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By : LaBibliographe

From Phreakdom on October 25, 2008
Ch. 47
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From ANON - jw on October 25, 2008
ch 47 - ARGH!!!!!!!!! (glares at cliffhanger) I myself wouldn't have gone through the Veil without a few more answers, like the 'true Malfoy heir' and Lucius' fate. well, I am crossing my fingers that Draco is still Lucius' son and not Hermione's husband, and that in the 'present' Hermione somehow married Lucius and became pregnant with his child despite him being in Azkaban. but why would he be in Azkaban if they successfully prevented.... argh!! (waits impatiently for next two chapters and epilogue) thank you for updating, dear Author!
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From Clare1984 on October 23, 2008
Chapter 46 - so the veil has a naughty side! I'm surprised Lucius made it out of the Ministry and didn't stumble into a broom closet with Hermione! That was a very nice reward for getting rid of the root. Very nice and hot and sweaty...

Awww! They're having a baby! *claps hands and jumps up and down* That has got to be one of the best ways to find out you're having a baby - Lucius hearing the heartbeat. That just made me melt. Then, they admit they love each other. I just feel all warm and fuzzy. I just want to kiss and hug people now.

Yeah, might need a rethink on those names though, especially Clyt. That's like a completely different level of playground bullying just waiting to happen. I think he should leave it up to Hermione.

I'm just intrigued to what happens now - have they completely solved the problem now? Do they go back to the future now and, if they do, what kind of world awaits them? I can't wait to see what happens next. Yay!

Thanks for your comments about my story, I'm just gonna let it flow naturally now and let that tricky Lucius come to me. Ooh, now that sounds good...
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From Citten on October 22, 2008
YEAH! we are moving into some fun stuff and what i really have been looking froward to! (not that getting to that point wasnt some of the best that you have ever done) i just want no, am dying to read what is next for our happy couple. because i just know that it is not that easy and i really want more story too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)
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From Damiana on October 20, 2008
Chapter 46

In response to your response: Perhaps it is because I simply cannot get enough of your writing LaBib. I would have happily read 30 more chapters of this story. :P In any case, I just thought that I'd try my hand at constructive criticism thinking that it might help in subsequent story structures.

I understand your writing method. It mirrors my own. (Although you are far more prolific than I am!)

Ok...enough about that. Onto the chapter!
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Wah! I just had this image of the Veil being sold as the ultimate sex-toy! *snerk* Maybe that's how time turners came about...

"They both lost consciousness at the same moment." Was it dehydration? All those fluids...spent and spilled.

Pregnant! Oh that darn Veil! ... Oh wait... Nope Lucius all the way!

Aw! Declarations of love! Yay! And a head to toe list of that which Lucius loves about Hermione too! Did you know that in medieval literature the object of affection (when it is female) is nearly always described starting from the head. This little tidbit is significant because the warrior (and therefore the men) were described starting at the feet and moving up towards the head/helmet. Neat that you just reminded me of this.

All in all a lovely follow up to the previous chapters. Hm...do you think I'll get a spanking if I volunteer to mention the unfortunate name? That might tip the scales for me.

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From ANON - pittwitch on October 20, 2008
Dedicated to the lovely LaBib and her time-turning tale with its latest twist:

Now, if I can find someone to shop Lucius into center stage to sing it.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gkiOm-vmpcY

"I'm my own grandpa. I'm my own grandpa."
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From ANON - doodle on October 19, 2008
Great! I think Calliope for a girl or Orion for a boy. Will the little one travel back through the veil? Now I'll have a great deal of new pondering to do. Thanks!
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From Kooldragon400 on October 19, 2008
Ah! Ah! Ah! BABY!!!! ~_~ ~_~ ~_~ ~_~

You would not believe how happy this makes me. Now...this raises a few questions though: First...is this baby going to be the new heir for the Malfoy family? Will the Malfoys stay pure-bloods? If not, will this affect their position in Voldemort's war? It would be ironic, however, if they went back to the future and discovered some random family like the Weasleys had taken the Malfoys place in the war.

Well..enough random gibberish. My poodle says hi (what?) She's a tea-cup, and therefore easily transportable (five pounds). If I didn't think that would be beyond weird, I might read the story aloud to her.

I'm glad that you bookmarked my story for later. My newest one is going to be good...I just feel it!!

