sure that I would continue reading this fic due to the theme. It wasn't a flame, just an observation and I did in fact comment that your writing skills were excellent.

I would just like to inform you that I have indeed continued to follow the story through each chapter as posted and although at times I'v,e found it difficult to read (subject matter not writing style) I can honestly say, hand on heart, that I have enjoyed reading it. This concept must have seriously challenged you as a writer and I don't believe that I could have undertaken such a project. Kudos for that!

You endured some serious critisism early on, in response to the Japanese business man, which I believe was taken completely out of context by a number of reviewers. However, on a positive note, I was personally glad for you that so many came out in your defense. I am a great believer of freedom of expression and artistic license and I for one did not interpret your representation of Mr Leiwong (spelling?) as a generalisation that all Japanese men/business men are paedophiles. By that comparison in the HP fandom, all British people are child abusers (physically abusive) because the Dursley's abused Harry, which of course is preposterous.

I hope you are planning on writing more stories in the future and look forward to reading them.
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From alma on March 21, 2008
Very good story.
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From ANON - Briar (the second one) (not logged in) on March 16, 2008
I am so sad this is over but it ended well. A contrite Lucius, a dead Lily, a punished James, and Harry and Severus together. Happiness. Yayedness.
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From ANON - Faery on March 15, 2008
I love this story, I have not review it yet but you have to know that everyday I was looking for the next chapter^^ And to answer your question, I will say that in every culture incest is forbiden, because children have to go out of their own house to find a mate so that there is no problem with the blood. We know what can happen when there has been to manny incestuous wedding in a bloodline, history is full of crazy princes and so on. But here your are not talking about that, you are talking about relationships that society frowns uppon even if there is not a direct connection. Lets just say fuck to society and enjoy love, it is so hard to find it. . . And as you said we are only human!

(I know I made a lot of mistakes, but I am french so dont kill me^^)
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From Ravenheart on March 15, 2008
I liked Harry/Severus much more than Lily/Severus so I'm glad at how it ended.

Thought I'm a little worried, how did Harry take his mother's death?
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From ANON - Anon on March 15, 2008
nothing wrong with being human!

life is so short my love, please live yours without regrets.

To fall for someone is one of the greatest experiences in life; enjoy it, suffer it and then move on...
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From anniea on March 15, 2008
wow it was all fine and dandy until the very last chapter.
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From anniea on March 15, 2008
wow it was all fine and dandy until the very last chapter.
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From ANON - Sara on March 15, 2008
WOW! that was a really really sad ending but i loved it! I love the way you made like a book he was reading to us oh you are awsome you have a great story and it was awsome i look forward to reading other things by you.. Keep up the good work and hope to read more.
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From Jan on March 14, 2008
OMG! I know I put on my last review that the only way that I saw this ending with H/S staying together, was Lilly dying or Harry becoming the bad guy, but I didn't think you would truly kill her.

And more so in that way.

Wow, this was truly a great story. ^_~

As For your questions, in your AN's. No, I don't think that it's wrong to love someone that is family by heart but not by blood. You see, I, when I was younger(think ending of high school) my first and only true love, just happen to be a family member by my father's side. We started dating in secret, and about a year and a half later his mother found us in a compromising position, needless to say that she went crazy on us. After that, the whole family started getting into business that weren't their own.

A little after two years being together, he called everything off.

Now, you could say, oh well, it was just teen love, nothing that could last for long. But what most don't understand is that he truly was my first and only love. And for that reason, it hurt more so, when he broke up with me, because of the family. We tried just about everything for the first time together. My first true kiss, you see, you haven't been truly kiss until you feel the lips of that one person, the one you give your all to, against your own. That one person that no matter how much time you spend together, you just can't get enough of them, that one person that you could only see yourself with till your dying days, the one person that no matter how many good looking men(or women) passes by you, you only think and want them, and only them, no one else. My first sexual act, well, we did almost everything.

That's how you know when you've found your other half, that one person that completes you. (corny I know, but no less untrue) Unfortunately, we didn't get our happy ending. If you leave fear enter your heart and thoughts, you relinquish your hold on love, true love. We had talked and planned on a future together. Started building for that time, where we could start our own family, our own life's. That all came to an end because he got scared, and walked out. I only thought about him, I only felt desire for him no one else, when we kiss, it was only him on my thoughts, when we were apart it was only him I thought of, when I woke up and went to bed it was only him on my mind. It's always been him for me. Even after ten years, it's still him I think about, him I dream of, him I desire above all else, just him.

I am marry, with two kids. I love my husband, but I am not IN love with him. He knows this from the start. And he respect this. You could say that ever since that heartbreaking day, I've lived a half life or more like I have a half soul. I still love him, and from what my sisters and mother have told me, it appear he still loves me(whether it's true or not, I will never know.)

He has a girl friend, they've been together for almost three years. The funny thing about her is that she looks a lot like me. Only she's more like a Barbie,(very plastic) while I am more... into rock. There, is the greatest difference between both of us. She can't stand to hear my name in a conversion, let alone see me in person. As for me, I don't hate nor dislike; but it does hurt to see her with him. He hardly stays in the same room as me. And to think we're family! O_O

Believe me, it's not worth thinking about blood or non-blood relation. Follow your heart and never, ever let anyone ever tell you other wise. Be true to yourself. I'm happy, but I am not complete in this life time, I always feel there's something else missing in my life, and I also know that it's him. I thank god every night, for giving me my two beautiful babies, they feel a part of that whole in my soul.

It is only human to love and be love. God and every other thing we believe in, tells us that love is the key in life, so why not love a family member, if said family member completes and make YOU happy?

Jan

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From ANON - Krishna on March 14, 2008
While the ending total surprised me, I think it worked. I really liked it. While I'm not much of a Snarry AU, I really did enjoy this. I can't wait to read your other works.
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