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Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe

From ANON - pittwitch on April 08, 2008
Okay, Enquiring Minds must know: Is Lucius going to teach Hermione the Death Eater wisp o' smoke apparation thing? Or something better?!?

I'd like a little more Know-it-all expounding on what Hermione expects from her escort ... and how our proper aristocrat should treat a lady.

And, just what other tidbits of Death Eater trivia are we going to be privvy to, eh?

Well, now, Hermione realizes Lucius is horny, and she's obviously horny. Can mutual satisfaction be far away? And a delicious little slice of GREEN apple pie for Miss Hermione as well. Not wanting to share a blond Lucius ...

That wasn't a very nice place to leave a reader hanging there ... an angry, horny Lucius. My dreams will be disturbed for days, at least until you update, dear!

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From Damiana on April 07, 2008
Chapter 11

Hmm I wonder if Lucius' assumption that the Forbidden Forest is correct. Is it really the same as it is in his memory...
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From ANON - jw on April 06, 2008
ch 9-11 - I love the way you keep Lucius as Lucius, rather than making him into a cupcake. I hope Hermione confronts him about the whore's "perfume" she smelled on him, as I think he'll be tickled that she was upset about it. Glad he was able to send the kiddies back home, and with enough money to have a small start on a new life. It was great for you to weave his Death Eater experience into his use of the Forbidden Forest. I'm still waiting for him to realize that Malfoy Manor is inhabited by family. Thanks for the new chapters! BTW, where in California are you? I'm in Bay Area.
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From Scarybearhair on April 04, 2008
Aw LaBib, I hope you get to feeling better. :-(
Thank you for updating though. :-)

This was a wonderful chapter by the way. Again I was laughing at the bickering going on back and forth between Lucius and Hermione. Hermione admonishes Lucius for his
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From sheherazade on April 04, 2008
Uh oh, where's Hermione? Methinks Lucius' ire might be rising...I wonder what might happen next?

I like Lucius being on edge around Hermione and their awkward skirting around the edge of the issue. And the unpleasant side-effects of the Petrificus Totalus - one of those things that's obvious when you think about it, but it takes real imagination to actually do that in the first place.

I wonder if the Giants still have their old seven-league-boots, or are they 21-mile-boots now?
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From chickaboo on April 04, 2008
Psssst! I think you forgot the end of the chapter. You see? Just there? You left it....a cliffhanger. lol Great update! I can't wait for more! And I especially can't wait for the "erotic side benefits". hehehe.... Hope you update again soon!
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From StarKneazle on April 04, 2008
So uh....you're gonna update soon and it's going to be positively brillant, just like everything else that's been in this story, right?

Yeah, I knew you were.
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From QueenofPutrescense on April 04, 2008
Nooooo..... oh, you are too cruel! But such a good writer!
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From LadyBlueEyes on April 03, 2008
I have to say that all this unresolved sexual tension is killing me.... please, some lemons soon? I like how they both are becoming more reliant on having the other around. I also enjoy the fact that you are incorporating more of the vernacular (ooh, big word...there should be extra lemoms for my use of that word!) of the time they are caught up in. i do have a question though, i'm not sure if you explained it in a past chapter so forgive me if you have and i wasn't paying attention.... Lucius brought the stinky bad guys out to the Forbidden Forest. If the Forbidden Forest is close to them and the forest is also located near Hogwarts and Hogwarts is a very old school......does this mean they are also near Hogwarts and perhaps they haven't realized this yet? i hope that wasn't too confusing...lol. actually, i hope the question even made sense. anyway, keep up the excellent job, i very much anticipating finding out exactly what it is that lUcius is about to do...

LadyBlueEyes
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From blueartemis on April 03, 2008
I liked the chapter. Lucius must have a very sensitive nose, to smell Hermione's arousal. And the cliffie was evil.
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From Heidi191976 on April 03, 2008
Another great chapter. I can't wait to read more soon.
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From Phreakdom on April 03, 2008
I only hope Lucius doesn't dig himself into a hole he can't get out of. It'll be interesting to see how things play out, especially in regards to Lucius' proprietary attitude towards Hermione. Very nice chapter, cliffhanger and all!
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From ANON - Coraline on April 03, 2008
OMG yes another chapter, and what a chapter!!! Gods I just love all of your stories and it's sometimes too hard to wait for another chapter of your AMAZING stories!!!

And a cliff-hanger, GARRRGHHHHH OMG, no but I love it and I get ridiculesly happy everytime a new chap. is up!!

Ahhh I'll return to my lurking position now, just thought I'd let you know how much I am loveing every bit of the ride you are taking us on ;D
Another great ride, from a fantastic writer!!!
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From Citten on April 03, 2008
okay good chapter, but you just left us that is so not fair!!! cant you post another chapter-like soon?! like now, today, etc. :) where did our sweet hermione go and what is he going to do when he finds her?
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From Utopia on March 28, 2008
YOU!

I had to walk away from my computer because I was laughing so hard and almost short circuited it by spitting my tea over it!

He he:
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