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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe

From ANON - mandi on June 23, 2008
omg. great chapter. i CANNOT wait to see what painting Lucius picks.
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From Heidi191976 on June 23, 2008
This was a great chapter. I can't wait to read more.
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From ANON - Malfoysplaymate on June 23, 2008
Wow! Ok I've finally caught up to all your stories so far. I spent all night reading everything you've written and I must say I'm glad I did! You are a very talented writer and I enjoy your stories immensely. Hope you update soon!
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From Jocelyn25 on June 23, 2008
Ohhhhh they have to find a way to stop the Master somehow is my guess, but how?!
And when is Hermione *finally* growing up and realizing that its fun to shag Lucius and it would be even more fun to love him i bet. *sighs* ;)
Anyways, another great chapter that keeps me on my toes.

Love
Jocy
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From dolphindreamer on June 23, 2008
Being a marshmellow is a perfectly acceptable thing to be. I certainly hope Lucius figures out Hermionie's avoiding him emotionally because she's scared and he does something about it. Keep it up, love this story and your writing!
~Dolphin dreamer
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From ANON - Jesse on June 23, 2008
OHHHH!!! I liked that one!! Things are getting interesting, in and out of bed!! :)
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From Utopia on June 23, 2008
I COULDN'T HELP IT! IT WAS IRRESISTIBLE!

*giggles
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From pittwitch on June 23, 2008
Oh my, Lucius' turn to pick a painting. Can't wait to see which "scene" he would like to reenact. And that Master ... looking more like a disenfranchised wizard, perhaps a maltreated squib or someone who felt they didn't get their just desserts after the War? Was thinking Snape ... but, his lack of presence in the future would alter too much or maybe not. Hmmmm, just love a tasty mystery. Thanks for sharing! PW
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From Utopia on June 23, 2008
Holiday: Skegness. British coastline = crap weather and rust instead of a suntan! lol! Yeah... the other half will probably get me ten rolls of rubber wallpaper and a lobotomy if I say 'oh yes, and LaBib says hi to Bob.'

*blink* Well, that's certainly one way to open a chapter! Wow!

Oooh, he's all secretive - and I suddenly had a thought of Snape as the Master, and then I laughed at myself for it.

Lucius would find hiss bits and bobs in nooses and banned from the bed if he DARED stray from her! It wouldn't surprise me if she flipping castrated him with a rusty razor blade and left him to bleed to death! What IS he thinking?! Does he have a death wish??

Does Lucius do tongue exercises? Seriously, oral sex isn't something most can keep up for long! Has he got a thing for figs as a practice mechanism? (not to mention it is good for... erm... keeping things moving).

Can I answer Hermione's question of 'where do I go from here?': (1) kitchen for carbs (2) back to bed and burn them off. Simple.

These two aren't on the same flipping song sheet! Or, more accurately they are, but they're singing in two different choirs! Can you, the esteemed author, just bang their heads together for us?

Prophesy! Ooooh! Has Hermione got one too? Bit vague, but I have to agree that the Divination people were a bit floaty with their explanations.

marshmallow? We can just review, right? We don't have to perform some strange ritual of drowning you in hot chocolate; or dance around where you're being burnt at the stake and prod you with sticks.

And how many cups of tea have I consumed today? The above is weird, even for me!
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From chickaboo on June 23, 2008
Well. What a way to start a chapter! Goodness honey I nearly swallowed my own tongue from the shock. Which I quickly got over and hence quite enjoyed that first bit.....*shivers* mmmmmmm t'was much yumminess to be read And I like how Hermione is starting to realize her feeling for Lucius, and I think it's cute how miffed Lucius gets over her determination to remain detached. He needs to remember that just cause their married doesn't mean that he can't still 'court' her and try to woo her. Wow, so things are starting to make a little more sense, or at least come to light. I can't wait to see where this goes. And Lucius's turn to pick a painting eh? Oh I am definitely looking forward to that.
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From sheherazade on June 22, 2008
Who is the Veil? Who is in control? I feel I must know immediately, damn it!

