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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe
  • From Phreakdom on July 31, 2008
    My, my, my, another lovely addition as always. Lucius is quite passionate but I
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  • From CoCoM on July 31, 2008
    Total hotness! *fans self* Oh my word, that was just....very nice. Hermione needs to get a clue soon and help poor Lucius out!
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  • From CoCoM on July 31, 2008
    Mean cliffie, indeed! I cannot wait to see what he does....
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  • From tambrathegreat on July 31, 2008
    Wow, I'm going to have to stop reading your stories at work. That was certainly a chapter I didn't want to share with my coworkers. Hot is not the word for Lucius pounding into Hermione in all ways. Now, that I'm safely home, are re-read the chapter, It's even hotter. It was sweet (Don't tell Lucius I said that about him) that Lucius was so jealous of the 'Wizard of Auds.' Poor Lucius, thinking he had competition, and lucky Hermione. Maybe she shouldn't explain to him until the morning, after a little resinging of the song. Great job.
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  • From CoCoM on July 30, 2008
    LOL! You have to love opportunistic Lucius! Glad he came to Hermione's aid but disappointed he had to ruin his immediate chances with her due to his less than pleasant dealings wih a nasty trollop. Bad Lucius!
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  • From CoCoM on July 30, 2008
    Hey, I think if I were in Lucius's place I would take advantage of every situation I could as well! Glad he found Hermione before anything too terribly bad happened.
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  • From CoCoM on July 30, 2008
    Hermione is making me laugh so much with her outrage when Lucius got ready, used the chamberpot *gasp*, etc. She is too crazy. I am a bit bitter though as I tried the link at the end of this chapter, totally had my "droolrag" at hand and then....it didn't work!
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  • From blueartemis on July 30, 2008
    He really needs to ask her why she does stuff sometimes, but the result seemed to be good for both of them. Nice lemon. Anyway, I find it amusing that he figures he has to hide his feelings because he is insecure about her. He hasn't noticed that she feels the same way? They are so much alike sometimes.
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  • From Utopia on July 30, 2008
    The only gory Anita Blake is Obsidian Butterfly - and I couldn't get past chapter 4! I've given up on LKH, its just pure porn now - no plot what so ever (unless it's a recycled one from a past book). Book five is the one you want - she sleeps with JC and it's just a perfect smut scene!

    Awww... no ickle people yet. *panic* Did I just request a baby in a fic? Have I lost it? I hate kids!

    Is she drunk? *blink* I was Glenda in tWoO when I was eleven, I wore a horror of a frock that my Mum had once worn to be a bridesmaid in! I know brides often dress their maids in awful dresses to make themselves look good - but that monstrosity took the biscuit! lol!

    I had to look up infinitesimally, good word. That paragraph had lots of good words. I just got a DS - and I'm going to get word coach to go with my Brain Training! I might be able to keep up with you then! lol!

    I wouldn't want to be in Lucius's shoes when he goes over what's happening now. It's taken long enough to get Hermione to be an active partner in bed - and this was rather unexpected. I know she's not complaining, and is obviously aroused - but this feels so forced to me; he's a dominating presence, but he's using his upperhand of sexual knowledge to punish when he doesn't realise what he's punishing... it might be a rather large set back in their relationship - his using their intimacy as a reprimand won't go down well at all! And if he knew what was good for him he'd get down on his knees and beg she doesn't castrate him for it!!!!

    Right... back to a happier note... I do like how you just innocently remind the reader where they've come from! The reader is just like the people of whatever-the-era is (can't remember) - we feel as if they're part of it and have forgotten they're from C21! You're a bit like Tolkien with that one - he very rarely tells you the Hobbits are short - but slips in little, subtle reminders that just keep you recognising that they're 3' tall.

    You know, the OED had this thing of looking for when words and phrases were first written down and documented... when the heck did Fuck enter the English language? And was its original meaning the one it still has today?? *just curious* I know that Hussy is a very old word - turns up quite frequently in the P&P fics! But I wonder if Hermione asking to be fucked is a word the veil has planted in her mind, or something a more accepting sexual nature has introduced?

    OMG! I wrote the F word twice in a review! I'm sorry! Won't do it again!

    11/10





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  • From LadyVoldemort87 on July 30, 2008
    LMAO, Wizard of Oz? Lucius is jealous of HIM? My god LaBib, I enjoyed this chapter!

    The red shoes tickled me, I have a pair of Dorothy's myself, and never thought about the potent power of them before LOL

    Looking forward to the next chapter!
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  • From Heidi191976 on July 30, 2008
    An excellent chapter. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From ANON - Rini on July 30, 2008
    Hi LaBib

    Yeah, I found out they were actually meant to be silver after I first saw the movie. Apparently the silver colour was too hard to put on film back then.

    Those ensembles were rather ghastly *giggle*

    Lol! Of course Lucius would take Hermione singing about the Wizard of Oz the wrong way :)

    What
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  • From CoCoM on July 30, 2008
    This is so clever! I am guessing they have arrived around about the time of the Napoleonic wars? I am totally bugged that I have to go to work and can't keep reading all day! *sulk*
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  • From helenesnape on July 30, 2008
    Let me start off by saying that I've only recently started reading your story. I've read up to chapter 15 thus far and I am completely hooked! I read your submissions for SG's Love Song challenge, so I knew that I wouldn't be disappointed with you longer story.

    I am mesmerized. This world you have spun...back in time without the use of a timeturner...is very original. I like it!

    Great fic so far!

    Looking forward to more,
    MHS
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  • From CoCoM on July 30, 2008
    LOL! "I don't think I could find your bosoms with a road map." I was giggling so much reading that bit. Looking forward to more bickering and UST to come!
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