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Reviews for Harry Potter and the Surprise Package

By : KingSplooge111

From ANON - SilverStorm on September 25, 2012
Oh, I forgot to mention that this was highly disturbing. I had thought it was going to be a fun story. You are a good author and this was well written but it was very seriously disturbing.
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From ANON - SilverStorm on September 25, 2012
I think the only thing that is safe to say here is: OMG!
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From ANON - Anon on January 15, 2010
Would you please add a non-con warning to this? I understand you feel this is just kinky sex, but it's seriously non-con and I for one was badly surprised by it since your summary gives absolutely no warning.
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From Lilac on July 03, 2008
Scary.... but to each his own... : )
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From ANON - yeniferr on July 03, 2008
Yeah... um this thing was ONLY kinky. Not just vile and disgusting and just... ugh. I think that TECHNICALLY this is slash...

And in most (meaning all) the warning is at the top of the page or the summary.

Oh, and I commend your sick and perverse for having come up with something so creatively revolting. It says a lot about you and what YOU do in the bedroom.
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From Utopia on June 23, 2008
This needs APPROPRIATE warnings. Your warnings of 'Anal, oral and PWP' don't REMOTELY cover it.

I am, to use your words, 'into' H/Hr - but I CANNOT say this was delicious - more accurately it put me off my food. You have essentially lied to the people who read it by not providing a half-decent summary and a lack of appropriate warnings.

