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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe

From blueartemis on August 23, 2008
If that is how Lucius likes it, he should be thanking his lucky stars his wife enjoys dishing it out. Thanks for the lemons. So, Lucius is his own great-grandfather, or something like that? That kind of amuses me.
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From Scarybearhair on August 23, 2008
Yay you updated! It always makes my day! :D

Uh-oh! So who is threatening Hermione? You know I can
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From ANON - RhiannonoftheMoon on August 23, 2008
You'll get no complaints about lemons from me! I look forward to each and every one. :) Great story - this is one of my favorite LM/HGs ever. I have a feeling that they will end up back in their own time, however. What will have changed? How will people accept their relationship? Did Severus survive?? When will they tell each other how they fee???

Don't answer any of those. ;)
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From Citten on August 23, 2008
well i know i quenched my thirst! and about time too. ;) well they both got a good taste for what they like and finding what they can be good at. :) boy he really found a jem in her didnt he? i really do want to see those riding lessons! (on real horses by the way.) ooohhh there are so many possiblities with that senero--but your the writer. :) that was just such a fun chapter! so hermione got a howler and threats and lucius is worried--i love it! so 'children' i love the idea. i also love that hermione is not going to let him have full say in rearing said children. so i am really looking forward to the conversation where they decide on said children. :) so do i really have to wait a whole week for the next chapter?! :) (just thought i would ask.....okay whine about it.)
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From tsorg on August 23, 2008
Very delicious. I like how you are able to bring out power for Hermione, I'm having the most awful time with that. Lucius keeps taking control on me, it pisses me off. I also like how you have Lucius beat his chest proclaiming his domination and Hermione gets in there and slaps him upside the head! You've got a really great balance going between such strong personalities. Though, I admit, I do really love it when Lucius takes control in your stories, especially in the bedroom, or maybe what leads up to sex, whether it's in the gazebo or a bedroom. I was rereading chapters because the spanking that led to hot sex.... all I can say is Good Lord! Your writing as always is so descriptively wonderful. Lucius in his billowy shirt and tan jodpurs. Lordy, lordy, lordy. I could just picture him. I loved your use of vituperation.
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From ANON - Rini on August 22, 2008
Who would dare send a howler to a Malfoy?!? I don
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From ANON - pittwitch on August 22, 2008
Fanning myself, panting slightly, and not over that stupid riding crop -- the scent of leather, horse and man -- mmmmm ... Hermione needs my nose. I'm in heaven just imagining it. And, Lucius got a little slice of heaven with the slice of that crop through the air and across his backside, eh? I still much prefer hands - on. Perhaps, in a later chapter, Hermione will come to appreciate that approach as well. Sighing wistfully once more, I can close my eyes and just smell him. Yummmm ...
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From ANON - nitesfool on August 22, 2008
20 million.... 20 million.... not even a dent!!!!! AGHHHHH!!! ASSHOLE!!! (though i can't really be mad if he's got it like that and i don't...*sigh*) oh, oh.... and him in his riding out fit... can we say hot... he can ride me anytime! and i love the scarcasm about sprayin himself with horse scent and dressin up to be more interesting!oh my.... did she just make him put on a leash!!!!! that's soooo fuckin hot!!!( by the way... i'me writing the review as i read the chap so if it sounds slightly weird cuza how it's written u know why)... hey, i have a black corset too!!! i can barely breath in it, but i still look HOT as hell in it(*secretly picturing myself as Hermione*)! if she feels slightly perverted for whipping Lucius and likin it... i wonder what that'll make me since i'm the one finding great pleasure in knowing that she's doing it? OMFG!!!! this is so funny... lucius is scared his skin will split, hermione is heady with power, lucius still wants her to continue, hermione is slightly apprehensive cuz she wants to do it right, but that's not gonna stop her from takin the next hit!!!! awww... it's perfect!lol..... is hermione have some aiming problems?!?!?!?!hnmmmm, "did she want that tool buried in her up to her eybrows?" if she doesn't want it, i'll take it... and i love the way u worded it.... i'mma have to use that one!AlRIGHT!!!! THAT'S IT.... I'M ABOUT TO CALL MY MAN CAKES AND SEE IF I CAN GET A QUICKIE DURING HIS LUNCH BREAK!(pauses to pick up phone and dial his number) dAnG it!!!! he can't, but he did promise me that later on tonight he would.....(*and evil smirk spreads across my face as i picture myself writhing beneath his .... wooo.... let me slow it down alittle... i guesss it's time for a shower.... oh oh oh... guess what... i twisted a old phrase to make a new one... check it out.... " So wound up was i in sexual frustration, that i was driven to finger myself into submission."(oh yeah, u WISH u could express urself like that:P) hnmmm i wonder when hermione will finally consent to being impregnated... oh well, i'm not stressin in... when it's time... it's time.... but yes... over all it was a very enjoyable read...keep up the good work... and i hope u didn't mind my running commentary.... byeness!
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From Phreakdom on August 22, 2008
Well done! You
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From ANON - doodle on August 22, 2008
The description of Lucius in riding attire was a wonderful way to start my day. Thanks for the treat!
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From helenesnape on August 22, 2008
It's about time Hermione loosened up with the daytime loving. And Lucius getting smacked with the riding crop...that was just HOT! As far as Lucius 'unleasing a latent dominatrix'...we all have a little dom/sub hidden within us, do we not?! I enjoyed the lemonade very much, thank you.

