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Reviews for Mountain Château

By : FelineKitten
  • From LondonMarie on May 08, 2008
    *HUGS* YAY and Update. I hope you have another one soon. :)
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  • From FelineKitten on May 08, 2008
    I'd email you of the update luvhp,
    but i didn't have your email so
    I'll hope you just check in soon.

    Enjoy :)
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  • From luvhp on April 08, 2008
    Holy hell, forget any plot, this si strictly PWP! LOVE IT! Please email me when you update this wonderful erotic story!
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  • From WritingInTheDarkness on March 20, 2008
    I loved it, you should make Draco possessive. I'll be waiting for the next chapter...


    Nobody
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  • From prettypinkpony on March 11, 2008
    Grrrr. What a place to stop. You are such a damn tease...and I love it. Def. cant wait for the next chappie now.


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  • From jenamalone on March 10, 2008
    that is so hot,u gotta post the next chapter!
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  • From joeshmo on March 09, 2008
    NOOO! update asap!
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  • From FelineKitten on February 17, 2008
    Oops. I have a problem with spelling. I'm very sorry.
    I'll make sure i go through it over and over to make it makes sense
    and that words are right.
    Thanks Utopia.
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  • From Utopia on February 17, 2008
    last bit 'Patients' is the type going to a Doctor's surgery, I think you were looking for patience? Don't worry, homophones (words that sound the same, but have different spellings and meanings) are quite common, and a spell check won't pick them up because it only looks at words, not the context of a sentence.

    The formatting in this was wonderfully better - I could read this with no problem! The previous formatting was Hell on my dyslexia!

    So, we know how Hermione won the trip, something like being the 1'000'000th buyer of something? and was spirited away to the chateau.

    This looks better and better, but be careful with the upcoming smut - first time smut is a b**ch to write as it doesn't really follow any clear pattern like experienced smut can. Try and keep it realistic.
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  • From bananasforyou on February 16, 2008
    please i need more!
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  • From mariecke22 on February 16, 2008
    hot hot hot hot!! pleasssssseeee update soon!

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  • From jaimelee on February 16, 2008
    Excellent start... I really liked that it seemed she and Draco had never argued. It makes for a much more mysterious start for all of them. The foreplay was really hot! I can't wait till you get to the actual deed... please update soon!!
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  • From Utopia on February 16, 2008
    This fic has GREAT promise, but it is a nightmare to read; please don't take what I'm going to say as an insult, but as constructive criticism and advice!

    Your paragraphs are huge and that can be rather off-putting to a lot of people (I had to have a lot of determination to read to the end, and I had to read it twice to get the gist of it), try and split the monster paragraphs into smaller ones with lines between - it really helps a reader and makes your fic easier to access and understand.

    Another issue is that new speakers (and thoughts) aren't on completely new lines, following the conversation and thought is hard in this. And really, thoughts should be in ' marks and speech in " marks, lots of novels only use ' for speech, but thoughts shouldn't be in ".

    Its a html code once you've posted to add lines, just copy the code from previously in the text to insert new lines, pressing return won't work once it is posted.

    Right, onto the plot now the technicalities are out of the way... this is wonderfully unique - and I'm a huge fan of an original plot or idea, fanfiction sees far too many cliches for its own good. What did Hermione win to end up on the trip? Was it a competition, or did she open a box of cereal and find a golden ticket? I presume she didn't really know Draco and Blaise during Hogwarts, but perhaps wanted them from afar.

    Keep up the good work and have a little play with the formatting; I'd also like to suggest finding a beta reader to go through a fic with a fine toothed comb before its posted to weedle out the errors.

    THIS IS A BRILLIANT IDEA, but it needs a bit of work.
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  • From prettypinkpony on February 16, 2008
    I really liked this chappie but I think the chapters should be longer...but then I always think that about stories I like. How hot was the dancing. Dayam. *fans self* I think I need a drink now as my throat is so dry from all that panting that chapter made me do. SOOOO HOT. Nellie
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  • From prettypinkpony on February 16, 2008
    Damn Alarm indeed. Oh how I hate when that happens. message e when you update please noonienoodles@yahoo.com.au

    Cant wait for what happens in the coming chappies
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