I found their conversation fascinating (and it made me laugh that Lucius didn't even remember who Buckbeak was - that's very him!). I like that Hermione doesn't give him an inch, and he is man enough to respect her opinions now. I wonder why Hermione would be so hung up on sex before marriage though - I understand that any Regency chick would be like that, but Hermione doesn't strike me as having much of the True Love Waits about her (especially as she'd probably laugh at the idea of Lucius being her True Love). I can see that she might have some issues still ongoing from previous bad relationships though, so it would make sense on that level.

I am truly excited by what they might uncover (and not just in terms of clothing removal either ;)). More, more, more etc.
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From sheherazade on June 22, 2008
Ch24: Well, THANK GOD you got Lucius to change the bedsheets - they were turning my stomach and I couldn't even see them!

Nothing like a good view of a sleeping male torso in the morning; beats coffee any day! Mind you, even if Snape in all his rickmanesque glory intruded into my bathroom activities it would still freak me right out, so I think Hermione reacted very calmly to Lucius' stunt there.

I love the porno wall decorations - and very clever of Lucius to use them to gauge Hermione's little kinks and tastes. I wonder which ones she'll point out...

Lovely morning-after chapter; I love all the references to her very thoroughly-used feminine areas, heh.

Can't wait for the next one - oh, hang on, I don't have to, do I? Onward!
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From Utopia on June 22, 2008
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Prime directives... are we boldly going where no man has gone before? And if we are, I want first dibs on Raiker! Okaaaaaaaaaaay, back in THIS fandom, remember Utopia: Lucius, Lucius, Lucius....

Veil talk is honestly giving me a bit of a headache trying to get my head around it; so I'm going to go with the flow and not think about it - because otherwise I'm going to be so utterly befuddled.

I'll tumble over breakfast! Pick me! Pick Me!

I thought marriage WAS teamwork! Has Lucius missed Hermione's meaning on that one?

I like Hermione's attitude: Killing isn't worth it. Trouble is, it smacked her new hubby in the face - not good for tumbling between the toast and jam.

Sex is one of those ancient things that's considered spiritual in so many cultures on some level - perhaps it is the most ancient form of magic in existence - heck I've seen stars a few times!

Ah... the Master is a HE - might not have been. And my money is honestly on a squib who's using something to control people.

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From Utopia on June 22, 2008
I go on holiday, and when I come back I have absolutely no blinking idea where I am in so many fics! I'm 2 chaps behind in this and 10 in Snape-Goddesses's new one! I'm so lost! I came back lovely and brown from my holidays - no suntan, it was RUST - all it's done is blooming RAIN! Summer? What's that?! lol.

Bed hog! Not that I've got room to talk - my 5' frame quite happily goes digonally across our bed, and my other half ends up scrunched up in one corner!

Can I have a fresh rag for dribbling on after the description?

Tomcat with two... BRILLIANT!

Those sheets sound like our sofa at uni... I can't look at it with my specs on because the pattern moves and makes me a bit queesy - and the cover we have isn't big enough and falls off.

Surely bathroom functions are not to be shared?? My other half won't wee when I'm in the bathroom, he'd rather hold it until I'm out of the bath!

Ooooooh, he doesn't share. That's a surprise, I'd thought there wasn't much he hadn't done!

Such an odd thing, the whole naked promenade thing - but it fits perfectly! You are good at that, making the surreal fit into place.

doohinky... that's a new one on me! I call my other half's bob. Trouble is, I also call my fish bob...

Another smashing chappie! Something nice to come home to!

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From ANON - jw on June 22, 2008
ch 25 - (looks woebegone...) I think I feel as confused as Lucius! after the lovely night and talk of 'paintings,' this morning conversation was unexpected - talk of Azkaban and Dementors, the Veil forcing them to marry, etc. she doesn't really know how to be diplomatic or sensitive, although she did pay him that small compliment. but that's rather canon-Hermione. well, I wonder how far they'll succeed in getting to the Veil at the Ministry. thanks for the new chapter!!
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