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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe
  • From ANON - maddie50 on April 21, 2008
    So much for Lucius's quick escape with a raging hard on and a preoccupied Hermione. What was he thinking? Oh, yeah. Never mind. It is pretty funny that they both have sore asses so no one can be bottom. Now that the negotiations are out of the way, I think it is smart of Hermione to go with Lucius on his errands. He is too randy to let loose.
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  • From ladyravenna on April 21, 2008
    Devious Lucius using a little of reverse psychology on Hermione to get her into his bed. LOL. "What works, do" I can see being Lucius' mantra. I didn't there was a "Diagon Alley." I am confused.
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  • From sheherazade on April 21, 2008
    Go Lucius! He cut right to the quick of Hermione's vulnerabilities there, didn't he? But he's quite right - two losers a decade ago should not stop any woman shagging Mr Malfoy! It's a criminal waste of opportunity! He crept right up and moved in for the kill; lovely to behold.

    Incidentally, it's a pity Lucius and Hermione don't have access to the internet. I bet they'd find some advice on post-thrashing sex positions ;).

    How the hell are they going to wait two days or more!?! They need some kind of potion, I reckon.
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  • From blueartemis on April 20, 2008
    Oooh. Very cool, I like the way that logic worked on her. Well, it is Hermione. And Lucius certainly isn't an idiot, but I think the idea of something enticing him away from Hermione may be fleeting, or he would not like the results.
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  • From Damiana on April 20, 2008
    Chapter 14

    Have you ever read or seen Richard III? (Shakespeare's of course...)

    Lucius' seduction of Hermione kinda put me in mind of the scene where Richard seduces Anne over the body of the murdered king. Obviously Lucius isn't deformed and Hermione is not grieving over the murders of two people she cared about... Erm. Anyways. Richard just kind of turns a situation in which she claims to hate him and wishes him dead and essentially gets her to accept his ring and eventually his bed. It's strange and interesting...

    Right.

    I'll take off my literature hat now. Good chapter LaBib (as always)!
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  • From ANON - pittwitch on April 20, 2008
    AAAAAAAAARRRRRRGGGGGGHHHHHHH ... so close, so close, so close!

    And yet so far.

    I'll be checking back daily now! DAILY I said. :)
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  • From Scarybearhair on April 20, 2008
    Aw LaBib, this was another lovely chapter! Yay! I love this story so much. You just don
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  • From Clare1984 on April 20, 2008
    another ace chapter. Ooh that tension between the two of them is just so... yum! I was wondering how the mechanics of the situation were gonna happen even as I was drooling at the thought of Lucius standing there looking so scrumptious.

    God, I hope they find Diagon Alley easily cos that candlelit meal is gonna be good.

    btw, thanks for that pic. I can just see Lucius decked out in all that, his pants tight across that gorgeous bum... and other areas! hmm, does drool make your computer malfunction? better go clean that up and bide my time till the next chapter.
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  • From Utopia on April 20, 2008
    I laughed at the 'duck' moment too, gotta love dyslexia - fiction is never boring when I have 'one of those days'. *giggles*

    Tampons! You know your bloke loves you when he goes on a "sanatory run" to the shops! My other half did that for me, then phoned me from the supermarket uttlery baffled by the sheer choice of product! I told him to get the ones in the green box - evidently there were six companies with green packaging! Bless him! lol. Though, that time of the month isn't going to be pretty for Hermione now; even my Gran didn't have such "modern wonders" when she was a teen! It was a folded towel-thingy on a sort of looped system on a belt at the waist! Unless Hermione is the kinda prepared girl with one in her pocket for emergencies or can transfigure something, she's in for a bit of a learning curve!

    She could always tame his libido with a cock ring that he can't magic off... he might learn a lesson then? *evil laugh: muhahahahahaaaaaa*

    The dress Hermione is wearing reminds me of the style I used to wear to school in Summer! But mine was blue and white. She screams innocence - and that's probably even more of a turn-on for Lucius. She's turning him on and not even realising - an aphrodisiac all of its own!

    Those 'take me, take me' bodily urges are a pain! They normally occur right when you don't want them to! Like in restaurants during candlelit dinners for 2. Poor Hermione... she's got no chance.

    You know, Lucius's comment about hair is really intriguing. I also have hair that quite simply WON'T curl - even the best tong-created curls drop out after an hour. And I can't be bothered with a perm. Yet, my other half absoulutely goes NUTS for me with even kinky hair, and the one time I managed to get the curls to stay in (with the help of a whole can of hair spray) he went WILD. I think you have a point with that... *ponders*

    Lucius! Good grief! you can have sex and your arse not be touched! What's wrong with face to face whilst laying on one side? It's the most sensual position as you can look into each other's eyes... though is that too close for them?

    10/10
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  • From Heidi191976 on April 20, 2008
    Another great chapter. I can't wait to read more.
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  • From LadyBlueEyes on April 20, 2008
    oooh, i smell lemons ahead!! laughed out loud at the line "Lucius was watching her like a hippogriff eyeing a very tasty ferret" great reference there. i am thoroughly enjoying this story and can't wait for more!!
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  • From angelprince on April 20, 2008
    Reviewing as promised.

    Man, this is intense. I can't say I've read anything else like it. Loves it.

    Are you aware I live in New Zealand? There's about 5 sheep to every human being in this country. I must say that thought now makes me a tad nervous. LOL.

    Looking forward to seeing what's beyond the veil.
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  • From ANON - jw on April 20, 2008
    ch 13 -14 - Hermione should know better than to expect that she can walk unescorted; she needs him or a maid with her. hmm, perhaps he can take her to the bordello, and the "workers" can tell her how much better Lucius is than their old "employer." perhaps he is shielding her from too much knowledge, like the children he freed from the brothel. good thing he talked bluntly with her about the damage those two blokes did to her; ten years of self-hatred was not healthy for her. I'm very much looking forward to reading about your Regency version of Diagon Alley. thanks for the new chapters!
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  • From ANON - Rini on April 20, 2008
    *Waves back enthusiastically*

    Blast! Of course it would be their sore bums that prevent them from having sex
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  • From tambrathegreat on April 20, 2008
    Ten Years! TEN YEARS!! Oh, please be a kind author and let Hermione get some relief in the next chapter. I loved how Hermione was convinced. Lucius is such a Slytherin, an Oh So Sexy Slytherin.
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