Now on to the mystery...I am curious about the disharmony regarding the Links. Where did the howler come from? Is it a pureblood that is truly opposed to the education of a 'lower stationed' individual or could it possibly be from a Link themselves? Perhaps that person doesn't want to be publically outed as a non-magical person in a magical world. Or, heaven forbid, is it from someone who actually knows that Hermione isn't the pureblood everyone thinks she is?

I am intrigued by this. I'm looking forward to seeing the mystery further unravel.

Excellent chapter!
MHS
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From Heidi191976 on August 22, 2008
Excellent. I hope that Hermione does get pregnant soon so that she and Lucius can discuss how to raise their children together without him taking the dominating role. I look forward to reading more.
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From soldiersgirl0709 on August 22, 2008
I am so going to be late for work because I was reading this and not putting the kids in the car for grandmas house LOL....I love a fiery Hermione.....love it when shes bossy.

Great lemons....poor lucius's ass though....Ill kiss it better....just bend him over! LMAO

Happy Writing!
SG
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From CoCoM on August 22, 2008
Whoa Nelly! That was certainly tasty...Lucius in riding breeches and boots....Lucius with a riding crop...Lucius out of the riding breeches, having the crop used on him..*guh* Delectable!
I cannot wait to read about where their next naughty adventure takes them...Oh, and of course find out about the plot. Yeah, yeah. The plot.
:-P
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From HermioneMalfoFan on August 22, 2008
Hah, how could we possibly mind the lemons??? Well, I might not be able speak for the others, but I definitly don't!

Goodness, I LIKE a dominant Lucius! I don't mind that he gets as much as he gives, especially since they both like it, that makes the couple balanced after all, but well - he must stay in charge eventually! (Male dominance I love that - I wonder what that might say about me??? Hmmm... I don't think either of my Ex-Boyfriends ever considered me a "submissive" - guess I am not. Not really :-) )

By the way... I am not too sure I reviewed your last chapter - but I love the idea with the school for squibs (or shall I say links to use the politically correct term?). I am curious to see where that leads.

There is one thing I have been thinking about and that disturbs me a little bit though... If they have only gone back in time, that would mean that Lucius is his own ancestor. That's a bit queer (?? is that the right term?? or would kinky (in a negative way) be more appropriate? whatever hope you understand what I mean), don't you think? So I hope it's really kind of alternate universe thing - but then again that wouldn't help with the sheep... Hm, this is getting a bit complicated. May be you have a much easier solution prepared. I will just have to wait...

Well, as you can certainly tell: I am waiting for your next update!

Sabine
(yes, I reviewed your stories before, didn't have an account then)
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