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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe

From ANON - Rini on October 03, 2008
Oh! I thought Lucius knew what the solicitor was up to and was amused at Hermione
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From tambrathegreat on October 02, 2008
Chapter 43:

Hah! Try to beat Hermione, little wizard. I was wondering if she had a second wand, given her experiences in the war. It was nice to know that she now has a way to stop the plot. I'm off to the next chapter.

Chatper 44:

I think that chapter was brilliant. Especially when Lucius worried over Hermione's brewing of the polyjuice potion, and not unnecessarily. I love how she omitted the whole cat incident in her retelling of the tale.

I think the Veil isn't through with them yet, and will put the ball firmly in their court again by failing to deal with the problem. The blackmailer may leave the picture, but problem of the prejudice will remain the same.

Thanks for two such thought provoking chapters. I can't wait for more.

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From ANON - shez on October 02, 2008
Great idea about getting the solicitor to the Veil.

I enjoyed Lucius' speculations on how he could have wooed Hermione in their parallel reality, regardless of Narcissa. I like the neat way Hermione's Polyjuice adventure came into play as well; Lucius didn't hear the half of what Draco got up to, did he?

I had to laugh at Lucius being a 'tool with a manor'. Tool is a bit of an insult here, did you know?

It's very sweet to see them coming together and bonding over their intellectual sleuthing. You are the best thriller writer in all of fanfiction, I think - despite your aversion to the genre! I suppose I don't mean thriller really - I mean sort of Sherlock-Holmesy/Aggie-Christie mystery with smut. Much better.
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From Damiana on October 02, 2008
Chapter 44

Ah. Many questions answered more coming up everytime I read further.

Very interesting chapter, very ineteresting indeed.
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From ANON - ShiningEyes on October 02, 2008
@Ch44. Oh god - just had a thought, if the solicitor bod's insane and they send him through the veil. What if he gets worse and becomes the Master/Serial Killer blokey in the future??!! that would be creepy, difficult to write I suppose but creepy! Loving it (as always) and can't wait for the next chapter!
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From Utopia on October 02, 2008
She's fierce with a bar of soap is she? In more than the 'washing mouths out sense?' lol! In the recent financial climate there's one method of saving money on your water bill: bathe together! lol!

Oooh, Lucius's Death Eater face! If the solicitor wasn't scared, he should be now!

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From Heidi191976 on October 02, 2008
This was a great chapter. I can't wait to read more.
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From ANON - jesustheatheist on October 02, 2008
Well well the mystery is shaping up just nicely. I did have a laugh at the stasis spell pulsing. It made me think of those electric belts you can buy on late night TV that electrocute you instead of exercise. Keep up all the good work. I'm frankly riveted.
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From Scarybearhair on October 02, 2008
Squee! Another chapter
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From on October 02, 2008
My first instinct was for Lucius to kill the bastard. But I can see Hermione's reasonings about not wanting to go there (thank God they are fictional or might have real guilt over condoning murder). The bit about the ministry doing it's own police work made me smile. Letting the Veil decide is brilliant and I won't even try to speculate. I look forward to your next chapter. Thanks for the update!
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From ANON - blue artemis on October 01, 2008
That was great. I would totally go for Lucius if it was he against Ron, especially with books. And I find that bit of Death Eater in him quite attractive.
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From Citten on October 01, 2008
as well it shouldnt be either! :) i can just feel there is lots more! besides i dont think it could be that easy i succebited that he might be part of it he seemed very shaddy, espiecally with the fact that he wanted to know emeditatly what hermiones status was when they arrivied. so i now wonder what you have for us next! :) i love how upset lucius got once hermione told him what happened and he 'stuned' him when he wanted to do more--much more. there is that ferce portection part of him that i love! i also love that she clung to him so to feel that comfort and releif from him. :) it is so sweet. and it was fun to 'watch' the reaction of the retelling of what happened in -her- past. one question though i thaught that ron did write and tell his dad of the drawing room floor in the book? are you tweeking that for the purpose of the story? if you are that is okay but i was just courise. :) untill next chapter!
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From ANON - doodle on October 01, 2008
I am afraid that the veil will suck them all in and send them back to the future. I like them in this era. Maybe the veil will send Nesbitt to the future as a squib! I lok forward to the next installment.
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From ANON - godblessemohair on October 01, 2008
Oh, I do believe I've read The Wedding... I've got to get over my lurker habits, lol.

Who is The Master if it is not Voldemort? Perhaps I missed this somehow.
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From ANON - Jesse on October 01, 2008
I feel really nervous about them going to the Veil!! I hope nothing bad happens!! Anyways.. I love the little tender moments between H and L. H has really got under L's sking hasn't she??!?!
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