HAD there been something warning me of the content, I wouldn't have bothered to read it. I suggest you put up firmer warnings and add a paragraph at the beginning of chapter 1 to further warn people of the content.
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From ANON - Creamy tasty shit on June 18, 2008
Yeah! I love that shit. Pleaze let Ron bugger Harry up his arse and then let Harry lick his own shit from Rons dick. And then maybe Hermione can shit on the two boys and then they can all eat that creamy shit together. Harry then should put his foot really deep up Hermiones arse, so that he is not fisting her, but footing her. Maybe even Harrys foot and Rons dick the same time up Hermiones arse. I really thing that Ron is a foot fetishist and would cum really hard on Harrys foot up in Hermiones arse. Yeah. I love your story. It's so fucking incredible. The best fucking story I've ever ever read. I've never read a better story. Maybe it is because it is the first one that I ever read, but I think I will never read a better story too. To be sure, I will never read another story again. This is so incredible. So fucking incredible. I love that shit really hard. Please write more of that shit. Please put Ron's creamy shitty dick up Harrys mouth, after it was up his arse. And than let Ron go to Hermione to fist her up her tight little fucking cunt. It's a shame that Seamus got her first. Because I would have loved it, if Hermione were a virgin and bleeding like a cut of pig. Harry could have licked that warm and tasty virgin blood. But maybe you can make her bleeding from her monthly bleeding. Harry could lick it and taste it. That creamy blood. He could smear it all over Ron's body and then up his arse. And than maybe draco could stumble about them too. He could come with his broomstick (pun intended) and put that thing up Harrys and Ron's and Hermione's arse and then lick their shit. I think Draco would love to lick their shit, as he really is a shit fetishist. Why would he be with Crabbe and Goyle, if not for that? Maybe even get Hagrid to the quidditch pitch. I thing the half-giant would love to bugger the three guys with his huge half-giant cock. Yeah. What a incredible fucking good tasting story. But ... there are always some golden showers. I thing Ron should pee up to hagrids mouth. As I thing that Hagrid is a pee fetishist. Buckbeak could also make an appearance and could be buggered by Hagrid. And I would love to read about Macgannagol in her cat form and her and Hagrid together. She would be so tight for him and his half-giant cock. Imagine. Macgannagol in cat form. She is so small. So sweet. I think Draco could not be stoped to bugger her up her cat arse to. But don't forget to include filch. He is the cat fetishist and would love to fuck Macgannagol up her arse. Hagrid than could lick that shit from Filchs dick. I would love to see that happen. Yeah, I love your fucking story. It is so incredible good. Best shit I have ever read. I love such shit storys. Shit in storys is always good. And your story has a lot of that. But it could have so much more of that shit. It's easy to write. I thing my suggestions are really good for your story. Maybe we could co-write it together. I can give you so much ideas about shit in storys, that is even better than your shit in this story. Yeah. Dude ... no ... thats not right. You are girls, right? Yeah, girls. I love your shit. Maybe even some action with the giant squid. That would be really awesome. Norbert could come back to. Than you have even dragon shit in your story. As Hagrid is a fucking Dragon fetishist, he would love to bugger Norbert up that giant arse. Hagrid could swimm in dragon shit. He would love it. I would love it. And I know, that you would love to write that too. This story is so hot already. It makes me wanna cum over my keyboard. Oh ... yeah. Shit. Now i have to stop writing this shit, because my keyboard is all slimy. But I don't want to stop. There are so much more ideas up my arse. no. thats not right. It is up my brain. So much more ideas. What do you thing about some action with inferys and maybe even with dumbledore as an infery. Yeah. Macgannagol and Dumbledore. So much shit is possible. I would love to see dumbledore as an infery as he is licking some blood from Macgannagol's creamy and tasty pussy. That could be so good. That would be so good. I would pay you some cents to write that shit for my. I'm not so good with writing. I know, that you are not so much better, but better is better and you could write that creamy shit much better than I. But I love to give you even more ideas. There is so much more shit up my arse. No... up my brain. I want to put it all out on you so that you can write more of this tasty bloody shit. I want to lick that shit. It's all in the imagination. Yeah. I love it, dude. Girls. This shit is so creamy and tasty. I love it. There is no other word for that as love. This is so good. Creamy shit. Gimme more of that. And please some monthly bleeding of Draco. No. Hermione is the girl in this story. But ... this is the best idea ever. Make Draco mpreged by Hagrid. That would be fucking awesome. Best idea ever. A shit covered baby up in dracos arse with Hagrid as the father and Draco as a mother. What a awesome shit. I love it. My ideas are so bubbly in my head. They have to get out, so you can write about them. Maybe Ron can get mpreged by Dumbledore. I think that would be really awesome. And than Ron is licking the shit of Dumbledores dick, which was up that dragon arse. Awesome. I love it. We are such a good team. You gave me such a good sudden inspirations with your story. It is awesome. Just awesome. We are a good team. My ideas and you are writing them down. Yeah. I love it. Maybe a crossover would be good too. If read about a german schei
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From windbell on June 13, 2008
Sorry to say but it's not H/Hr fic if you have many things likes the other boys're raped in here. You should move it to Threesome fandom since it looks like Hermione doesn't going to sleep with Harry.

It makes me feel sick too in the last part of chapter 2
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From ANON - Hedwig7 on June 06, 2008
lmao

Poor Harry, poor Ron...poor everybody. Hermione and her army of cocks will get the school. First Hogwarts..then the world!
xP
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From ziggygirl2003 on June 05, 2008
Yeah, I didn't really read this story, since this kind of thing is kinda off putting to me, but I thought it was kinda funny that the name of the guy who wrote the book about the meat was just 'gay faggot' backwards.
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From ANON - Josh on June 03, 2008
OMG! I totally agree with the previous reviwer, i thought this was going to be a fun H/Hr smut to read, but it turn out to be so disgusting and sick. I regret even clicking to read this story in the first place.
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From OliversBludger on June 01, 2008
This was a little bit disgusting and it kind of made my stomach churn.

Graphic violence and ickiness aside, you do write well. And it is a very original story. Good work on those aspects! :-)
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From egb67 on May 31, 2008
F*cking sick story.
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From serenagold on May 31, 2008
what the hell>>> ((O_O))

I mean what. the. hell??!!

(Although I commend you for flipping the story around 180 and turning it into a rape filled sci-fi horror-fest. Highly amusing, if not slightly outputing. hehehe)
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From ANON - Draco is a fucking gay who wants to fuck is own father on May 30, 2008
ROFL. What an incredible piece of shit.
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