Luv, Dragonfyre
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From on October 19, 2008
oooooh I want to squee! I enjoy how romantic they've become. I lovely and appropriate declaration of love for them. Hermione read like she was freed to feel, after second guessing herself for so long. Lucius would never have gone first...would he? The baby makes me squee again! Wonderful update, thanks so much!
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From helenesnape on October 19, 2008
LaBib,
I feel like a horrid wretch for the unbelievably long time between my reviews. Alas, RL has gotten away from me (that and my ISP has left me without service for altogether a week and a half...makes for difficult R&Rs)

Now on to the review...Chapter 46

Lucius, Lucius, Lucius...what are we going to do with you? Casting a blanket spell to negate Hermione's magic within the gazebo. Did he not think it would negate the magic cast on Hermione as well as the magic she used herself? Yet another instance where a man is being led by his other head. LOL

Those names...good gods, do they want their child to be ridiculed all their life? Clyt...honestly!

I am glad that they finally admitted their love for one another (even though technically Lucius already had...but you can never believe anything a man says when he's getting serviced)

Awww, forever. But will it be forever in this time or their own time considering the Veil confirmed that the root has been destroyed? Rhetorical question, as always.

I look forward to the answer in upcomming chapters!
MHS

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From sheherazade on October 19, 2008
Mmm, Clyt-short-for-Clytemnestra - classy! Ah, I did wonder about all bets being off in the gazebo, but I didn't like to say anything ;). It was good that he reacted by wondering if Hermione would be angry with him for taking the choice away, rather than being all seigneurial (my favourite word of the moment) and assuming that she would be delighted to bear the Malfoy heir.

That Veil is some aphrodisiac! I loved the intensity and breathlessness of their scrambling to sate their aroused desires. Very spontaneous!
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From angelprince on October 19, 2008
Perhaps Hermione can leave a book of baby names beside the chamber pot for Lucius. Clyt!!! That's just too funny. No-one would dare mock Little Miss Malfoy though. They'd find themselves getting shoved through the veil.

Is this winding down now? Are they staying or going back? What's next for you? And where can I get me one of those veils? (If they were that aroused just standing on the dais, imagine the orgasms they could've had shagging on it)
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From Scarybearhair on October 18, 2008
Yay LaBib! I am so happy you updated! *Scary does her happy dance.*

It took twenty minutes for Lucius to guide Hermione through the crowds and out of the bowels of the Ministry to the floo exits and into their bedroom, and twenty seconds for him to strip her, pierce her, and bring them both to the first of that afternoon
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From ANON - jw on October 18, 2008
ch 46 - oops.... gazebo..... that totally slipped by me just as it did with Lucius and Hermione. well, they have to have a boy sometime who will become Lucius' great-grandfather! btw, have I told you that I've grown to like your Veil? thanks for the new chapter!!
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From Utopia on October 18, 2008
You know, I think the Veil might be female. Its just a lot more tuned-in with Hermione's way of thinking and seems to spend more time 'laughing' at Lucius in a 'its not you're fault you're a bloke' sort of fashion. Plus the whole 'full body orgasm' I don't think fellas can feel orgasm past their bits and bobs.

Three hours! And Lucius isn't 'shooting dust' and they're not red-raw with friction? Or exhausted through lack of replacement nutrients? Or dehydrated? Or just plain unconscious??

WHOA! SLOW DOWN! After three hours, the sperm won't have met the egg! Never mind fertilized and started dividing!! You're looking at six weeks before a foetus is developed enough to have a heartbeat! So, Hermione's suddenly gone from 'normal' to six weeks pregnant in about five hours? EH? What's the veil playing at? SURELY it can't change Biology THAT much? Though, if it can change time...

oooh, maybe she is six weeks gone then. Ooops, but a happy oops.

Me Lucius. Me got wife up duff. Me man. Hear me roar! Grrr.

Ewwww. warm, gooey and probably in need of a bath. *icky shudders*

You know, I hope they have a girl! Because the purebloods still are in the "male heirs are important" and women are inferior. If the MALFOY'S have a girl and treat her just like a boy, then they'll bring the status of women up in the magical world!!

How much wine as she had at dinner and at parties?

"Clytemnestra" sounds like an STD. *runs for her life*

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