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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe

From fallingmagic on June 26, 2008
Okay, I tried to send a review earlier but my computer spazzed out and I don't think it sent it so let me try again. This is an absolutely amazing story. I stayed up until 5 am when I had to get up at 7. I could not drag myself away. I kept promising myself 5 more minutes and well, we know how that goes. Please keep up the amazing job. I can't wait to read what happens next....and which painting Lucius chooses. Can you please add me to an update email...falling_magic@yahoo.com. Thanks!! :)
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From ANON - Rini on June 26, 2008
The slobby clothing is pass
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From on June 24, 2008
Sometimes they are too smart for their own good. Again, I look forward to your next update. Thanks!
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From ANON - doodle on June 24, 2008
Lovely, lovely, lovely. Art is essential to a well rounded education. I can not begin to guess where you will lead. However I am ready to follow.
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From Scarybearhair on June 24, 2008
Oh my, oh my, oh my! The beginning of this chapter is steaming hot. And you were so amazingly descriptive too. I think I was squirming in my chair as I was reading this. I almost think Lucius would have to tie me down for that kind of treatment.
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From tambrathegreat on June 23, 2008
Poor Hermione can't seem to disengage her mind for a moment and let the little trickles of love flow. Lucius may be just what she needs in this situation. His manipulation is going to allow her to believe in herself and her own sexuality.

After that shared moment of communion, what was she thinking? And what is Lucius thinking letting his thoughts stray already to other women he might bed in the future? Okay, I know he and Narcissa had a more open relationship, but his new leaf program has turned once again. It's a little black around the edges. Of course, he is just as frightened of intimacy as Hermione. I doubt he and Narcissa, no matter how well bonded were intimate in the true sense of the word.

The Orb is an interesting twist. I think the cutting of the root refers to the pureblood mania of the Malfoy line, and the person he is to embrace is Hermione. I may be wrong, but at least I'm thinking. I'm stil mystified as to who the Master is. Maybe Filch, a stunted little squib if I ever saw one.

I still want to have Lucius tied up and at least tickled by Hermione, a little spanking would do him good too. He needs to give up some of that 'autonomy' to his new wife, and she needs to wield the whip, so to speak so that she might be able to trust her own instincts about Lucius.

Nice job, and I just figured out how to write my review while I was reading. Yahooooo!
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From blueartemis on June 23, 2008
OK, that was fun, although Hermione's bit about the space-time continuum kind of reminded me of a Star Trek episode for some reason. In a good way. I wonder how long it will take for Lucius to realize he doesn't get to play around on this wife? And that they are really in to each other. I envy their sex life, actually.
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From angelprince on June 23, 2008
I'm very curious about who this 'Master' is. Anyone we know? Oh, that's right, you're withholding that for now. How about a clue? Not even a tiny one?

Lucius gets to pick the next painting. Squeeeeeeeeeeeeee! Can't wait.
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From LadyVoldemort87 on June 23, 2008

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From TheLadyMiya on June 23, 2008
Yay, new chapter! And once again I start to review before I even have read the chapter... I will try to keep down the rambling in this one, I'm tried so I will probably do a lot of errors anyway and they tend to get worse when I ramble... Gods, now I'm rambling again! Oh, lemons! I will begin to read now...

"as thought he'd done it many times before." Hermione is so sweet and innocents... I bet Lucius has done it several times before :P How else would he know Hermione tasted sweet? I mean, you can't tell from one orange if it's sweet or not. You have to try several ^^

Hm... what do wealthy wizards do during their days? I have a very wealthy friend and all he seem to do is drink beer and make money out of thin air... It's strange. I bet Lucius is doing something naughty! Like... running that brothel :P
Hehe, speaking of Lucius and his hair that Hermione seem to like pulling. Hm.. doesn' he use lust-potion in his shampoo? Becuase that would really explain a lot.... or perhaps longharied guys just are.... hot. And he really is a good lover... why doesn't they exist in the real world?! Or if they do, why can't I meet them?

Speaking of Little Death... Did you come up with that name or does it exist, I know you can pass out after a climax, but I have never heard the name before... Ah, well, that wasn't what I was going to say, what I was going to say is that have you ever thought about how such a strong emotion could affect Hermione's and Lucius' magic? I have read in some stories how Hermione's magic kind of... manifests or something... Cracks and sending her lover into a wall or... well... you get the picture. But this theroy (which I won't be rambling about... I won't) would only work if you have the theroy that magic comes from emotions (like they say all the time in "Charmed" - the tvserie) or not come from you emotions... but work with your emotions... But.... Hm... where does magic come from? Right, I won't ramble because this is just a story and I don't have any proof that magic exist.

Hihi, oh, Hermione is so sweet "Immune to men" hehe, if she where immune to men, she would probably be a lesbian, and the would probably still be very wanton. Hm... unless she was complelty asexual... but noo.. not with Lucius..
Oh, misunderandings... they both want something more than just "no strings" but they have to much pride to say it... what a shame...

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From amyfeddy on June 23, 2008
It's so funny to see Lucius be so vunerable and insecure on the inside, but so sure on the outside. They should definitely not kill each other, they have to much fun with their playful banter. Love the little death for hermione, she really needs to give in to her thoughtsand feelings about Lucius.
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From Tenar10r on June 23, 2008
his turn to pick a painting! *woohoo*
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From mlui on June 23, 2008
Great chapter! With 'everyone else,' I meant the other characters such as Harry, Ginny, Ron, etc. We know that Lucius doesn't know what happened to Draco and his family and that Hermione isn't at all close to Ron anymore, but I'm curious to know what happened to Harry, Ginny, Mr. & Mrs. Weasley, etc. Was Hermione still close with them before all this happened?
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From soldiersgirl0709 on June 23, 2008
Why is it I always assume Lucius to be rather gifted in the oral arts? Is it just wishful thinking? A hunch? I would do just about anything to investigate this theory of mine.

I dont like the way Hermione turned away from him after. He didnt either apparently.(I dont like it even when I write it LOL cuz I know I would cuddle right up into him and go to sleep) He seems to want to be needed, to be loved and Im sure it galls him to want it from HER.

I was thinking about synonyms...a recent hobby of mine(geez Im a geek)...and a rather naughty past time lately with a couple of good friends has been finding them for various body parts and activities. One that makes me giggle, but I have found in several regency romances and was included in a workshop for authors I recently took was the word "pip" for clit. I dont know why it amuses me...I could seriously be heading towards complete insanity, but I cant help it, I laugh every time I read it and for some odd reason it made me think of you and this story.

Nice to see he is making sure his "girls" arent just receptacles for sperm...quality courtesans who catered to every need would make his the most highly sought out brothel in Britain. Are they witches or muggles? Will he set up shop in knockturn alley? Lucius the pimp...well he has the cane.....

Well...happy writing!

~SG~

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thanks for asking about the family...kids are wonderful....hubby, I wouldnt know unfortunately.....into each life a little rain must fall, for me its a biblical flood. =( Will continue reading, breaking my own rules LOL
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From ANON - pasen852 on June 23, 2008
love it so far sorry for not reviewing b4 but could not stop reading i love it when he gets all stroppy makes me smile i do hope someone is stupid enough to take a fancy to Hermione !!!
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