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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe

From CoCoM on August 10, 2008
Oh, I am thinking this chapter and scene belonged to Hermione and it seems like she was loving it! Great lemon. The image of Lucius sprawled out on a sofa with his head thown back, hair draping, eyes closed while being "serviced" is unbelievably erotic. *giant hot flash approaching* And her thinking about the other painting and intrigued to know if Lucius would be into it or not...again, H.O.T.!
Please update ASAP! We NEED more!!!
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From on August 09, 2008
*raises hand* I'm here for the mystery :)

I thinking that Lucius started off strong, but then they both fell into a mutual satisfaction.

Thanks for the update!
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From Citten on August 09, 2008
who me? (blushing shyly) i would never read over your shoulder. ;) i guess i am just getting more use to your style of writing but i am still not any closer to figuring you out. :) well in all views they are give and take in who is more domaniate, but truely it is lucius--thought he can be brought to his knees wonderfully by a certain little one ;) besides i prefer it with him being the more domante one, with her fighting just enough to keep him on his toes! i look forward to what is going to happen next---yes i do like a mystery but i LOVE your kind of mystery with lots of (as you call it)--smut. :) i will be wait as always for the next chapter.
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From ANON - nitesfool on August 09, 2008
No.... Fuckshit is not a good thing... it means that i'm disgusted and outraged and can't believe that something has been or has to be doneand in some cases, wasn't done. EXAMPLE:" What do u mean my brand new 50' flat t.v. won't be delivered til next week!?!?!?! THAT'S SOME FUCKSHIT!!!! I wanna talk to ur manager!" So, please tell me why since i started reading this story, i've started wanting to be spanked and bitten? My man cakes is alittle confused by the urge, but he agreed to explore my fantasy with me *YAY ME!*. The last two chapters were good.... i do support the advancement of the plot so kudos on that.... and YES!!!!!!! Hermione finally put a dick in her mouth... it's about damn time ~goodjob!~ but alas... i must go, i'm going to be late for work cuz i was reading ur update.Byeness!
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From ANON - jw on August 09, 2008
ch 32-33-34 - I'm glad they've grown closer together, as reflected in their bedroom/gazebo life and interest in recreating "paintings" - :=))) I do hope she gets back to her research - really eager to see what his "uncle" was up to, and how this will change wizarding history/future. hey, are they going to travel up to Regency Hogwarts? maybe consult with portrait-Phineas Black? I am really enjoying your twists in this story!
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From ANON - The Green Fairy on August 09, 2008
Fantastic! I love updates! :)

Im my humble opinion Lucius is the more dominant in bed and otherwise because he restrains his power in order to assure Hermione's comfort, which to me is a sign of dominance, as if he's sparing her the brunt of his lust and anger. however I am inclined to think that Hermione shall surpass him in time because as she lets go of her inhibitions, she will gain ore insight to herself as well as Lucius, and then learn to apply it to her life.

Sound sort of accurate?

Great smut. Great smut! You and the spanking...is most satisfying to the knickers :)

L'amour

The Green Fairy
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From tambrathegreat on August 09, 2008
Chapter 34:

I am reading it for the mystery. Yeah...

He says 'Lick me like a lolly..." Then calls her 'Curly'? How precious is Lucius?

Yeah, I'm glad I'm not at work. I think both assumed the dominant role in this scene. Lucius is more demonstrative in his dominance while Hermione is moe subtle. Both approaches work well for their mates. I can't imagine Lucius wanting a dominant mate that shows it in any other way but the way she does show it.

I also think Hermione, who can be bossy, inflexible and pendantic, wants to be dominated at least in the bedroom. She needs a masterful Lucius (Well, don't we all?) at least in the bedroom. I would hate to see him try it elsewhere.

Great job as always. Yes, the sex was awesome, you know that already.
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From Heidi191976 on August 09, 2008
This was an excellent chapter. I can't wait to read more.
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From ANON - Utopia (not logged in) on August 09, 2008
Blood's non-Newtonian, and it's what I'm looking at for my final 3rd year project. Custard is also non-Newtonian, if you're interested.

As for no colouring from the sun, all I have to do is look in the mirror, you can see the veins at my temples I'm that pale. I take one look at the sun, burn and then go back to drip-white. I used to be able to count all my freckes on my fingers; I've quite a few more these days from the sun, but I've always been very pale. Burning on my nose and cheekbones has given me more freckles to add colour, Even two weeks in the med or Tunisia has me coming home no more tanned than I set off! My back tans a bit, as does my tummy - but you can hardly tell. Though, I spent all last year rather ill, and I think I'm still recovering from that. I like to think of myself as pale and interesting - but my baby does sometimes call me 'death warmed up' on a morning. My colouring comes out of a bottle, and only when I can be bothered to rub the stuff in. I'm sot of a peachy-magnolia shade all over. My Mum's the same, but she spends time under one of those UV sunbeds to give her a slight tan - but I won't go near them as (a)they're bad for you and (b)they make me claustrophobic and want to run a mile (and when you're naked, that's not a good plan)... and I'm completely off topic... back to the fic, lol.

