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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe

From ANON - pittwitch on July 08, 2008
I'll be keeping all future guesses to myself ... disenfranchisement indeed!

Thanks for sharing, Pitt
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From ANON - Jesse on July 08, 2008
I can't believe I am saying this.. but I am on the fence on whether or not I want a lemon or not!!! Oh my what is the world coming to?!?! :) I want a lemon for these two, but I want to know what is going on just as much. I think it is do for a lemon though.. we can rest our brains from trying to figure all of this out.
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From ANON - onduril on July 08, 2008
Ok, we'll leave Lucius as the heir and go on with the other mistery.
I got some theories about the uncle and the pair from thirty years ago, but I am not sure whether they are right as I am not writing the story.
But nonetheless, a great chapter and I am looking forward to the next one and see how Hermione takes it to be spanked.

Have a nice week and don't forget us here.

A faithful Delurker...^^
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From Utopia on July 08, 2008
OMG! In the opening, Hermione could easily be Lizzy with her hate of the tete-et-tetes with the socailites! I've read so much P&P fanfics with Lizzy complaining about the many Carolines! lol! You're feeding my muse lady!

What's to stop her transfiguring the bloomers into Frenchies? I'm a sod for knickers (as well as socks) and I just bought a pair that wouldn't look out of place on a Moulin Rouge cancan dancer! You know, with all the frills and bows! Can't she transfigure a pair (or six) of them? They're a bit more naughty; Lucius might stop laughing!

I was rather bored one day, and avoiding coursework... and I worked out the genetics of Harry Potter! I thought it was a combination of two sets of genes that made it up. One set of genes gives the ability to use magic, and is dominant (so MM or Mm would be magical); but there has to be something that means muggleborns and squibs can exist - so there has to be a recessive gene for the ability to use or access the magic (so aa would let you be completely magical if you were MM or Mm!) A squib would be dominanat for both - having magical ability but not the ability to use it... and the muggle borns could turn up if the genes all matched up! (did that make sense?)

Oooh, black lace. mmmmm. Awww! no corsets! I do like my corsets! (Though, they'd be referred to as a pair of stays in that time, accodring to P&P DVD. I love that DVD! mmmm, McFadden as Darcy... *dribble*)

Lucius makes her sound like a pedigree from the Kennel Club! KC pedigrees are BRILLIANT to read, my former boss was a prize winner at Crufts (best in breed and best junior, but no best in shows - yet). He's being rather insulting - but at least he was honest and told her!

Ooooh, painting.

Stuffing in a lemon? Has this fic just turned into a Sunday roast chicken?? Is there some sage and onion in there too?
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From Phreakdom on July 08, 2008
Hermione must have the patience of a saint to put up with those horrid gossip sessions although I
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From AndreaLorraine on July 05, 2008
Random thoughts that may or may not be valid: perhaps the loan and the squib ideas are connected. As in, there is a squib that was born into the Malfoy family, which of course would have been secreted away. Perhaps the loan is the family's way of trying to ensure the squib child's comfort? Or perhaps someone is blackmailing them with the knowledge that there was a squib born into the family, and that's where the money is going to? Or maybe I'm just up too late and spouting conspiracy theories. It would be mighty interesting, though, if, in a trickle-down effect through time, the New Wave Master ended up being a shunned distantly-related squib Malfoy.

*exhales*
And I'm done.
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From AndreaLorraine on July 05, 2008
Hm. Lots to think about here.

Lucius isn't appreciative of the Veil bringing out his and Hermione's fears, but if it hadn't I think that could have turned into a bad fight. Very creepy and thought provoking that someone or something related to the Veil was laughing in his head at his resistance. So the Veil is definitely sentient. If it can laugh, can it speak? Or was it not the Veil at all? Confusion!

Loved that Lucius got his epiphany about the squibs while groping Hermione. Classic. :)

I also liked the part about the grains in the time-turners being ground up pieces of the Veil. Smart and inventive, but then, you always are!

There are a lot of variables here. I'm most intrigued by the mysterious 'LOAN' from last chapter. I have a feeling it's going to turn out to be very important. It simultaneously irks and exhilarates me that I can't put all the pieces together yet - which basically means you're doing an excellent job with this tale.
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From Scarybearhair on July 04, 2008
Aw Lucius is just a pussycat underneath it all, isn
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From Citten on July 04, 2008
well one more step forward. so what next! :) i do hope that you will update soon!
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From ANON - sheherazade on July 04, 2008
Aha, eureka, the Squibs! It all begins to fall into place...

And bless their little insecurities - now they know where they stand (and if they falter, perhaps the Veil offers Marriage Guidance).

So will Hermione become an Unspeakable? Will Lucius fall on his knees again (must admit, that was an attractive image in my head; along with his spiffy Regency threads)? And...most importantly of all...when is the spanking scene? Heh.

I'm so glad to have finally caught up with my reading of this...I wish I understood how you seem to be always on form, every chapter, all the time. Tis witchcraft!
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From AlexandraMalfoy on July 04, 2008
Oh no no! I can't believe Hemoine is going to forgive Lucius that easy. He indulged in sexual acts in this case spanking in the bordello and he's getting away with it. And not even that, Hermoine blames it subconciously on herself for being hurt by her former lovers and being ths repressed? That must be a joke. If he truly cared for her than he would have waited and introduced it to her. But like this he cheated on her. Or is spanking not sex? I do think so. I really enjoyed the story so far, but that kind of spoils it to me. I know women in love or sexual need are somewhat blinded and misguided, but I just don't think a woman like Hermoine reacts that way. Is he getting his way, I wonder. Stepping over her feelings and she is happily inviting him to continue? What trash. Seriously, if she lets him get away with it, he will go on in the same manner.
Sorry, if I offended you by my review. It's not meant to be personal. I just get furious when I see men behave like that and get away with that. I hope in the other chappies she will understand that he has to change. and if he does not, that he has to suffer the consequences. Maybe she should leave him for a bit.

Sorry again, for the review, but I wanted to be honest. Cause the rest of the story was really good and I just had really big problems with that scene. Okay, not the scene itself. But with Moine's reaction.
Anyways, LOL, Alex
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From ANON - jw on July 04, 2008
ch 26-28 - wow! I was despairing that Hermione would ever stop being so 'prickly' to poor Lucius, and then the Veil brought all their feelings to the surface. well done, Veil! I wonder if Hermione will start being nicer to the brothel employees, perhaps teach them how to read and write. so, Squibs are the 'weak' part of his prophecy, but the 'root'.... would that be the ancestor of the madman Muggle who was killing everyone in their time? here's hoping that Hermione will now go for daylight shags and a more adventurous painting. thanks for the new chapters!!!
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From RhiannonoftheMoon on July 04, 2008
I'm glad that they are working through some of the issues in their marriage. They are doing very well, especially considering that used to be enemies and that they don't know each other that long. Great chapter!
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From on July 04, 2008
I'm so glad they cleared a few things up too. I was quite thrilled with the way you wove in Hermione's memories from the future into what she was viewing in her new timeline. Nicely done. Thanks for the update!
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From angelprince on July 03, 2008
Am giggling with the idea that Filch could be the master. LOL. (OMG, he's not is he?)

That veil certainly has personality! It actually laughed at Lucius. Too funny.

You know what I like about this fic? Past the whole spanking thing, I have no clue as to what will happen next. You truly are a master of words Labib. (OMG!!! MASTER!!! It's you isn't it???)
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