Click Here!

Reviews for Beyond the Veil -- COMPLETE

By : LaBibliographe
  • From Scarybearhair on February 27, 2008
    This was lovely LaBib! I am enjoying reading this story so much. :D Since we are both writing historical stories, I see from reading your story, what is lacking in mine. Spectacular job! I am envious. Lol

    I love how you are portraying Lucius. He is so aristocratic in bearing that everyone is doing a double-take, wondering why he is in shabby clothes. They probably assume he was disinterred from a rich family. He will need to come into his wealth quickly though, for he is insufferably arrogant as a poor man. I love it though. I also love how he is so enduringly protective over Hermione. I could see him even fighting a duel for her. (sigh) lol :D

    Again I love all your description. I can see their shabby room so well. I was relieved though that their bed didn
    Report Review

  • From LadyVoldemort87 on February 27, 2008
    Oh come on lucius....you know you want her

    silly hermione, just jump on the sexiest of all slytherins!
    Report Review

  • From LadyBlueEyes on February 27, 2008
    another wonderful chapter...my favorite sentence by far had to do with ..."the semi in his trousers." i don't know why but it definitely made me smile. i also like the mythology references as well as the use of the speech of the time period they are in. looking forward to more.....
    Report Review

  • From sheherazade on February 27, 2008
    Hilarious chapter! First I was laughing out loud at the vision of Lucius ascending the staircase in the hovel as if ascending to the throne for his coronation. Then the idea of them magically speaking in ye olde vernacular without knowing what it means - priceless, and so clever. As for the tight pantaloons and the erection being privy to all - guffaw! That reminded me of a certain pious vulture of the law.

    And now we have the classic enforced-sleeping-together scenario...oh, I do like those so very much. Heh.

    I hope Lucius doesn't make it to the brothel though, even though I loved that 'pounding away at the merchandise' phrase.
    Report Review

  • From Kooldragon400 on February 27, 2008
    I enjoy this story more each time I read it. It fascinates me, and I like being fascinated.

    I can't wait to see why they are using the old-fhasioned vernacular instead of their own! That will prove to be a good twist of the tail in itself. Update soon, I'l be waiting! ^_^
    Report Review

  • From ladyravenna on February 27, 2008
    I think there's a gradual understanding settling between Hermione and Lucius. And I find it amusing that they are both starting to talk in the new world's lingo. It's sort of amusing. I see that you edited the title to include comedy drama, I think it should be a dramedy. LOL. It sounds better to my ears.
    Report Review

  • From tambrathegreat on February 26, 2008
    Yes, a French accentwould definately cause some consternation. I loved how hot a bothered Lucius was throughout the chapter. Maybe they could both do with some R&R. Fun chapter. I'll check more faithfully from now on.
    Report Review

  • From tambrathegreat on February 26, 2008
    Gosh, I feel so bad for not checking more often. Great job on the Lucius Hermione banter. I loved that the farmer's wife was alarmed at his French. Trust Malfoy to use that accent for subterfuge. If it's the past, in the eighteenth c. the English weren't too fond of the French, and the future.. Who knows? love the chapter.
    Report Review

  • From LadyFabulous on February 24, 2008
    WOW! I'm loving this story. I love all the stuff you write, however this one is of particular interest to me because I love the 'back in time' spin! I can't wait to read the next chapter! I'm sure Lucius will be rich again in no time and will most likely become the fantasy of all the local women. I'm looking forward to Hermione proving her worth and taking control of the situation... I'd like to see her reaction; should Lucius visit a brothel! UPDATE SOON!
    Report Review

  • From goldspleen on February 23, 2008
    hi:) end in such a beautiful moment, when they're renting a room, who knows what can happen... you're torturing me.
    Just put them it bed together and relieve my suffering... ;P And seriously, I love it, the tension between them, and funny quotes of Lucius, (I giggled few times), I'm waiting for some more
    Great job
    Regards

    J.L.K.
    Report Review

  • From sheherazade on February 23, 2008
    I absolutely loved this - you have captured the flavour of Regency London just as I imagine it, with the rickety slums, the smells, the bawdiness and all. And your vocabulary was hitting the spot time after time - 'greensward', 'animadversion', 'appurtenances'. Lovely.

    I love the labyrinthine workings of Lucius' mind in this, and how the acquisition of wealth is his first priority. I hope Hermione knows her Muggle history (I'm sure she does), because Lucius ought to realise she could be a valuable asset in this foreign time and place.

    Laughed at the woman dropping her handkerchief in his path - who wouldn't?

    This is shaping up to be a great big gooey gorgeous read; thou knowest I love period pieces, and this is one of the best I've read in ages. Keep the dice games flowing (and I hope Lucius finds a high-class brothel to patronise; wouldn't want him to catch anything nasty).

    (I'm late reviewing, so somebody has probably already picked up on this, but the expression is 'shabby-genteel' rather than gentile ;) ).
    Report Review

  • From blueartemis on February 23, 2008
    That was a fascinating look at the past.
    Report Review

  • From Scarybearhair on February 22, 2008
    Oh LaBib I love this story so much! I want to read it all now!!! Lol

    Really you write so divine. I am always so flattered that you like my stories because you are absolutely the bomb!!! Your Lucius is so well drawn, I just want to crawl into bed with him and help him with his poor arousal problem. Poor guy. LOL
    I love it! Of course it sounds like most of the female population of London wants to help him with this problem as well. Indeed, I could just feel the sexual energy just buzzing around him, his masterful presence making all the girls swoon. He truly is a scoundrel and I love it. The woman with the handkerchief had me laughing. :D

    Now as to your descriptions, the sites and smells of Regency London just come alive in your prose. Really I feel like I am there, experiencing this along with Hermione and Lucius.

    I also love how you write the prickly relationship between Lucius and Hermione, which is just brimming with sexual tension. I agree with FlowersBecomeScreens about that hilarious paragraph where Lucius tells Hermione
    Report Review

  • From ANON - pittwitch on February 22, 2008
    Popinjay ... so Lucius!

    I love a good historical tale as well as a well-built, under-satisfied Lucius looking for a way to be sated.
    As always, your tale shall do nicely.

    Thanks for sharing, Pitt
    Report Review

  • From Damiana on February 22, 2008
    Chapter 5!

    Happy to oblige with the typos. You are usually so well edited that it's easy to point it out when they occur. (Part of the pleasure of reading your work involves my not having the urge to restructure your sentences...that and your lovely vocabulary!)

    Speaking of vocabulary...Popinjay! Yay!

    "the female population responding to his masculinity almost hypnotically" Hehehe! They would wouldn't they...

    Another lovely chapter! Hmm...I wonder if there is a breaking point in terms of libido...you know maybe after a few years you sort of forget what it was really like to touch a flesh and blood person other than yourself. Will Lucius be a somewhat awkward lover at first or is having sex like riding a bike?
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!