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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe
  • From Utopia on May 26, 2008
    I read and reviewed earlier... and my browser decided it wanted to play with the fairies and promptly crashed! I just looked and it didn't post. *sulk*

    *prances around like a peacock* I'm a RAVISHING reviewer. *preens*

    Its just a coincidence then, you've always had a chapter up every Sunday after I finish work! I thought you had a schedule! Though, glad to know there's no problems!

    Can we have coloured lacy knickers? Maybe even with embroidered flowers on them? please?

    Church? Oooh, is Lucius going to do the right thing? Ah, evidently not. He's doing it to get into her multicoloured knickers!

    you know, the whole "Of course I love her, she's my wife" thing is rather reminiscent of Princess Dianna and Prince Charles, they were interviewed before their wedding, and Dianna said she loved him, and he said it hadn't come to that. Dianna looked so crestfallen.

    He's rather good at quashing her fears, though his arguments still scream of a marriage of convenience - or more accurately a marriage because there isn't anyone else. Its like an 'if you're not married by 30, I'll have you'.

    I am caveman, hear me roar. I'll go kill a mammoth for my petite little cavewomen, and then we'll have caveman sex because I'm all grr. lol.

    I really LOVE the puddle reference.

    And if all else fails... snog her senseless.

    Though, every girl dreams of the big wedding, the dress, the flowers... she gets a late night, no pretty dress and two random people as witnesses.

    The speed of the wedding... sounds a smidge shotgun that does. I bet the vicar wasn't just worrying about the 'Lord of the Manor' thing, but is the young lady's chastity (and condition) in question?

    SPARKLES! PRETTY SPARKLES! PRETTY SPARKLES! EXPENSIVE SPARKLES!

    The wizards don't like people re-saying their vows or re-committing? Or is that too modern?

    Food and the wedding night... though I have a feeling that the veil might have re-attached a certain little bit of membrane for Hermione.




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  • From ANON - Josie on May 26, 2008
    Why do I find a man jerking off so hot ?
    Probably because you wrote it
    and because it's Lucius..
    Great chapter!
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  • From ANON - Jesse on May 26, 2008
    FANTASTIC!!! Great chapter. I loved the snake rings. 'Cherish' haha!! Can't wait for more, you do an amazing job on this.
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  • From amyfeddy on May 26, 2008
    Your comment for chapter 19 saying that there were no lemons in that chapter made me almost not want to read it, but like I said it would have been a terrible punishment to have missed that chapter. Especially since it had a nice little cliffy that led to chapter 20, which was also very good. You just write the sexual tension so well, and their characters are so right on with each other. I will wait patiently for the lemons, because whining and threats don't work. ;)
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  • From ANON - pittwitch on May 26, 2008
    Women of the era fainted with frightening regularity because of their constricted breathing ala stays and corsets laced much too tight for fashion. The lack of oxygen did them in.

    Caveman, oh yes please, Caveman!

    ROFLMAO - Viagra at the Vatican -- but given the Church's sordid history I worry that it might be a good seller in some quarters. No, no, won't go there.

    Wedding night! Hallelujah! Hallelujah!

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  • From LadyBlueEyes on May 26, 2008
    Yay...a wedding! i had a feeling this might happen. Another great chapter, La Bib. I like that we saw a spark of the old Hermione when she changed obey to cherish without even thinking about it. I don't have any questions at the moment though, as i hope i am right about what the next chapter should contain...lol. ;-) Looking forward to reading more....
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  • From angelprince on May 26, 2008
    Another great chapter. Lucius is a such a smoothy. I really believe he could sell Viagra to the Vatican.

    Hermione didn't put up much of a fight. That girl is so whipped.

    Oh, the leather-clad hands did not go un-noticed. Thank You. Thank You. Thank You.
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  • From ANON - Josie on May 26, 2008
    I LOVE the sexual frustration! How's Hermione going to hold up with her libido awake after allt this time.. ON WITH THE READING.
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  • From Citten on May 26, 2008
    THANK YOU! THANK YOU!!! you most surely are forgiven for a minute, but now i would like for you to have the next chapter up. and dont just do the dinner either. ;) you know what we all want to get to it already! :) i love that she just accepted the fact that she has just married into a family of slytherins well now i really want to see what house there children are going to be in! :) but all in good time. first the wedding night!!!
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  • From sheherazade on May 26, 2008
    (That's the year 1900, not seven o'clock in the evening, lol. Mind you, they're wizards, so you can always say that they have different traditions. Scrub my last point - carry on!)
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  • From sheherazade on May 26, 2008
    LOL, I love it! Lucius doesn't even bother to propose - just hustles Hermione into the church and lets her get on with it! They even get up to a few shenanigans on consecrated ground, the naughty pair. Mmmm, I can just see Lucius, resplendent in his groomly finery. Poor (?) Hermione certainly has a lot to think about, but I'm sure she'll come round once she realises that Lucius knocks all those unsexy Gryffindors and Ravenclaws into a cocked hat.

    Delightful chapter and dare I hope that the next one covers the consummation????

    (Sorry to carp, but the Veil isn't doing its job properly if it hasn't told Lucius that men didn't wear wedding rings before 1900.)
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  • From chickaboo on May 26, 2008
    Booyahhh! I was so right. LOL Great update...Lucius...sigh, he is a sly one. But admittedly that was rather a sweet gesture on his part. Although it was also rather to his benefit as well. But that's just one of the many reasons why we love him. I can't wait for more, especially as I'm rather curious to see just how much of dinner Lucius makes it through before he becomes a "caveman" and acts on his "predatory male" instinct. Oh and just for the record, if Hermione chickens out again I volunteer to take her place! LOL
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  • From tambrathegreat on May 26, 2008
    That was not what I expected at all. Thank you for making Lucius decent to Hermione. I think they both need each other.
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  • From ANON - Rini on May 26, 2008
    I checked before and since you didn
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  • From Phreakdom on May 26, 2008
    It sounds like Hermione intends to stay emotionally detached but something tells me she won
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