Painting ahead? One of them's an artist? eh?

Oh... painting. *smacks head on keyboard*

At least he's got the sense to know she's sore and abstain a bit for her comfort. A girl likes a fella like that.

Curly? Oh, Lucius, how original lol.

Lucius, if you think you're master in this marriage, then you've a LOT of learning to do! lol! Without her planning menus and organising the staff you'd be screwed to high heaven! You might be the man of the house - but without the woman you're lost at sea! Silly Lucius think's he's the boss.

Lucius, don't p*ss off the woman who will have your penis in her mouth... teeth. are. sharp. 'nuff said. A little nip gets all sorts of things across to a bloke.

Ah... switch Lucius is sooooo much more fun - oh, the possibilites with that one! *mmmmmm, dribbles*

Atleast he washed first, that's just good manners, in my opinion.

,i>Next decade! Lucius, you arse! Does he have ANY idea how frightening the concept is? Took me two YEARS to have the guts to do it! And then I wished I hadn't because I ended up being violently sick! Took me ANOTHER two years (and a very informative book) to have the courage to have another go, much to my baby's utter delight and total shock, he'd resigned himself to never having me do it again... though her pause was for a different reason.

Do the Hogwarts Rose bushes not have thorns? *blink* thorns are sharp and prickly; not to mention the Hogwarts ones have fairies living in them... Nah, I'd be behind a shed somewhere.

There ARE less arousing nerve endings on a penis? Really? I think my other half lacks those! lol! (I'm Soooooo glad he doesn't read this!)

So much for abstaining a bit, Lucius. lol. Wonder why he stopped her?

Oooh, the dominant one... Hermione for sure. As said earlier - don't argue with the woman who's got your bits in her mouth! lol!

No seriously, she was in control through that and Lucius was pretty much passive. His hand position behind his head was a submissive one (and if I recall my readings on such things and various documentories, it's a position of 'questioning'). If Lucius had been the dominant one, he'd have been giving more instructions and his hands would have been placed differently.

He was sat sorta sprawled out on the little sofa thing, and sitting like that with your legs spread is very submissive - you're letting someone have total control of you - all it needs is for her to grab his knees and push and he can't close his legs to stop her. It's a very vulnerable pose. Oral sex with the man standing (providing his feet aren't stuck to the floor, or something similar) gives the man the opportunity to move his legs, as well as look down onto the felatio performer. Lucius could have looked down if he wanted - but she could have stopped him moving. (does that make sense?)

I've also read somewhere that a submissive male should never see their dominant on their knees or performing oral sex - and Lucius had his face to the ceiling of the gazebo with his eyes closed. A female dominant would blindfold a submissive male before kneeling to perform felatio.

Hermione also rode him in a kinda 'female superior position' (how it was described in another book I've read) - that position puts her firmly in the driving seat - and he hasn't really got much leverage to thrust against her.

Yes, Lucius initiated everything, and at first he was the one in charge - but it soon shifted... however, Hermione is very green to all this, and should he have told her to stop and back off she would have... as any submissive/Dominant relationship works - so, in reality, who's actually in charge of such a lifestyle - because a Dominant will back off if a safe word is spoken, and a Dominant still needs consent from a submissive (otherwise its just abuse or rape!)... so, who's incharge? The answer is both - it just depends on the timing.

Wow... that was quite the essay! *blinks*

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From soldiersgirl0709 on August 09, 2008
While I love smut...I mean come on, think about who this is LOL....I am very curious about the mystery. What was the ancestor's involvment with the squibs? Was he "supporting", or "rehabilitating" them? Had he found a method to allow them to use magic? Was he raising an army of squibs to take over the magical world? Is that the legacy left to the despot who sent them crashing through the veil in the first place?

Not that Im complaing about a little nookie in the garden....but I as well as being a "smuttophile" (yes, I am making up words now for my own amusement) I am also an avid lover of plot! =)

Happy Writing!!!!
SG
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From Scarybearhair on August 09, 2008
Oooo LaBib, yes
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From helenesnape on August 09, 2008
You actually asked who is reading this for the mystery? That's like asking if I read Playgirl for the articles. The answer should be obvious. (it's the mystery...it's the articles LOL)

To be honest, I am enjoying the conundrum that is Lucius and Hermione's lives very much. The smut smorgasbord is just a pleasant bonus.

Looking forward to the next chapter!
MHS
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From chickaboo on August 09, 2008
Jason Isaacs is the reason I am even half as in love with Lucius as I am. I've become addicted to Brotherhood as of late. Michael Caffee.....mmmmmmmmmm. Is it bad that'd I'd go for him even knowing all the things I do about him? lol Great update, I can't wait for more!
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From Pumkin on August 09, 2008
thanks for another wonderful update. you can never keep everyone happy all the time but you do a pretty good job of it. keep up the wonderful lemons and if you have to mystery. update soon please.
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From blueartemis on August 08, 2008
I think they alternated a bit being dominant. And if she was as aroused as you described, the sore rear just made it all that much more intense. I like that Lucius took the lead and then let her do things her own way. And I enjoyed the way she was teasing him.
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