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Reviews for The Lion and the Serpent

By : emilywaters
  • From SoftObsidian74 on February 12, 2008
    Um, wow, I didn't see that coming. Calixa is oblivating him after conversations..lord knows what they're talking about or even DOING. They're fucking? It would be very interesting to see if Draco regains his full confidence and former snide snarky personality while bonded to harry. They'll be a major fight to be had, and I think Draco would lose. This is getting really suspenseful.
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  • From Poppendol on February 12, 2008
    Sorry not to have reviewed again until now, but you're updating so quickly. Which is really, really nice. And the plot thickens nicely, curious as to much of the conversation Harry actually overheard.... Please keep it up.
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  • From QueenB on February 12, 2008
    Ch. 15 Things have taken an awful turn at Hogwarts. It's a wonder Harry doesn't see it. Maybe Draco could go to Hermione and tell her and she can inform Harry. Still, he doesn't seem to be listening to his only friend's advice any longer. It's a real mess and associating with Miss Cain isn't going to solve it.
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  • From QueenB on February 12, 2008
    Ch. 14 Chiding Draco to live is one thing. Encouraging him to get involved in another conflict is something else. He should tell Calixa to shove her plans where the sun doesn't shine and to look at his damned mark again if she thinks raising the Slytherins is such a great idea.
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  • From thrnbrooke on February 12, 2008
    Oh Harry! You may just be helping in your downfall! Soo need chapter 16!
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  • From SoftObsidian74 on February 11, 2008
    Hmm...interesting. Harry encouraging Draco to visit the Cain girl. I think Harry knows what's up with her and is luring her with Draco as bait! draco better watch is back either way. So cute, the candle light dinner and him trying to piss Harry off. Does he crave Harry's touch or the punishment or both? I like how you described how the houses have changed, makes sense. It's amazing what top level influence can do to the structure and character of a place and the people who inhabit it. By the way, lovely poem you used in the previous chapter. Did you write that? still loving this story...can't wait until the next chapter!
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  • From SoftObsidian74 on February 11, 2008
    OK, now I'm torn about this chick Calixa...she makes some good points...I don't know. I still think she's evil though...but going out with dignity and fighting is the best way to live and die...we'll see. Cute ending to the chapter, with Hermione and Draco laughing...poor Harry, he needs help.
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  • From LarienMiriel on February 11, 2008
    your a bit of a speed demon you know that? every time i come on to this section you've got up another chapter, and i must say your rather good! keep it up, i want to know if things will change between harry and draco or even if things get even more 'interesting' ^-^
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  • From thrnbrooke on February 11, 2008
    Sooo need chapter 14!
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  • From QueenB on February 11, 2008
    Ch. 13 The healing word comes from Asclepius, the Greek demigod, son of Apollo, who became a famous skilled surgeon. The main attribute of Asclepius is a physician's staff with an Asclepian snake wrapped around it; this is how he was distinguished in the art of healing, and his attribute still survives to this day as the symbol of the modern medical profession (have to love the irony of a serpent as a sign of healing).

    That Ms. Cain makes me nervous. Maybe she's being a typical Slytherin or maybe she's affected by the dust of Voldemort that's touching everyone like fallout. But when she called Hermione a mudblood and spoke of raising Slytherin to its former glory, I didn't like it one bit.

    Isn't that the way the old Draco used to talk and believe? I can accept that his wish to survive and his deep loneliness would make him seek her out as a friend. But he ought to remember that she's a SLYTHERIN first and foremost. Her primary loyalty is to herself; she confessed as much when she told him that she witnessed his abuse prior to his slavery to Harry and did nothing to help him or stop it. She's ambitious and prejudiced and that makes her dangerous. If his instincts of survival are still intact, then he'd better not trust her.

    Harry has become scary too. Hermione is there as the voice of reason, warning him that he's sliding into evil ways. But she's not enough. As Harry stated, Ron was an important and integral part of his inner circle. Without his boisterous, good-natured ways and his stolid friendship as support, Harry's left with the priggish, self-righteous Granger who can lecture but not control him.

    Harry has been tainted by his battle with Voldemort. But it's not necessarily a bad thing. He's grown up and become more clear-sighted as a result; he knows now that the world isn't black and white but shades of gray. His lecture to his students proves this. The fact that he lives in such Spartan settings means that he's not interested in glory, wealth or world domination. He simply wants to keep the world safe from Voldemort, who he still recognizes as a lethal threat.

    Harry understands that he's got to walk that line. But he is suffering in a way very similar to Draco. Going without real food or sleep will drag under anyone, even the Lion of Gryffindor. Unless he can get himself under control, falling is a real possibility. Harry needs help. He just needs to accept that and see where he can get it.

    Your story illustrates all of this. It is masterfully written and charged with suspense. Unlike many other slave fics, there is reason and order underlying the brutality and that makes it a thrilling read. I look forward to future chapters.
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  • From cameowitch on February 11, 2008
    You're doing a great job on something that is slightly disturbing to see Harry in this vein. I'm hanging in there in hopes that, well, let's say I believe in Happy Endings. Maybe the two can help each other and Hermione can pull Harry's head out of his arse. Good work, I look forward to more.
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  • From thrnbrooke on February 11, 2008
    So Voldemort can't use the claim? So the mark is null? Or he can't take it over? I sooo need more!
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  • From SoftObsidian74 on February 11, 2008
    Interesting notion about Dark Magic being used for good or at least to ward against other Dark Magic and control it. Harry's got to be slightly off his rocker to do that to himself though.

    Feedback? Still great writing on your part. No, Harry isn't written as a one sided caricature like many dark fics paint him. I felt his rage though when he was speaking to Hermione. That was harsh...what's amazing is that Hermione is taking it. She must want him bad or either she's just given up fighting him too much but I guess Harry is right he has the law and everyone else on his side. I saw the complexity and ambiguity about what he was doing when he was telling Draco what was about to happen. If he was truly a sadist he would have just taken Draco without warning and he wouldn't have healed him. It's also nice he's allowing Draco a friend, although it's too bad it's Ms. Cain because that bitch is gonna try to bring Harry down. Which actually may be good for him but I don't like her one bit, even if she's nice to Draco. OK, I'm rambling...that means I really liked this chapter.
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  • From bananasforyou on February 10, 2008
    wow i hate lucius now!
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  • From SoftObsidian74 on February 10, 2008
    DAMN! Harry really is dark...he did that to himself..only in the shape of a Gryffindor Lion? Very cool and scary. So he has to rape Draco? This is gonna get more disturbing by the minute it seems...Poor poor Draco. Lucius is so cruel...it was interesting that Harry didn't seem to care that Draco didn't take the mark willingly..maybe he's still so jaded about his own childhood and anger over Ron's death that he can't care anymore. This is so riveting..
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